Kya Karna...

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«Reply #15 on: September 06, 2013, 06:37:26 AM »
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«Reply #16 on: September 06, 2013, 11:58:30 AM »
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Good start but suddenly the piece fell short of Qafia and Metre,,,,,,,
 Yours could have been a good piece if your had kept it withing these parameters which constitute the beauty of a ghazal or form verse.

Just my thoughts!!
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«Reply #17 on: September 06, 2013, 08:32:50 PM »
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waah waah iqtedar bhai.. bahut khoob.

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«Reply #18 on: September 07, 2013, 01:07:26 AM »
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Quote from: mazHur on September 06, 2013, 11:58:30 AM
Good start but suddenly the piece fell short of Qafia and Metre,,,,,,,
 Yours could have been a good piece if your had kept it withing these parameters which constitute the beauty of a ghazal or form verse.

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«Reply #19 on: September 07, 2013, 01:08:30 AM »
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waah waah iqtedar bhai.. bahut khoob.

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«Reply #20 on: September 07, 2013, 05:29:43 PM »
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«Reply #21 on: September 07, 2013, 10:47:20 PM »
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«Reply #22 on: September 08, 2013, 07:04:41 PM »
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«Reply #23 on: September 09, 2013, 09:25:19 AM »
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«Reply #25 on: September 09, 2013, 07:53:52 PM »
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Waahwaahwaahwaahwaah Iqtedaar bhai.......kya zordaar baatein kaheen hain apne .... Bahaut hi khoob .... Daad hi daad !!!
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