aaRzoo ke dee.p deiikho jal gaye,......

by laaiba on April 14, 2014, 09:38:36 PM
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«Reply #15 on: April 15, 2014, 04:14:45 PM »
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Quote from: Sudhir Ashq on April 15, 2014, 01:34:19 PM
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  waa.r jub mousam ke  saare chal gaye
dhoo.p men baarish ke paayoN jal gaye

wah,Wah,Waaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaah Laiba ji,Bahut khoobsurat matla hai aur is per kahi ghazal ke tareef ke liye alfaaz nahi hai mere paas.Hazaroon dili daad qabool farmaayin aik RAU ke saath.
bohat bohat shuqria ashk g aapkaa,
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«Reply #16 on: April 15, 2014, 04:16:18 PM »
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Quote from: saahill on April 15, 2014, 01:46:50 PM
waaah waah waah waah waaah bohut hi umda peshkash
bohat shuqria saahil g aapkaa,
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«Reply #17 on: April 15, 2014, 04:19:32 PM »
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Mohtarma laaiba sahiba! salam masnoon

aap ki ye shaandar ghazal parhi or parh kar lutf liya... buhat achay ashaar hen, hamaari taraf say bharpoor daad qabool kijay... ye buhat bari baat hay k beher ki ghalati kahin bhi hamen nahi nazar aai... ab kuch likhnay chalay hen ghazal par to kuch baaten is say mutalik kahay detay hen. mumkin hay ye baaten aap ky ilm men bhi hon. umeed hay isay tanqeed nahi samjha jayay ga, balkay ilmi azhaar-e-khayaal samjha jaayay ga...

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waa.r jub mousam ke  saare chal gaye
dhoo.p men baarish ke paayoN jal gaye

buhat achha sher hay, agarchi thora sa mubhimn hay apnay meni kay lihaaz say... doosra misra buhat khoobsoorat hay....agar aap ghor karen tu aap ko mehsoos ho ga k pehla misra, doosray ki takkar ka nahi hay... agar ye mazeed khoobsoorat ho sakay tu poori ghazal kay aahang ko khoobsurat bana de ga..

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lab khulen izhaar koh mumkin nahiN
chup ke dil mein kitne hi gham pal gaye

as sher pr hum kuch nahi kahen gay... buhat khoobsoorat sher hay...

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aa gayee jub yaa.d  teiree  uss ghadee
ash.q taaron mein sabhee phir dhal gaye

buhat khoob... pehlay misra men, "teiree" kay baad comma lagana reh gaya hay... doosray misra men lafz "phir" bharti ka hay... bharti ka lafz wo hota hay jisay wazan poora karnay kay liyay rakhna parta hay. koshish honi chahiyay k bharti say bacha jayay...

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hij.r ki maaree huyee aankhoN mein phir
aaRzoo ke dee.p deiikho jal gaye,......

ye bhe khoob sher hay, doosray misra men "deiikho" bharti ka hay. jo sher ki khoobsoorti ko mutaasir kar raha hay...

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jab mohabbat raa.s  naa aayee hameiN
din uudaasee mein hi saare dhal gaye

buhat achhay... pehlay misra men lafz "naa" aap ne 2 harfi ya wazan 2 kay baraber baandha hay... aroozi hazraat is ko aik he bandhnay par raazi hotay hen... lekin aaj kal kai shaair isay wazan 2 par bhi baandh rahay hen... lekin asaatizaa men say kisi ne isay wazan 2 par kabhi nahi baandha... so aap apni marzi say raasta chun sakti hen...

doosray misray men lafz :hi: bharti ka hay... is say bhi sher ko bachaya jaa sakay to behter hay...


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aap kay ilm men hona chahiyay k hamaari raayay koi mustanad raayay nahi hay... aik shagird ki he hay... so jaisa hum ne dekha, seekha, samjha, so haazir kiya... agar kuch giraaN guzraa ho to, peshgi maazrat kay saath...


dua go
ahqar-vb jee



g bohat bohat shuqria aapkaa vb g aap ne itna waqt dia ,
tafseeli reply dia or kuch aghalat ki nishandahi ki
aik baar phr bohat bohat shuqria aapkaa,...........;
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«Reply #18 on: April 15, 2014, 04:22:16 PM »
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Quote from: laaiba on April 14, 2014, 09:38:36 PM

  waa.r jub mousam ke  saare chal gaye
dhoo.p men baarish ke paayoN jal gaye

lab khulen izhaar koh mumkin nahiN
chup ke dil mein kitne hi gham pal gaye

aa gayee jub yaa.d  teiree  uss ghadee
ash.q taaron mein sabhee phir dhal gaye
 
hij.r ki maaree huyee aankhoN mein phir
aaRzoo ke dee.p deiikho jal gaye,......

jab mohabbat raa.s  naa aayee hameiN
din uudaasee mein hi saare dhal gaye

laaiba shah


Laaiba Jee...Bahut Bahut Aur Bahutttttttttttttt Khoooob...

Umda Khayaalat...Umda Bayaani..Har Sher Lajawaab...

Vakaai Umda Shayara Hai Aap...


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«Reply #19 on: April 15, 2014, 04:50:03 PM »
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bohat bohat shuqria aapka khwahiish g
rau ke liye b bohat shuqria, Usual Smile
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«Reply #20 on: April 15, 2014, 06:27:51 PM »
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Quote from: laaiba on April 14, 2014, 09:38:36 PM

waa.r jub mousam ke  saare chal gaye
dhoo.p men baarish ke paayoN jal gaye

gheri soch ka nateeja bana ye ashaar
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lab khulen izhaar koh mumkin nahiN
chup ke dil mein kitne hi gham pal gaye

waah waah
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aa gayee jub yaa.d  teiree  uss ghadee
ash.q taaron mein sabhee phir dhal gaye
 
LAJAWAAB
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hij.r ki maaree huyee aankhoN mein phir
aaRzoo ke dee.p deiikho jal gaye,......

ZABARDAST
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jab mohabbat raa.s  naa aayee hameiN
din uudaasee mein hi saare dhal gaye

KHOOB JEE
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laaiba shah
BOHUT HI KHOOBSURAT GHAZAL HAI LAAIBA JEE
BEHTEREEN ASHAAR AUR HAR LAFZ KHOOBSURAT RAU KI HAQDAAR GHAZAL

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«Reply #21 on: April 15, 2014, 09:42:11 PM »
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 Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause
Bahut bahut bahut khooooooooob laaiba jee... behad khoobsurat peshkash rahi... dheron dheron daaaaaaad qubool kare...
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«Reply #22 on: April 15, 2014, 11:21:43 PM »
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Quote from: laaiba on April 14, 2014, 09:38:36 PM

  waa.r jub mousam ke  saare chal gaye
dhoo.p men baarish ke paayoN jal gaye

lab khulen izhaar koh mumkin nahiN
chup ke dil mein kitne hi gham pal gaye

aa gayee jub yaa.d  teiree  uss ghadee
ash.q taaron mein sabhee phir dhal gaye
 
hij.r ki maaree huyee aankhoN mein phir
aaRzoo ke dee.p deiikho jal gaye,......

jab mohabbat raa.s  naa aayee hameiN
din uudaasee mein hi saare dhal gaye

laaiba shah

with rau -wonderful,ma'am
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«Reply #23 on: April 16, 2014, 03:19:18 PM »
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Quote from: sahal on April 15, 2014, 06:27:51 PM
BOHUT HI KHOOBSURAT GHAZAL HAI LAAIBA JEE
BEHTEREEN ASHAAR AUR HAR LAFZ KHOOBSURAT RAU KI HAQDAAR GHAZAL

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bohat bohat shuqria aapkaa sahal g ,
rau ke liye b shuqria ,
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«Reply #24 on: April 16, 2014, 03:22:06 PM »
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Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause
Bahut bahut bahut khooooooooob laaiba jee... behad khoobsurat peshkash rahi... dheron dheron daaaaaaad qubool kare...

bohat bohat shuqria aqsh g aapka,
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«Reply #25 on: April 16, 2014, 03:22:53 PM »
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Quote from: marhoom bahayaat on April 15, 2014, 11:21:43 PM
with rau -wonderful,ma'am
mb g bohat shukria rau ke liye ,..........
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«Reply #26 on: April 16, 2014, 05:34:12 PM »
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Wah Wah Laaiba Jee!!! Bohat hi emotional ghazal likhi hai aap ne. Pad kar lagta hai jaise aap ne mere hi dil ka haal likh diya hai. Aap ko is ghazal par bohat si dad aur rau bhi!!!


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«Reply #27 on: November 29, 2014, 11:16:33 PM »
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 Applause too good
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Quote from: laaiba on April 14, 2014, 09:38:36 PM

  waa.r jub mousam ke  saare chal gaye
dhoo.p men baarish ke paayoN jal gaye


lab khulen izhaar koh mumkin nahiN
chup ke dil mein kitne hi gham pal gaye

aa gayee jub yaa.d  teiree  uss ghadee
ash.q taaron mein sabhee phir dhal gaye
 
hij.r ki maaree huyee aankhoN mein phir
aaRzoo ke dee.p deiikho jal gaye,......

jab mohabbat raa.s  naa aayee hameiN
din uudaasee mein hi saare dhal gaye

laaiba shah
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