हमें आज भी याद करते तो होंगें। ( ग़ज़ल )

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ग़ज़ल
मात्रा :122 122 122 122  
रदीफ़ : तो होंगे
काफ़िया : ( करते, "ऐ" स्वर )  
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हमें आज भी याद करते तो होंगें।
निगाहों से आँसू बरसते तो होंगें।।

कभी चाहतों को छुपाया नहीं था।
अभी दिल हि दिल में सुलगते तो होंगे।।

वही  आइनें  हैं  वही  सूरतें  भी।
कई सूरतों  को बदलते  वो होंगें।।

लबों से नमीं भी खफ़ा हो गई है।
ज़रा सी हसी को तरसते वो होंगें।।

किसी रोज़ फिर से मुलाक़ात होगी।
हमारे लिये आह भरते वो होंगें।।

हमें  बारहा  मार  देने  से  पहले।
कई बार शोलों में जलते वो होंगें।।  

बड़ी  बेरुख़ी  से  हमें  छोड़  आये।
हमारे लिये अब मचलते वो होंगें।।

अरे 'आरज़ू ' तो  दिवाना तुम्हारा।
तुम्हारे लिये हम भी मरते तो होंगें।।  


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Note : इसमें (तो) (हि )और (भी)  तीनों  लघु स्वर हैं
इसलिए उनको मात्रा (1 ) में गिना गया है  



hame aaj bhi yaad  karte to  honge
nigahon se aansu  baraste to honge

kabhi chahton ko chhupaya nahi tha
abhi dil hi dil me sulgte to honge

vahi  aaine  hain  vahi soorte bhi
kai  surton ko  badalte  vo  honge

labon ki nami bhi khafa ho gai hai
zara see hasee ko taraste vo honge

kisi  roz  fir  se  mulaakaat hogi
hamare liye ab machalte  vo  honge

hamein baarhaa  maar dene se pahle
kai baar sholon me  jalte to honge

badi berukhi se  hamein chhod aaye
hamare liye abb  machalte vo honge

aray  aarzoo to  deewana  tumhaara
tumhare lie hum bhi marte to honge

Aarzoo
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«Reply #1 on: May 14, 2016, 12:00:26 AM »
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waah waah waah bahut hee khoob, dheron dheron daad RAO ke saath.
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hame aaj bhi yaad  karte to  honge
nigahon se aansu  baraste to honge

kabhi chahton ko chhupaya nahi tha     kabhi chahton ko chhupate nahi the
abhi dil hi dil me sulgte to honge
I feel if you can change this line, it will go better with the general mood of your poem.
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«Reply #2 on: May 14, 2016, 12:37:18 AM »
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Wah wah..bahot khoob Arjunji
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«Reply #3 on: May 14, 2016, 10:25:13 AM »
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Wah wah wah
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«Reply #4 on: May 14, 2016, 02:22:40 PM »
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ग़ज़ल
मात्रा :122 122 122 122 
रदीफ़ : तो होंगे
काफ़िया : ( करते, "ऐ" स्वर ) 
---------------------------------------------------------------

हमें आज भी याद करते तो होंगें।
निगाहों से आँसू बरसते तो होंगें।।

कभी चाहतों को छुपाया नहीं था।
अभी दिल हि दिल में सुलगते तो होंगे।।

वही  आइनें  हैं  वही  सूरतें  भी।
कई सूरतों  को बदलते  वो होंगें।।

लबों से नमीं भी खफ़ा हो गई है।
ज़रा सी हसी को तरसते वो होंगें।।

किसी रोज़ फिर से मुलाक़ात होगी।
हमारे लिये आह भरते वो होंगें।।

हमें  बारहा  मार  देने  से  पहले।
कई बार शोलों में जलते वो होंगें।। 

बड़ी  बेरुख़ी  से  हमें  छोड़  आये।
हमारे लिये अब मचलते वो होंगें।।

अरे 'आरज़ू ' तो  दिवाना तुम्हारा।
तुम्हारे लिये हम भी मरते तो होंगें।। 


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Note : इसमें (तो) (हि )और (भी)  तीनों  लघु स्वर हैं
इसलिए उनको मात्रा (1 ) में गिना गया है   



hame aaj bhi yaad  karte to  honge
nigahon se aansu  baraste to honge

kabhi chahton ko chhupaya nahi tha
abhi dil hi dil me sulgte to honge

vahi  aaine  hain  vahi soorte bhi
kai  surton ko  badalte  vo  honge

labon ki nami bhi khafa ho gai hai
zara see hasee ko taraste vo honge

kisi  roz  fir  se  mulaakaat hogi
hamare liye ab machalte  vo  honge

hamein baarhaa  maar dene se pahle
kai baar sholon me  jalte to honge

badi berukhi se  hamein chhod aaye
hamare liye abb  machalte vo honge

aray  aarzoo to  deewana  tumhaara
tumhare lie hum bhi marte to honge

Aarzoo


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waaaahh Behad Umdaah Ghazal
rau k sath dili daad ar mubarakbad

khush rahie
muskurate rahie
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Bahut bahut Shukriya  aap sab ka janaab.
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waaaahh Behad Umdaah Ghazal
rau k sath dili daad ar mubarakbad

khush rahie
muskurate rahie


Sarfira sahib bahut bahut Shukriya

Lekin aapne Rau add nahi kiya shayad...  Hahaahahahah...

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«Reply #8 on: May 17, 2016, 07:12:59 PM »
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waah waah waah bahut hee khoob, dheron dheron daad RAO ke saath.
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hame aaj bhi yaad  karte to  honge
nigahon se aansu  baraste to honge

kabhi chahton ko chhupaya nahi tha     kabhi chahton ko chhupate nahi the
abhi dil hi dil me sulgte to honge
I feel if you can change this line, it will go better with the general mood of your poem.

I like your suggestions sir... Thanx sir...  Keepin mind next time
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