Mere Mehboob.....!!

by Talat on December 12, 2006, 05:03:24 PM
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«Reply #15 on: December 16, 2006, 05:27:30 PM »
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Quote from: "Talat"

Tere chehre main masoom sa bachcha nazar aata hai
Muskura kar dekhna mujh ko, dil pe qehar dhaata hai

Jabeen par bikhar jaati hain teri zulfen jo pareshaan si
Apni unliyon se sanwaaroon, mann ye behek jaata hai

Ankhon main machalti hui shokhiyan, woh sharartain
Woh tera baankpan har baar mujh ko qatl kar jaata hai

Aur thak ke jo kar leta hai band apni aankhon ko kabhi
Apne aaghosh main bhar loon, dil mera tadap jaata hai

Tu kya jaane tere ishq ne kya haal kiya mera, ae Dilbar
Jis jaanib dekhti hoon, mujhe tu hi tu nazar aata hai !!


Jabeen = Forehead




Wah G wah buhat umda ! Usual Smile ND majid bhiya u r also Gr8 ! :razz:
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Talat
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«Reply #16 on: December 16, 2006, 09:57:06 PM »
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Thank you Guruu !!! Usual Smile

Nice one Majid !!
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«Reply #17 on: December 22, 2006, 10:17:08 PM »
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Quote from: "Talat"

Tere chehre main masoom sa bachcha nazar aata hai
Muskura kar dekhna mujh ko, dil pe qehar dhaata hai

Jabeen par bikhar jaati hain teri zulfen jo pareshaan si
Apni unliyon se sanwaaroon, mann ye behek jaata hai

Ankhon main machalti hui shokhiyan, woh sharartain
Woh tera baankpan har baar mujh ko qatl kar jaata hai

Aur thak ke jo kar leta hai band apni aankhon ko kabhi
Apne aaghosh main bhar loon, dil mera tadap jaata hai

Tu kya jaane tere ishq ne kya haal kiya mera, ae Dilbar
Jis jaanib dekhti hoon, mujhe tu hi tu nazar aata hai !!


Jabeen = Forehead

Talat ji  A'daab,

Sab se pehle to M'uaafi cha'hunga ke ba'hut der baad aap ki Ghazal nazar hui ........  aur dusra ke sabhi sh'er bahut pasand aaye ..... dil-i-daa'd qa'buul kijiye ...... sh'er mein Beh're to be'htree.N hai magar Mutdaarik mein thodi gadbad ho gyiii ....... thoda t'vaaju dijiye ..... Ghazal aur nikhar jayegi .....   masla.N aap ke cho'te sh'er ki dusri line mein "apne a'gosh mein bh'ar luun, dil mera tadap jata hai" yeh do alag alag lines lagti hai .....  Gar ... aap yun likhte ....  "Apne a'gosh mein bh'ar luun, dil mein khayaal aata hai" to sh'er ka vajaN aur badh jata Usual Smile ...behrhaal .. bahut dil-ka'sh Ghazal pe'sh ki hai ....   Usual Smile

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«Reply #18 on: December 24, 2006, 09:55:36 PM »
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Thank You Humtum again for analyzing my poem .....will take care next time Usual Smile
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«Reply #19 on: December 25, 2006, 05:34:00 AM »
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wah wah talat ji
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Talat
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«Reply #20 on: December 28, 2006, 01:41:31 AM »
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Thanks a lot Paani Usual Smile
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«Reply #21 on: September 22, 2008, 07:41:30 PM »
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Thankyou ! Yoindia ....My award winning poem !!!
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