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by Zaif on March 20, 2014, 04:00:27 PM
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Ek prayas -

ग़ज़ल - (122 122 122)
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लगा था, करीं* थे हमारे।
मगर वो नहीं थे हमारे।
(*क़रीब)

हमीं ने भरोसा किया था,
क़तल सब यक़ीं थे हमारे।

मज़ा क्यूँ न देगी लड़ाई?
रक़ीब नमकीं थे हमारे।

रिहाई न अब इश्क़ देगा,
गुनह भी हसीं थे हमारे।

न क्यूँकर जले चाँद हमसे?
सनम मह'ज़बीं थे हमारे।

न थे 'ज़ैफ़', कम लोग याँ पे,
मगर इक हमीं थे हमारे।

2014 © ज़ैफ़

(बह्र के जानकार मित्र कृपया ग़लतियां बताएं)

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Ghazal - (122 122 122)
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Laga tha, karee.N the hamaare..
Magar wo nahee.N the hamaare..

Humee.N ne bharosa kiya tha,
Qatal sab yaqee.N the hamaare..

Mazaa kyun na degi ladaai?
Raqeeb namkee.N the hamaare..

Rihaai na ab ishq dega,
Gunah bhi hasee.N the hamaare..

Na kyunkar jale chaand humse?
Sanam mah'zabee.N the hamaare..

Na the 'Zaif', kam log yaa.N pe,
Magar ik hunee.N the hamaare..

2014 © Zaif

(Behr ke jaankar mitr kripya ghalriyaa.N bataa'eN)
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«Reply #1 on: March 20, 2014, 04:06:10 PM »
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 Applause
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«Reply #2 on: March 20, 2014, 04:22:48 PM »
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ahcha laga dekh kar ki koi aur bhi beh'r men likhne ki kosish kar raha hai.. jazbaat ahche hain par takniki khaamiyan haiN jinse mere khayaal se saini sir ne aapko waakif kara diya hoga, mashq jaari rakhen... Usual Smile
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«Reply #3 on: March 20, 2014, 05:00:44 PM »
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jee haan. Shukriya  Main koshish kr rha hu.
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«Reply #4 on: March 20, 2014, 05:56:00 PM »
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Laga tha, karee.N the hamaare..
Magar wo nahee.N the hamaare..

Humee.N ne bharosa kiya tha,
Qatal sab yaqee.N the hamaare..

Mazaa kyun na degi ladaai?
Raqeeb namkee.N the hamaare..   <=========<  Huh??

Rihaai na ab ishq dega,
Gunah bhi hasee.N the hamaare..

Na kyunkar jale chaand humse?
Sanam mah'zabee.N the hamaare..

Na the 'Zaif', kam log yaa.N pe,
Magar ik hunee.N the hamaare..

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«Reply #5 on: March 20, 2014, 06:25:50 PM »
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 Applause Applause
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«Reply #6 on: March 20, 2014, 07:42:20 PM »
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Waaaaaaaah... bahut khooooooooooob... dheron daaaaaad..
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«Reply #7 on: March 20, 2014, 07:44:17 PM »
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waah...bahut hi khub........
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«Reply #8 on: March 21, 2014, 12:43:29 AM »
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Humee.N ne bharosa kiya tha,
Qatal sab yaqee.N the hamaare..
ApplauseApplauseApplauseApplause Applause
Mazaa kyun na degi ladaai?
Raqeeb namkee.N the hamaare..
ApplauseApplauseApplauseApplause Applause
Rihaai na ab ishq dega,
Gunah bhi hasee.N the hamaare..

Na kyunkar jale chaand humse?
Sanam mah'zabee.N the hamaare..
ApplauseApplauseApplauseApplause Applause
Na the 'Zaif', kam log yaa.N pe,
Magar ik hunee.N the hamaare..
ApplauseApplauseApplauseApplause ApplauseApplauseApplauseApplause ApplauseApplauseApplauseApplause

 
ya bat hai Zaif Jee.
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«Reply #9 on: March 21, 2014, 01:59:34 AM »
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waah waah waaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaah Zaif bhai bahut khoob, bahut achha laga behr meN likhte dekh kar aapko. DheroN daad aur ek Rau meri taraf se. Bas ye misra behr se juda hai:

"Raqeeb namkee.N the hamaare.. "
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«Reply #10 on: March 21, 2014, 02:08:43 AM »
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wha wha! keep it up zaif ji
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«Reply #11 on: March 21, 2014, 04:41:40 AM »
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Wah! Bahut Khoob. Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause

Surindar.N   Applause Applause Applause
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«Reply #12 on: March 21, 2014, 09:04:46 AM »
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Bahut shukriya aap sabhi ko.. Aap sabhi bahut sabr or saadgi se pesh aaye. Ek mitr to meri is galti pe is tarah bolne lage jaise maine koi khoon kar diya ho. Are yaar main seekh hi to raha hu. Ab pehli pehli ghazalen perfect to kisi ki b nhi ho skti. Waqt lgta h yar seekhne me. Main kam se kam koshish to kar ri rha hu na? Dheere-dheere hi sahi, par aage badh to rha hu na?
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«Reply #13 on: March 21, 2014, 09:06:05 AM »
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very nice
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«Reply #14 on: March 21, 2014, 09:07:04 AM »
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Or ahmed ji apka bhi shukriya,
maine sudhar kiya hai isme -

Mazaa kyun na deti ladaai?
Adoo aafree.N the hamaare..
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