Aam adami

by bekarar on June 02, 2008, 07:24:13 AM
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Bana, bigda, gira, sambhla, Utha, baitha, baha, bahka
Kabhi roya, kabhi chahka, kabhi khoya kabhi mahka,
Kabhi tanha kabhi mela, kabhi mahfilon me akela,
Soona samajha, hansa bola, kabhi masha kabhi tola,

kabhi rashan kabhi kapade, paani ke liye jhagde,
kerosin kabhi shakkar, kabhi chanwal kabhi kankar,
udhaari wo baniye ki, nikal janaa hai fir chupkar,
kahan khoya mera bachpan, kahan jawani gai chookar,

sardi me kabhi thithoora,  kabhi garmi ne sahmaya
sapano me pahna garam suit, ac, cooler sab khwab raha,
kabhi bachchon ke kapdon me, kabhi babooji ke kambal me,
maa ke tan se lipat gaya, wo garam suit bas khwab raha,

kabhi shaadi kabhi bachche, kabhi jhuthe kabhi sachche,
kanhi maa-baap me ulajha, kahin biwi ne bharmaya,
kabhi do ghunt me bahka, kabhi yaron ne bahkaya,
kabhi dukh bhi lage sukh se, kabhi sukh me bhi dukh paaya.

Kabhi biwi ki baton me maa-baap se ualjha,
Kabhi maa-baap ki sun li biwi ko dhamkaya,
Kabhi bachchon ke jhagdon me, kabhi school ko lekar
Jo kuch khud na kar paya, bachchon se karwaya.


Kuch bhi aisa kar na saka, ki log mujhe fir yaad kare,
Mere bare me bhi soche, mujhpe koi baat kare.
Mai hun ek aam aadmi, bus itana hi kar paaya hun,
Subah nikla , shaam aaya, schoolon ki fees bhari,
Danta dapta mara peeta, fir aahon ki teese bhari,
Dawa-daru, kiraya-paani,
khaali haath chai paani,……………………….
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«Reply #1 on: June 02, 2008, 07:53:14 AM »
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Waah... Its really really very nice.. Applause
I read it atleast 5 times... but still want to read it again and again..

Bahut sahi likha hai Bekarar Ji, ek kadwa sach hai zindagi ka.. Ek aam aadmi kehne ko kuch nahin karta, koi khaas naam bhi nahin kamaata.. phir bhi sara din zindagi jeene ke liye bhagta phirta hai... aur akhir mein dekhta hai ki zindagi khatam hone waali hai lekin phir bhi bahut kuch adhoora hi reh gaya hai...

 
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«Reply #2 on: June 02, 2008, 09:56:17 AM »
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Quote from: Mahiya on June 02, 2008, 07:53:14 AM
Waah... Its really really very nice.. Applause
I read it atleast 5 times... but still want to read it again and again..

Bahut sahi likha hai Bekarar Ji, ek kadwa sach hai zindagi ka.. Ek aam aadmi kehne ko kuch nahin karta, koi khaas naam bhi nahin kamaata.. phir bhi sara din zindagi jeene ke liye bhagta phirta hai... aur akhir mein dekhta hai ki zindagi khatam hone waali hai lekin phir bhi bahut kuch adhoora hi reh gaya hai...

 



shukriya mahiya ji....
aap kavita ki rooh taq pahoonchi, mahsoos kiya aur housala-afzai ki..........ye meri liye bahoot badi baat hai
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«Reply #3 on: June 02, 2008, 10:06:17 AM »
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bekaraar ji,

ek aam aadami pur aapki KHAAS kavita he yeh.aap accha likhte he,mein accha shrota hu.. lekin aam adami ek kavita ka mehaz shirshak bun kur na rahe jaaye ...aapki kavita se prerit ho hum sub bus kisi ek aadami ko-jo humaare se he juda ho ..kaash khaas banane ka sankalp lele-to aapki kavita dhanya ho jaaye...maarmik ehsaas he yeh kavita..shukriya.
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«Reply #4 on: June 02, 2008, 02:24:06 PM »
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bahut bahut khoob!!! ek ek akshar zindagi ki sachai bayaan karti hai..aapne sach mein bahut khoob likha.. Applause Applause Applause
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«Reply #5 on: June 02, 2008, 06:33:06 PM »
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bahoot khoob Bekarar ji, bahoot he dil se apne yah kavita likhi hai...ek ek shabd such ko bayan karta hua.... a very good creation!!

 Applause Applause Applause
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«Reply #6 on: June 02, 2008, 06:49:21 PM »
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Bekarar....Excellent creation... Applause Applause

Aapki kavita padhte halaq main jaise kuch atak gaya...aur aankh nam si ho gayi.......!!

Prateek Ji, aapke vichar jaane ke bohot achcha laga...aur sach bhi !!!
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«Reply #7 on: June 03, 2008, 06:47:35 AM »
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Quote from: Prateek Mardia on June 02, 2008, 10:06:17 AM
bekaraar ji,

ek aam aadami pur aapki KHAAS kavita he yeh.aap accha likhte he,mein accha shrota hu.. lekin aam adami ek kavita ka mehaz shirshak bun kur na rahe jaaye ...aapki kavita se prerit ho hum sub bus kisi ek aadami ko-jo humaare se he juda ho ..kaash khaas banane ka sankalp lele-to aapki kavita dhanya ho jaaye...maarmik ehsaas he yeh kavita..shukriya.
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prateek ji,
bahoot sunder aur salikedaar samiksha ke liye mai aapka aabhari hun......mai apni is kavita me yahi kahna chah raha hun ki "aam aadmi" kabhi shayad khass nahi ban sakta....usaki itani bhag doud aur jimmedariyan use desh, samaj, duniya ke baare me sochne ka mouka hi nahi deti..aur agar soch bhi le to bhi kuch kar nahi paata wo, bachchon ki padai aur fees ka sawal uske liye kisi bhi rashtriya samsya se kahin jyada mahatvpoorn hai...
hann lekin choti choti samsyaon se roz uski zaddozahad hi use khas bana deti hai..........
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«Reply #8 on: June 03, 2008, 07:03:20 AM »
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Quote from: khwaish on June 02, 2008, 02:24:06 PM
bahut bahut khoob!!! ek ek akshar zindagi ki sachai bayaan karti hai..aapne sach mein bahut khoob likha.. Applause Applause Applause

khwahish ji aapka bahoot bahoot shukriya ki aapne ise pada aur saraha....
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Quote from: Pooja on June 02, 2008, 06:33:06 PM
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bahoot khoob Bekarar ji, bahoot he dil se apne yah kavita likhi hai...ek ek shabd such ko bayan karta hua.... a very good creation!!

 Applause Applause Applause

pooja ji mujhe aapke comments ka hi intzaar tha aur shukr hai aapne jyad intzaar nahi karaaya....
shukriya...aapko ye kavita pasand aayi..
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«Reply #10 on: June 03, 2008, 07:08:47 AM »
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Quote from: Celmira on June 02, 2008, 06:49:21 PM
Bekarar....Excellent creation... Applause Applause

Aapki kavita padhte halaq main jaise kuch atak gaya...aur aankh nam si ho gayi.......!!

Prateek Ji, aapke vichar jaane ke bohot achcha laga...aur sach bhi !!!

talat ji ..mai yun bhi aapka ek adna sa prashansak hun.. aur aapke in do panktiyon ne is kavita ko mano sarthak kar diya..
dhanywad..
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