pata hai ant me.....

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पता  है  अन्त  में किस राह पर संसार जाता है
मगर मन है कि माया की तरफ हर बार जाता है

वहाँ बस नेकियाँ ही साथ जा पाती हैं, सुनते हैं
यहीं पर छूट धन-दौलत का ये अम्बार जाता है

सिमटता जा रहा है जिस्म के ही दायरे में बस
कहाँ अब  रूह की गहराइयों तक प्यार जाता है

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«Reply #1 on: August 15, 2010, 02:32:14 PM »
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wah Yati ji wah... kya kehne aapke.. shabdon ko jodke aapne shabdon ki sarita bana di aur ye sarita hamaare dil se behti hui chali gayi... badi hi khoobsurti se, bade hi pyaare aur aasaan se shabdon me aapne apni is kavita ko pesh kiya hai... bahut achchi lagi humein aapki ye kavita... bahut sundar kavita likhi hai aapne....!!!
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«Reply #2 on: August 15, 2010, 02:37:55 PM »
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jis ghar me jab koi chirag jalta hai
har andhera roshan hoga ye aitbaar hota hai

kyun fir ek din wahi chiraag
bati aur tel ko alag kar deta hai

apne mata pita k ghar ko roshan karne k bajye
kyun wo chiraag alag ghar saja leta hai

nahin samjh pai main aaj tak ye baat
kyun jise janm deti hai aurat wahi use saza deta hai

har bar ek naye tarah ka zakhm taiyaar rakhta hai
kabhi baaton se kabhi haalaton se wo waar pe waar karta hai

fir bhi ant samay me awahi hume mukti dega iss aas me
budhaa baap apne nishthur bete ko dua hi bas deta hai....!!!
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«Reply #3 on: August 15, 2010, 02:41:11 PM »
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bas kam shabdon me main ye kehna chahunga Kasak ji ... aap pyar mohabbat ke saath jeewan ki sachchai bhi bahut khoobsurti se likhti hain... bahut deep thoughts hain aaapke is kavita me.... u r great...!!!
jis ghar me jab koi chirag jalta hai
har andhera roshan hoga ye aitbaar hota hai

kyun fir ek din wahi chiraag
bati aur tel ko alag kar deta hai

apne mata pita k ghar ko roshan karne k bajye
kyun wo chiraag alag ghar saja leta hai

nahin samjh pai main aaj tak ye baat
kyun jise janm deti hai aurat wahi use saza deta hai

har bar ek naye tarah ka zakhm taiyaar rakhta hai
kabhi baaton se kabhi haalaton se wo waar pe waar karta hai

fir bhi ant samay me awahi hume mukti dega iss aas me
budhaa baap apne nishthur bete ko dua hi bas deta hai....!!!
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«Reply #4 on: August 15, 2010, 02:44:32 PM »
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bas kam shabdon me main ye kehna chahunga Kasak ji ... aap pyar mohabbat ke saath jeewan ki sachchai bhi bahut khoobsurti se likhti hain... bahut deep thoughts hain aaapke is kavita me.... u r great...!!!



sach hai wahi likha hai klaskar ji...aaj k jeewan me roz dekhte hain ye ..bas wo dard utar aaya kalam me....
aapko pasand aaya ye mere liye khushi ki baat hai.....
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«Reply #5 on: August 15, 2010, 02:48:17 PM »
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Hats off to you!


sach hai wahi likha hai klaskar ji...aaj k jeewan me roz dekhte hain ye ..bas wo dard utar aaya kalam me....
aapko pasand aaya ye mere liye khushi ki baat hai.....

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«Reply #6 on: August 15, 2010, 02:49:32 PM »
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Hats off to you!


   

ye smiley kaise aati hai .....
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«Reply #7 on: August 15, 2010, 02:54:22 PM »
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click on {reply}.......... smilies ke end me hoga ...[more].... click on that.....chhota sa ek naya window khulega... usme scroll karke sabse niche jayiye... wahaan mil jaayega aapko....!!! Hope it helps....!!!
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«Reply #8 on: August 15, 2010, 03:03:44 PM »
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 Thankyou ! Hats off to you! occasion18
wowwwwww ye to kitne sare hain........
thnx a lot ji....
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«Reply #10 on: August 15, 2010, 03:11:02 PM »
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soooooooooooooooooo sweettttttttttt
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«Reply #11 on: August 20, 2010, 10:34:23 AM »
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मेरी गज़ल "पता है अन्त में ...."के बारे में जो comments आए हैं वो किसी और को भी संबोधित हैं.....समझ में नहीं आ रहा है ....देख लें.

                                                  "ओमप्रकाश यती"
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«Reply #12 on: August 20, 2010, 11:18:02 AM »
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Yati ji aapki kavita me comment aapke liye hi hai,.....

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wah Yati ji wah... kya kehne aapke.. shabdon ko jodke aapne shabdon ki sarita bana di aur ye sarita hamaare dil se behti hui chali gayi... badi hi khoobsurti se, bade hi pyaare aur aasaan se shabdon me aapne apni is kavita ko pesh kiya hai... bahut achchi lagi humein aapki ye kavita... bahut sundar kavita likhi hai aapne....!!!




uske baad ye dusra comment Kasak ji ki kavita ke liye hai jo unhone aapke post ke jawaab me likha hai....ab maine unki poem apne comment ke niche quote kar diya hai...


bas kam shabdon me main ye kehna chahunga Kasak ji ... aap pyar mohabbat ke saath jeewan ki sachchai bhi bahut khoobsurti se likhti hain... bahut deep thoughts hain aaapke is kavita me.... u r great...!!!

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«Reply #13 on: August 20, 2010, 11:39:03 AM »
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Yati-ji mubaarak ho....dekha aapne kitna achha likhte hain aap aur kitna pasand karte hai aap ki kavita ko........jeevan ki sachai ko saral shabdo me kaha hai aapne..... Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause

Jaante hain sab ye jeevan ki sachayi
Par kisee ne bhee nahi isko apnaayi.....

Maya k jaal se he kaun bach paayi
Har kisi ki kee hai isne rushwayi....
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पता  है  अन्त  में किस राह पर संसार जाता है
मगर मन है कि माया की तरफ हर बार जाता है

वहाँ बस नेकियाँ ही साथ जा पाती हैं, सुनते हैं
यहीं पर छूट धन-दौलत का ये अम्बार जाता है

सिमटता जा रहा है जिस्म के ही दायरे में बस
कहाँ अब  रूह की गहराइयों तक प्यार जाता है

कोई  मासूम  बच्चा छोड़ता है नाव काग़ज़ की
तो इक चींटा भी लेकर के उसे उस पार जाता है       

जिसे  हम धर्म का प्रहरी समझते हैं वही इक दिन
जुए में घर की इज़्ज़त, घर की शोभा हार जाता है



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«Reply #14 on: August 21, 2010, 12:22:20 AM »
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wah Yati ji wah... kya kehne aapke.. shabdon ko jodke aapne shabdon ki sarita bana di aur ye sarita hamaare dil se behti hui chali gayi... badi hi khoobsurti se, bade hi pyaare aur aasaan se shabdon me aapne apni is kavita ko pesh kiya hai... bahut achchi lagi humein aapki ye kavita... bahut sundar kavita likhi hai aapne....!!!
klaskar ji,ghazal padhne aur us par pratikriya dene ke liye aabhari hun....."omprakash yati"
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