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kiraye ki zamiN aur aasmaaN ........acha nahiN lagta
mujhe ye shahar-e-dilli ka makaN ..acha nahi lagta
na hi lepa hua aangan.. na hi wo phool gainde ke
bula lo gaoN bapis mujhko maa ......acha nahi lagta
ziyada kuch kaha to ro padegi ....jaanta huN maiN
likha hai khat meiN itna hi yahaaN ..acha nahiN lagta
Har ik din hi yahaN mela.. Har ik hi raat diwaali
Magar tum bin ho koe bhi samaaN acha nahi lagta
Na hee to chand dikhta hai... Na hee aayeN nazar taare
DhuyeN se laal hota aasmaaN acha nahi lagta
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«Reply #1 on: March 06, 2013, 08:19:25 AM » |
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very good poem! zor e qalam aur ziyada!!
khaas apke leeay ye sher likhay deta hoon!
tumhara hein tumhare hee rehein ge umr bhar janaaN
Yaqee'N rakho muhabbat per gumaaN achha nahi lagta
kabhi sur ko khujata hoon kabhi malta hoon thori ko
mujhe ye toota phoota aashiyaaN achha nahi lagta!!
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«Reply #2 on: March 06, 2013, 08:39:48 AM » |
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bahut khoob
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«Reply #3 on: March 06, 2013, 11:52:38 AM » |
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waah ji kya kehne aapki ghazal ke
behad umdaa aur lajawaab
aap kalam ke dhani hain saahab
kuch ashar dil ke behad kareeb aur sache hain
aapko dili daad aur mubarak baad
aate rahie
khus rahie
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«Reply #4 on: March 06, 2013, 11:54:39 AM » |
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waah bohut khub janumanu ji
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«Reply #5 on: March 06, 2013, 11:56:51 AM » |
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waah waah laajawaab
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«Reply #10 on: March 06, 2013, 01:58:35 PM » |
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zabardust,so nice..
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«Reply #11 on: March 06, 2013, 02:02:01 PM » |
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Janumanu ji bahut hee umda gazal... Bht hee zabardast... Hazaron daad aur mubarkbaad qabool farmayein
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«Reply #12 on: March 06, 2013, 02:33:27 PM » |
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Khoob bhai khoob. shahr e nigaraan ki tareekyan
aur ghareeb ul watani ka dard ek sath bayan kiya
hai . kya baat hai. bahut khubsurat kalaam hai .
dheron daad . HASAN
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on eTI community..
