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«Reply #30 on: January 11, 2009, 06:56:08 AM »

Quote from: Rajesh Harish on December 26, 2008, 04:23:21 PM

Wah! kya baat hai Bekaraar Ji

bahoot shukriya rajesh aapko pasand aaya

Quote from: Jaanasheen on December 26, 2008, 06:54:36 PM

Bohat Achche Bekarar ji,.

shukriya azeem bhai

Quote from: Deepati on December 26, 2008, 11:01:19 PM

Bahut khoob, Bekraar Ji Applause

bahoot abhar deepati ji

Quote from: k.shael on December 27, 2008, 05:35:37 AM

Wah Wah Wah Kya Khoob Likha Hai Brother,

Zindagi ki ek bahut badi sachayi se bahut zald ro-bro karwa diya aapne,
pad kar aisa laga jaise apne hi lafzo ko kho diya hamne
kya tarrif karoo kuch alfaaz hi nahi mil rahe...

"Maashaallah Subhaanallah Kya kallam nazar kiya hai"

Shally.

tumhe pasand aaya aur mujhe sukun......shukriya shally

Quote from: cara on December 27, 2008, 06:06:30 AM

bahut hi badiya bekararji...bahut khoob likha hai..

kahene ko toh sab kuj paya hai,
par use jada khoya hai hamne.
bulandi shu toh li hai hamne,
par hogaya hu kamjor mein.

thanku cara...aur bahoot sunder char line hain aapki bhi...


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Re: kamyaabi

«Reply #31 on: January 11, 2009, 07:04:32 AM »

Quote from: sajid_ghayel on December 27, 2008, 07:29:40 AM

Wahhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh sanjeev yaar zabardast cheez likh dali tune sach me yaar maza aa gaya har sher favorite hain mera beautiful...

Hum to mureed hai teri shayri ke bekarar
Aur tum hame sirf kadardan samjhe ho

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bahoot shukriya dost...tumhaare comment padh-kar utsaah dugna ho gaya..

Quote from: Prateek Mardia on December 27, 2008, 07:53:59 AM

ek ek sher mein ek kahaani!! nazrein aapki panktiyon se maano hatna hi nahi chaahti ho....aap na dil fir se jeet liya bekarar ji,jub likha aapne ek anmol panne ko janam diya hai...aapki shaayri vaakai kaabel-e-taaref hai,aur aap badhai ke patra.

khoob likha hai Clapping Smiley

aapne ise tarif-e-kabil samajha....mano "kamyaabi" kamyaab rahi.....bahoot shukriya prateek ji

Quote from: Mahiya on December 27, 2008, 08:40:48 AM

Sanjeev Ji..

Hum kuch kaheinge toh kam rahega, aur kuch nahin kaheinge toh humein gam rahega.. lolzzz... matlab tareef jitni bhi kareinge wo kam rahegi aur agar kuch bhi naa kaha toh yeh toh is beshkimati rachna ke saath naa-insaafi hogi..

Bahut Bahut bahut khoob... Bahut khoobsurati se zindagi ki ek haqiqat ki taraf ishaara kiya hai aapne.. Applause

shukriya shikha....aapko pasand aaya...aur humesha ki tarah poori dariyadili se aapne ise saraha...tah-e-dil se shukriya


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Re: kamyaabi

«Reply #32 on: January 11, 2009, 07:08:32 AM »

Quote from: Mahiya on December 27, 2008, 08:52:20 AM

Ek chhoti si koshish hamari bhi..

Hai zindagi yahin toh, Ehsaas sa hawaao ka,
Tum isko kyon gumon kaa tufaan samjhe ho..

Ghar basta hai kisika teri saanson ki mehak se,
Ek tum ho ki Saanson ko hi mehmaan samjhe ho..

Nibhaate hai dil se hum, aey dost teri dosti ko,
Kyon dil ke in rishton ko ek ehsaan samjhe ho..

Har shai ki judi himmat, Har Rishte ne thaama hai,
Kaamyaabi pe khud ko kyon balwaan samjhe ho..

Abhi duur bahut hai manzil jaana hai saagar paar,
Do koodon ko phir kyon lambi udaan samjhe ho..

wah ji wah khoob likha hai aapne.....aur aakhiri sher to nahle pe dahle jaisa laga mujhe...
ek bahoot purana sher yaad aa gaya..
unko to nahi kuch naz-e-safar, manjil pe jo hain panhunch chuke,
do kadam abhi jo chale nahi raftaar ki baaten karte hain..
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Re: kamyaabi

«Reply #33 on: January 11, 2009, 07:09:48 AM »

Quote from: Prateek Mardia on December 27, 2008, 08:56:53 PM

ek bahut choti si kaushish hamari bhi..

kuch naapaak irado ki,unhone kar rakhi thee tyaari
badi shaatir hansee thee wo,jise tum muskaan samjhe ho

woh manje hue shikaari , aur main adna sa khilaadi
mere kandhe pe unki bandook ko kya tum mera armaan samjhe ho

jaha pahucha hu main aaj,khud se bekhabar sa hu
aur tum isi ko meri pehchaan samjhe ho

in faislon ki boo to aane lagi thee kub se,
aur tum ho ki hume hi anjaan samjhe ho....

bahoot khoob prateek ji....."sagar me gagar" wali kahawat yaad dila di aapne to kam shabdon me khoob kaha Applause


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Re: kamyaabi

«Reply #34 on: January 11, 2009, 07:16:34 AM »

Quote from: kaushikbhawna008 on December 29, 2008, 07:21:53 AM

wonderful creation bekarar ji

khaas taur par ye lines kuch jyada hi pasand aayi hamein

shukriya bhawna....

Quote from: ANAAM on December 31, 2008, 01:16:24 PM

bahut accha likha hai aap sab ne sanjeevji,
Prateek Mardiaji, Mahiya ji ... aap sab ne b bahut acchi kamyaabi hasil ki hai...kamyaabi ke is thread ko badha ke...clap..clap good work

thanku anaam..

Quote from: Pooja on December 31, 2008, 06:52:36 PM

wah wah wah!!!! kaya baat hai... sahi kaha Mahiya ne.. jitani tareef ki jaaye kam hai.. bahoot khoob... kamaal ki rachna ki hai apne Bekarar ji... maafi chahti hu ki pahle najar nahi gai meri.. dil khush ho gaya!! bahoot khoob!!1

aji maafi ki to koi baat hi nahi hai der se hi sahi aapki nazr-e-inayat to hui yahann..bas shikayat itni hai ki aapki kalam khamoshi se gujar gai yahan se...

Quote from: khwaish on January 01, 2009, 03:18:14 PM

Kya Baat Hai Sanjeev Bro...bahut bahut Khoob..

Har ek lafz,par nazarein rukh si jaa rahi thi, bahut khoobsurti se aapne apni baat iss kavita mein dhaali hai..

bahut ache..

bahoot shukriya khwahish bro.....kuch alfaaz aap bhi bikher dete to aur bhi achchca lagta


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«Reply #35 on: January 22, 2009, 01:15:32 PM »

Quote from: bekarar on December 26, 2008, 03:03:15 PM

Har toofan sah jaaye, wo makan samjhe ho,
har waqt bikhre hansi jisase, wo saman samjhe ho,

mujhse housale ka sabak lene-walon,
bheetar se khokhli hai jise chattan samjhe ho,

manjil pe pahunchate dekha, rahgujar nahi dekhi,
meri kaanton bhari raahon ko, aasan samajhe ho

meri jawani ka makbara hai, masti ke dino ki kabra hai,
jis aaramgaah me baithe ho, jise deewan samjhe ho,

neendon ke aivaz me ye aisho-aaram kharida hai,
meri neend ki dawa hai, jise tum jaam samjhe ho,

bulandi pe panhucha to saath tanhaai-yan thin bas,
aur tum ise meri kamyaabi ki dastaan samjhe ho

ponch lo aansoo, abhi poori zindagi baaqi hai
choti si pareshani ko, sabse bada imtihaan samjhe ho,

tumhaari khata nahi, ye kuch ameeri ka roub hai
matalab-paraston ko bhi tum mehrbaan samajhe ho,

julmo-sitam sahta raha, kuch soch ke "bekarar"
khamosh dekh ke use tum, NADAN samjhe ho,

Bohot Khoob Sanjeev Ji Bohot Khoobsurat rachna hai ye aapki, jitni taareef ki jaaye kam hogi...Shukriya hume aapne ye padhne ka mauqa diya.


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Re: kamyaabi

«Reply #36 on: January 22, 2009, 01:34:56 PM »

bahoot shukriya talat ki tumne in alfazon ko itni izzat bakhshi......


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«Reply #37 on: July 01, 2009, 11:04:13 PM »

Excellent,very nice and beautiful creation Bekarar ji,kamaal ka likha aapne.


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Re: kamyaabi

«Reply #38 on: July 01, 2009, 11:13:35 PM »

bahooot bahooot shukriya madhu


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«Reply #39 on: August 27, 2009, 11:16:46 AM »

Quote from: bekarar on December 26, 2008, 03:03:15 PM

wah....wah...
khabar hai ye bhi zamaane ko
fir bhi bekhabr rehta hai
apni qadr hai har shaqs ko
dusre ko beqadar samjhta hai....


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Re: kamyaabi

«Reply #40 on: February 23, 2010, 07:51:21 PM »

shukriya umraan ji


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Re: kamyaabi

«Reply #41 on: July 27, 2010, 08:04:35 AM »

Sanjeev Bro,Jabse iss poetry Ko Dhoond Raha tha..

Jaanta Hoon Main pehle Bhi Comment Kar Chuka Hoon Par Phir Padhe Baab,Comment Kiye Bin jaana Khud Se Beimaani Hai..

Bahut Bahut Aur bahut Khoob Mere Bhai


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«Reply #42 on: August 25, 2010, 08:40:25 PM »

Quote from: bekarar on December 26, 2008, 03:03:15 PM

meri jawani ka makbara hai, masti ke dino ki kabra hai,
jis aaramgaah me baithe ho, jise deewan samjhe ho,

neendon ke aivaz me ye aisho-aaram kharida hai,
meri neend ki dawa hai, jise tum jaam samjhe ho,

ponch lo aansoo, abhi poori zindagi baaqi hai
choti si pareshani ko, sabse bada imtihaan samjhe ho,

julmo-sitam sahta raha, kuch soch ke "bekarar"
khamosh dekh ke use tum, NADAN samjhe ho,

Bekaraar Sahab Aadaab.....

Aapki kalaam kafi achchi lagi hume... Oper quoted Ashaar behad khoob hai..... Kafi gehre khayaal hai... Dil se daad hazir hai...

Likhate rahiye....
Khush rahiye .....
Khuda hafez


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