Gar tu humkalam ho jaye....

by premdeep on July 05, 2013, 04:45:55 PM
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Gar tu humkalam  ho   jaye
Mere bigade jo kaam ho jaye

Meri basti se jo guzarti tu
dil ke kisse tamam ho jaye

Ek baar mud ke dekhe tu
hum tere gulaam ho jaye

Tu hai ek haseen subah si
tere jate hi shaam ho jaye

Teri hi aarzu basi dil mein
bin tere mehfil ye aam ho jaye

Ashique tera ek jamane se
kya hua  badnaam ho jaye

jaadu hai teri nazaron me
paani bhi jaam ho jaye
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«Reply #1 on: July 05, 2013, 06:22:27 PM »
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बहुत खूब.
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«Reply #2 on: July 05, 2013, 06:40:45 PM »
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 Applause Applause
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«Reply #3 on: July 05, 2013, 07:18:19 PM »
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«Reply #4 on: July 05, 2013, 08:17:49 PM »
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waah bahut khoob..happy9
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«Reply #5 on: July 05, 2013, 11:01:01 PM »
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waah waah bahut khoob
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«Reply #6 on: July 06, 2013, 12:05:42 AM »
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achchi peshkash premdeep ji. sabhi ashaar khoob hai. aapko is kalam par dheron daad...
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«Reply #7 on: July 06, 2013, 02:22:18 AM »
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Shuru ke teenoN ash'aar ke doosre misre meiN " ho jaae" ki jagah "ho jaaeN" hona chahiye. Since baaqi ghazal meiN "ho jaae" radeef use kiya hai, to aap in teenoN misroN ko change kar leiN.
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«Reply #8 on: July 06, 2013, 08:07:31 PM »
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Premdeep Jee Aadaab...!

Achchi kalaam kahi hai janab, khoob ashaar rahe..
ahsaas O khayaal meiN bharpur saadgi nazar aayi aapke...

Is khoob kalaam par huamri dheroN dili daad O mubbarakbad kabul kijiye...

Likhate rahiye... bazm meiN aate rahiye...
Shaad O aabaad rahiye...

Khuda Hafez... Usual Smile
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«Reply #9 on: July 08, 2013, 02:52:20 AM »
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bahut khoob....!!!
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