MIL SAKA NA HAQ HAME - SARVESH RASTOGI - GHAZAL

by SARVESH RASTOGI on July 20, 2009, 08:35:51 AM
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«Reply #30 on: September 01, 2009, 02:05:10 PM »
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Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause
bahut hi accha
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«Reply #31 on: September 02, 2009, 08:15:26 AM »
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Quote from: -Saahil- on September 01, 2009, 10:15:32 AM
bahut achche bade bhai
bada hi maarmik varnan kiya hai aapne
aise hi likhte rahe

Bahut bahut shukriya Saahil Saheb
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«Reply #32 on: September 03, 2009, 08:54:51 AM »
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Quote from: SARVESH RASTOGI on July 20, 2009, 08:35:51 AM
DEKHTE RAHE KALES UMRA BHAR BADE BADE
MIL SAKA NA HAQ HAME KABHI KAHIN BINA LADE

DOSTON KE SAR PE NASIBON NE CHHATRA-CHHAON KI
HUM GHAMON KI DHOOP ME TAPTE RAHE KHADE KHADE

DO DINO KE BAAD WOHI HUMSE LADNE AA GAYE
AAJ JINKE VASTE INSAAF KI KHATIR LADE

UNCHA UTHKE HUMKO HIKAARAT SE DEKHTE RAHE
JO HAMARE KANDHON PE RAKH PAAON SIDIYAN CHADHE

ZINDAGI BASAR HUI SANGHARSH HI SANGHARSH ME
MAUT KE LIYE KAHIN SANGHARSH NA KARNA PADE

SARVESH RASTOGI
sarveshrastogi1960@yahoo.co.uk
PHONE 9810391523

देखते रहे कलेस उम्र भर बड़े बड़े
मिल सका न हक हमें कभी कहीं बिना लड़े

दोस्तों के सर पे नसीबों ने छत्र-छांव की
हम ग़मों की धूप में तपते रहे खड़े खड़े

दो दिनों के बाद वही हमसे लड़ने आ गए
आज जिनके वास्ते इंसाफ की खातिर लड़े

ऊँचा उठके हमको हिकारत से देखते रहे
जो हमारे कांधों  पे रख पाँव सीडियाँ चढ़े

जिंदगी बसर हुई संघर्ष ही संघर्ष में
मौत के लिए कहीं संघर्ष न करना पड़े
Ghaza ka diction achchaa hai. Aik khoobsurat sujhao aapko ye dena chahta hun ki agar ye ghazal bahr mein ho jaye to phir chaar chaand lag jaye. Aapke andar ghazal kahne ki saari khubiyaaN hain bas zara bahr mein ho to phir kya kahne. Waise ye ghazal bahr: failatun-failatun-failatun-failun par adharit hai. Agar is sujhao se aapko bura lage to please bande ko maaf kar dijiyega. Baqi bahut khoob hai.
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«Reply #33 on: September 05, 2009, 03:52:16 PM »
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Quote from: thegrimreaper on September 01, 2009, 02:05:10 PM
Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause
bahut hi accha

Bahut bahut shukriya Reaper saheb
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«Reply #34 on: September 20, 2009, 01:48:30 PM »
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 Applause Applause Applause

bahut umda sarvesh ji...
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«Reply #35 on: September 22, 2009, 05:35:50 AM »
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Quote from: waquif ansari on September 03, 2009, 08:54:51 AM
Ghaza ka diction achchaa hai. Aik khoobsurat sujhao aapko ye dena chahta hun ki agar ye ghazal bahr mein ho jaye to phir chaar chaand lag jaye. Aapke andar ghazal kahne ki saari khubiyaaN hain bas zara bahr mein ho to phir kya kahne. Waise ye ghazal bahr: failatun-failatun-failatun-failun par adharit hai. Agar is sujhao se aapko bura lage to please bande ko maaf kar dijiyega. Baqi bahut khoob hai.

Bahut bahut shukriya Ansari Saheb.  Aapne apne chand lafzon se jo himmat badhai main uska shukraguzar hun aur koshish rahegi ki ghazal writing me aur sudhar kiya ja sake.  Bura lagane ka to koi sawal hi nahin kyonki sujhao to jaankar aur shaukeen aadmi hi de sakta hai.  Aap jaankar bhi hain aur ghazal ke shaukeen bhi, aapse message pakar khushi ho rahi hai. 
Ghazal section me meri darjanon ghazals aapki tavajjo ki khwaishmand hain.  Mauka lage to dekhiye aur apni rai bataiye. 
Thanks a lot once again.
SARVESH RASTOGI
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«Reply #36 on: September 24, 2009, 06:18:57 AM »
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Quote from: Vikk on September 20, 2009, 01:48:30 PM
Applause Applause Applause

bahut umda sarvesh ji...

Bahut bahut shukriya Vikk Saheb
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«Reply #37 on: November 21, 2009, 11:24:22 AM »
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BAHUT BAHUT SHUKRIYA
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«Reply #38 on: February 23, 2010, 02:26:35 PM »
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Quote from: Vikk on September 20, 2009, 01:48:30 PM
Applause Applause Applause

bahut umda sarvesh ji...

Thanks a lot Vikk Ji
I am grateful
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«Reply #39 on: July 08, 2010, 08:32:50 AM »
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Thanks a lot Reaper Ji
Sorry for delay in reply
Inayat banaye rakhen
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«Reply #40 on: October 06, 2013, 09:07:10 PM »
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Bahut bahut shukriya Jasbir ji
Jawab dene me der hui, sorry for that.
Regards.
SARVESH RASTOGI

Quote from: jasbirsingh on July 21, 2009, 03:46:49 PM
wah wah Rastogi ji, bahut hi khoob

Jasbir Singh
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«Reply #41 on: October 14, 2013, 07:18:28 PM »
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Sarvesh ji , bahut khubsurat ashaar ki yeh ghazal padhne ka mouqa mila . Bahut bahut mubarakbaad pesh karta hoon in maani khez ashaar ke liye .
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