Paigaam... (Shikha)

by Shikha12 on September 14, 2007, 06:45:13 AM
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«Reply #15 on: September 21, 2007, 04:32:36 PM »
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Just a try Shikha....on the same theme as yours..........but still nowhere of your creation ! That was just amazing ! Usual Smile

Ye daur hai kaisa, har chehre par chaaya hai khauf,
Dolta hua dilon main ab imaan nazar aata hai......

Tukde bikhre jismon ke, khoon main ranga hai shehar,
Dooba kaale dhuain main aasmaan nazar aata hai...

Ek cheekh sun kar khidkiyaan, darwaaze sab band ho gaye,
Ek ablaa ko logon se bhara biyaabaan nazar aata hai.....

Jism par hain cheethrhe, gard main lipte hain paanv,
Aankhon se kuch bolta, ek bezubaan nazar aata hai

Uth ke chal diya ladke ka baap, na dikha jo usko maal,
Ladki ki sisakti maa, majboor baap kahan nazar ataa hai

Hawa main lehraata jhanda, azaadi ke ho gaye saath(60) saal
Aaj hum ko yeh desh kitna mahaan nazar aata hai !!!
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«Reply #16 on: September 25, 2007, 04:49:21 AM »
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Wow.... This is just Amazing Talat.... =D> =D>
Very Nice Work... I Loved each and every sher...
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«Reply #17 on: September 28, 2007, 06:49:45 PM »
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Quote from: "Shikha12"

Uthhta hua maut ka, toofan nazar aata hai,
Lahu mein dooba hua, Insaan nazar aata hai...

Sehma hua dil liye, phirte hai kamre kamre,
Apno ke sir pe baitha, Shaitaan nazar aata hai...

Laftejigar karta hai chaak, Apni Maa ke jigar ko,
Mamta mein bhi usko, Ehsaan nazar aata hai...

Ajanami hui kali phir, masli gayi garabh mein,
Kitna Bebas sa hua, Bhagwaan nazar aata hai...

Beech Chowk ek laash, koi phek ke chal diya,
Sheher Sheher kaisa, Shamshaan nazar aata hai...

Jism par lapeta Kas kar, chadar ka kona humne,
Kyon Ishq mein hawas ka, Haiwaan nazar aata hai...

Talasha dil ka har kona, na dhadkan mili na rooh,
Dekho ek aks aaine mein, Bejaan nazar aata hai...

Milta hai sukoon kuch likh kar, koi jab yeh kehta hai,
Tumhari nazm mein "Shikha", Paigaam nazar aata hai...
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WOW....going high with PEN......oscar me nominations ke layak hai...!!!
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«Reply #18 on: September 28, 2007, 08:20:41 PM »
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sahi kaha badnaam ji.....

again good work Shikha!!!

Nice one Talat!!!
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«Reply #19 on: September 28, 2007, 09:38:39 PM »
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Shikha di amazing ... bahut hi accha likha hai aap ne ... beautiful ... as ever!!

Talat aap ne bhi bahut khoob sher kahe hai Usual Smile
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«Reply #20 on: October 08, 2007, 10:06:49 AM »
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WOW....going high with PEN......oscar me nominations ke layak hai...!!!

lolzzzz... Jyada ho gaya...  DOH Lapet lo ab..  Laughing hard



Thanks a lot... Gaurav Usual Smile Pooja di and Tosha..
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Talat
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«Reply #21 on: October 11, 2007, 09:00:14 AM »
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Thanks Shikha, Pooja and Tosha for appreciation.
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«Reply #22 on: October 17, 2007, 07:50:18 AM »
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Shikha bahut hi sundar paigam diya hai realy good.
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«Reply #23 on: July 20, 2008, 06:43:28 AM »
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Uthhta hua maut ka, toofan nazar aata hai,
Lahu mein dooba hua, Insaan nazar aata hai...

Sehma hua dil liye, phirte hai kamre kamre,
Apno ke sir pe baitha, Shaitaan nazar aata hai...

Laftejigar karta hai chaak, Apni Maa ke jigar ko,
Mamta mein bhi usko, Ehsaan nazar aata hai...

Ajanami hui kali phir, masli gayi garabh mein,
Kitna Bebas sa hua, Bhagwaan nazar aata hai...

Beech Chowk ek laash, koi phek ke chal diya,
Sheher Sheher kaisa, Shamshaan nazar aata hai...

Jism par lapeta Kas kar, chadar ka kona humne,
Kyon Ishq mein hawas ka, Haiwaan nazar aata hai...

Talasha dil ka har kona, na dhadkan mili na rooh,
Dekho ek aks aaine mein, Bejaan nazar aata hai...

Milta hai sukoon kuch likh kar, koi jab yeh kehta hai,
Tumhari nazm mein "Shikha", Paigaam nazar aata hai...


Continued... Usual Smile


Ek CheerHaran ko aaj phir, dekha kiye tamashaayi,
Phir Daanv par laga, ek bezubaan nazar aata hai..

Har Darakht ro ke bola, “Boodhe Bargadd ko na kaato”,
Ghar bujargo ki dua bin, bada Viraan nazar aata hai…

Ghughroo ki awaaz mein, dab ke reh gayi siskiyaan,
Matlabi Bazaaron jaisa, yeh jahaan nazar aata hai…


shikha...
is ghazal ka har sher dus dus baar padha.....ye tay karna mere liye mushkil hai ki kounsa sher behtar hai...har sher bheetar tak jhinjhod deta hai wazud ko.....ek ke baad ek chot karta hai seedhe dil par.......
......ye yakeenan behtreen peshkashon me se ek hai...jinhe yo par mai bahoot pasand karta hun.
mere shabdon ka bhandaar khali ho jayega...par mai iski prashansa nahi kar paungaa.......
ek behad umda...............rachna hai.........
kamal likha gaya hai sab kuch.........ek ek shabd tarasha hua aur poori tarah lay-baddh ye rachna....beshak aapko....yo ka sirmour bana deti hai.........
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«Reply #24 on: July 20, 2008, 08:36:25 AM »
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mahiya ji,

aaj shukruguzaar hu mein sabse pehle waqt ka--kyonki sami samay pur yahan vicharan kur raha thaa tabhee pahuch saka itni sashakt kavita se rubaru hone.
shabdon ka sahi chayan aur hakeeqat ke kitni kareeb he yeh kavita!aap daad kabool farmaye...is behtareen kavita ke liye.

celmira ji,

aapne bhee khoob saath diya he.aapka prayas aur peshkush pukhta he,isey nazarandaaz nahi kar sakta koi bhee.dhnyawaad.

Prateek
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«Reply #25 on: July 20, 2008, 02:28:04 PM »
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 Applause Applause Applause

bahoot khoob Mahiya and Celmira....bahoot he acha likha hai... Mahiya apki pahli kavita.. jaise shabd he khatam ho gaye hai ki app ki is kavita ki parshansa main kaya kahu... bahoot acha likhati hai app.. aise he likjte rahe..
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«Reply #26 on: July 20, 2008, 04:29:42 PM »
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Uthhta hua maut ka, toofan nazar aata hai,
Lahu mein dooba hua, Insaan nazar aata hai...

Sehma hua dil liye, phirte hai kamre kamre,
Apno ke sir pe baitha, Shaitaan nazar aata hai...

Laftejigar karta hai chaak, Apni Maa ke jigar ko,
Mamta mein bhi usko, Ehsaan nazar aata hai...

Ajanami hui kali phir, masli gayi garabh mein,
Kitna Bebas sa hua, Bhagwaan nazar aata hai...

Beech Chowk ek laash, koi phek ke chal diya,
Sheher Sheher kaisa, Shamshaan nazar aata hai...

Jism par lapeta Kas kar, chadar ka kona humne,
Kyon Ishq mein hawas ka, Haiwaan nazar aata hai...

Talasha dil ka har kona, na dhadkan mili na rooh,
Dekho ek aks aaine mein, Bejaan nazar aata hai...

Milta hai sukoon kuch likh kar, koi jab yeh kehta hai,
Tumhari nazm mein "Shikha", Paigaam nazar aata hai...


Continued... Usual Smile


Ek CheerHaran ko aaj phir, dekha kiye tamashaayi,
Phir Daanv par laga, ek bezubaan nazar aata hai..

Har Darakht ro ke bola, “Boodhe Bargadd ko na kaato”,
Ghar bujargo ki dua bin, bada Viraan nazar aata hai…

Ghughroo ki awaaz mein, dab ke reh gayi siskiyaan,
Matlabi Bazaaron jaisa, yeh jahaan nazar aata hai…


Bahut Bahut Khoob!!! har ek line, har ek shabd kuch keh raha hai..aapne bahut hi khoobsurat kavita likhi hai mahiya..
iss kavita ki Main  kitni bhi tareef karoon, kam pad jaayegi..
bahut hi khoobsurat paigam diya hai aapne..Great work!!!!
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«Reply #27 on: July 20, 2008, 04:31:12 PM »
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Just a try Shikha....on the same theme as yours..........but still nowhere of your creation ! That was just amazing ! Usual Smile

Ye daur hai kaisa, har chehre par chaaya hai khauf,
Dolta hua dilon main ab imaan nazar aata hai......

Tukde bikhre jismon ke, khoon main ranga hai shehar,
Dooba kaale dhuain main aasmaan nazar aata hai...

Ek cheekh sun kar khidkiyaan, darwaaze sab band ho gaye,
Ek ablaa ko logon se bhara biyaabaan nazar aata hai.....

Jism par hain cheethrhe, gard main lipte hain paanv,
Aankhon se kuch bolta, ek bezubaan nazar aata hai

Uth ke chal diya ladke ka baap, na dikha jo usko maal,
Ladki ki sisakti maa, majboor baap kahan nazar ataa hai

Hawa main lehraata jhanda, azaadi ke ho gaye saath(60) saal
Aaj hum ko yeh desh kitna mahaan nazar aata hai !!!


Bahut Bahut khoob talat!! aapne bhi bahut khoobsurat likha hai..bahut ache Applause Applause
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«Reply #28 on: July 21, 2008, 10:22:45 AM »
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celmira ji,

aapne bhee khoob saath diya he.aapka prayas aur peshkush pukhta he,isey nazarandaaz nahi kar sakta koi bhee.dhnyawaad.

Prateek

Aabhari hoon Prateek aapki, meri choti si koshish thi Mahiya ka sath nibhane ki..aapki nazar main aayi..hauslaafzai ke liye shukrguzar hoon.

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bahoot khoob Mahiya and Celmira....bahoot he acha likha hai... M

Shukriya Sarhtika...

Bahut Bahut khoob talat!! aapne bhi bahut khoobsurat likha hai..bahut ache Applause Applause

Bohot bohot shukriya Khwaish, aapko pasand aaya
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«Reply #29 on: July 22, 2008, 06:03:49 AM »
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Just a try Shikha....on the same theme as yours..........but still nowhere of your creation ! That was just amazing ! Usual Smile

Ye daur hai kaisa, har chehre par chaaya hai khauf,
Dolta hua dilon main ab imaan nazar aata hai......

Tukde bikhre jismon ke, khoon main ranga hai shehar,
Dooba kaale dhuain main aasmaan nazar aata hai...

Ek cheekh sun kar khidkiyaan, darwaaze sab band ho gaye,
Ek ablaa ko logon se bhara biyaabaan nazar aata hai.....

Jism par hain cheethrhe, gard main lipte hain paanv,
Aankhon se kuch bolta, ek bezubaan nazar aata hai

Uth ke chal diya ladke ka baap, na dikha jo usko maal,
Ladki ki sisakti maa, majboor baap kahan nazar ataa hai

Hawa main lehraata jhanda, azaadi ke ho gaye saath(60) saal
Aaj hum ko yeh desh kitna mahaan nazar aata hai !!!


maaf kijiyega celmira ji......maine aapki ye lines nahi padhi thi.....mahiya ki kavita padhi uske baad kuch aur padh hi nahi paaya is thread me aur reply dene baith gaya......
aaj fir se padh raha tha aur aapki ye lines nazron ke saamne aai....
behtreen likha hai aapne bhi....
aur in do lines ne to mujhe bahoot der tak aankhen band  kar ke sochne par mazboor kar diya...

Jism par hain cheethrhe, gard main lipte hain paanv,
Aankhon se kuch bolta, ek bezubaan nazar aata hai

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