Main Shayar Hoon Mujhe Sirf Daad Dijiye "Khwaish"

by khwaish on June 19, 2012, 03:18:06 PM
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'Rau' Ka Ajeeb Saa Yeh khel Niraala Hai
SacheN Ke Mooh Pe bas Taala Hai

Yeh 'Rau' Hai yeh Koi Sabzee-Tarkaari..!!!!
Mujhe To Lagta Daal mein Sab Kaala hai

Jisse Dekho 'Rau' Mein Mashroof Hai
YahaaN Chal Raha  Ab Gadbad-Ghotaala Hai

Jisne Abhi kalam Tak Sahee Nahi Thaami..!!!
Uske Haath Mein Ab 100-100 'Rau' Ki Maala Hai

Main SHAYAR Hoon Mujhe Sirf Daad Dijiye
Afsos Daad Se Zyada 'Rau' ka Bol-Baala Hai

Uss Taraf Chalo Sab JahaaN Roshni Ho..
Par Log YahaN Dhoondhe Andhere MeN Ujaala Hai

"Khwaish" Jee Ab Aap Bhi Jee-Huzoori Ka Kirdaar Apna Lijiye
 Jaam To Usse Ka Hoga , Jis Ke Haath mein Pyaala Hai

                   ~~~~~Khwaish~~~~~~
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«Reply #1 on: June 19, 2012, 03:26:23 PM »
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Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause  bahut bahut khoob likha hai aapne Khwaish ji... bahut sundar shabdon me aapne ise pesh kiya hai... sach kahiye to is RAU waale khel se main bhi kuch khaas khush nahi hoon.. kyun de rahe hain, kis baat pe de rahe hain, kis post pe de rahe hain iska kuch ataa pataa nahi...!!!
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«Reply #2 on: June 19, 2012, 03:30:24 PM »
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waaaahhhh waahhhh waahhhh Khwaish sahab
bht badhiya post Usual Smile

isme mera naam mentiond h wo bhi silently tongue3

iss khoob kalaam pe dher saari daad

khus rahen
muskurate rahen
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«Reply #3 on: June 19, 2012, 03:37:19 PM »
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Rau' Ka Ajeeb Saa Yeh khel Niraala Hai
SacheN Ke Mooh Pe bas Taala Hai

Yeh 'Rau' Hai yeh Koi Sabzee-Tarkaari..!!!!
Mujhe To Lagta Daal mein Sab Kaala hai

bahut accha laga padkar khwaish jee. but yeh 'Rau' kya hai?
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«Reply #4 on: June 19, 2012, 04:24:11 PM »
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Bahut  khoob  Khwaish  ji  .  Aap  ne  mere  dil  ki  baat  kah  di .
Maine  bhi  kuchh  likhne  ki  koshish  ki  thhi  lekin mukammal na kar saka..
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«Reply #5 on: June 19, 2012, 04:36:55 PM »
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bilkul bhaai theek kahaa hai aapne aap adm se mil kar ise band karaa de.kyonki kaheen n kaheen ye dilon men khataas paidaa kar rahaa hai
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«Reply #6 on: June 19, 2012, 05:03:08 PM »
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interesting
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«Reply #7 on: June 19, 2012, 05:17:46 PM »
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khwaish ji..waah waah..bahut khoob...mubaarak ho....Raqeeb
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«Reply #8 on: June 19, 2012, 05:39:48 PM »
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RAU KA MATLAB MAIN BHI JANTA NAHEEN

RAU MILE NA MILE FARAK PARHTA NAHIN
LIKHTE HAIN HAM APNI KHUSHI KE LIYE

DOSTON KO ACHHA LAGE TO BAHUT ACHHA
NA LAGE TO BAHUT FARAK PARHTA NAHIN
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«Reply #9 on: June 19, 2012, 05:51:05 PM »
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sir aapne mere dil jeet  liya.........waqaiy shayar ho to aap jaisa........
apne is fan se dehron daaaaaddddddd......... Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley
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«Reply #10 on: June 19, 2012, 06:26:48 PM »
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mastam mast lika hai khawaishji..... zabardasttttttt...... aap mazahiya shayri bhi karte hain ab pata chala aur kya sahi nishana maara ahi.... admin ji zara ispar gaur karen........
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«Reply #11 on: June 20, 2012, 03:46:22 AM »
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bahut khub aur sahi likha hai khwaishji.... RAu samjh se pare hai....
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«Reply #12 on: June 20, 2012, 04:43:31 AM »
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mai yahan kehna chahunga ki iss thread ko bs ek majahia post ki trah hi len--

ye koi RAU systm ke upar discussion nhi h
Admin ji pehle hi bta chuke hain ki RAU ka mtlb shayar ki quality darshana nahi h--

iss RAU ke karan koi khataas ya manmutav create ho aisa mujhe nahi lgta
aapka mnn ho RAU dijie ya na dijie bas.

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«Reply #13 on: June 20, 2012, 05:39:31 AM »
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Bahut Bahut khoob Khwaish jee. Applause Applause
Aapke 2nd, 3rd, aur last ka ashaar, kya kahne ,
Vaaah vaaah
Daal me kaala, gadbad gotaala hai, jee hujoori..
Bhai tanj bhee kya khoob, aur jab loha garam ho..

Maafi chaahta hun, do line likhne ka man kar gaya RAU par, hai hee itna pyara subject.  Majaak ke taur par leejiyega. Mai koi SHAYAR nahee bas aise hi likh diya hai.
Rau ki khwaish me mai din raat hee lagaa rahta
Mai tumhe deta hun, badle me do yahee kahta
Subah se sham tak iskee jugat me rahta hun
Meri pahchaan hai, hata do mai nahee kahta

Sarfira jee ne theek farmaaya, Ye koi shayar ki writing skill kee pahchaan nahee.
Nahee to Saadiq rijvee Sahab, Hasan Sahab, Satish Sahab, Arun Mishra Sahab, Aur bhee Yo pe ek se ek ghajal ke maharathiyon ke RAU mujhse kam nahee hote.. kitne saalo se hum hausalaafjaai ke shabdo ke saath shayri kar rahe the aur log khush the.

Par naye logo ko RAU deke misguide karna sahee nahee. Unhe sirf aur sirf DAAD kee jaroorat hai...Unka hausla badhana chahiye. Unkee shayri skill me koi kamee hai to jaroor suggest karna chahiye.(vo jaise chahe -thru pm/ thread)

Khwaish jee.. Ek baar phir aapko mubaarakbaad dete hai is khoobsurat cration ke liye..likhte rahiye
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«Reply #14 on: June 20, 2012, 04:08:08 PM »
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Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause  bahut bahut khoob likha hai aapne Khwaish ji... bahut sundar shabdon me aapne ise pesh kiya hai... sach kahiye to is RAU waale khel se main bhi kuch khaas khush nahi hoon.. kyun de rahe hain, kis baat pe de rahe hain, kis post pe de rahe hain iska kuch ataa pataa nahi...!!!


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