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by pawan16 on November 01, 2012, 10:03:48 PM
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heloo,i write one of shyari ..one of my frnd comment on it....that realy hurt me.... i am
sharing with u....i hope u r with me ......

I wrote:-
Aaj Raat thand bhut hai,
doodh rahe hai lakdiya jalane ko,
Nahi mil pa rahi hai,
to majbbor ho rahe hai dil ki aag me so jane ko........pawan

my frnd:-
bhai save tree.. use electric heater.. Usual Smile tongue3

i wrote:-
Sambki fitrat hoti hai pawan me samane ki,
par pawan ko nahi bhati jo cheez hoti hai lubane ki,
yar kya kare hum bhi samjkaro dost,
EK madoshi apni hi hoti hai is aag me so jane ki..


my frnd:-
bhai itna mat doobna aag me ki ata pata hi na mile tumhara.. Usual Smile tongue3

i wrote:-
Hum tumko kya bataye dost,tum hume nahi jante ho,
hum tumhari saanso me rahte hai tum humko nahi pechante ho,
jab tak hum hai jab tak tum ho,
ye baat kyu nahi mante ho..

my frnd:-
bhai pee ke baitha hai kya.

i wrote:-
Bhai nasha bhi ye apna alag sa hai,
kyoki sawal aaj likhi apni kalam ka hai,
humne jajbaat bayan kiye hai bas kuch,
bas ye kumaar tumhare ilm ka hai
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«Reply #1 on: November 01, 2012, 10:28:40 PM »
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heloo,i write one of shyari ..one of my frnd comment on it....that realy hurt me.... i am
sharing with u....i hope u r with me ......

I wrote:-
Aaj Raat thand bhut hai,
doodh rahe hai lakdiya jalane ko,
Nahi mil pa rahi hai,
to majbbor ho rahe hai dil ki aag me so jane ko........pawan

my frnd:-
bhai save tree.. use electric heater.. Usual Smile tongue3

i wrote:-
Sambki fitrat hoti hai pawan me samane ki,
par pawan ko nahi bhati jo cheez hoti hai lubane ki,
yar kya kare hum bhi samjkaro dost,
EK madoshi apni hi hoti hai is aag me so jane ki..


my frnd:-
bhai itna mat doobna aag me ki ata pata hi na mile tumhara.. Usual Smile tongue3

i wrote:-
Hum tumko kya bataye dost,tum hume nahi jante ho,
hum tumhari saanso me rahte hai tum humko nahi pechante ho,
jab tak hum hai jab tak tum ho,
ye baat kyu nahi mante ho..

my frnd:-
bhai pee ke baitha hai kya.

i wrote:-
Bhai nasha bhi ye apna alag sa hai,
kyoki sawal aaj likhi apni kalam ka hai,
humne jajbaat bayan kiye hai bas kuch,
bas ye kumaar tumhare ilm ka hai


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«Reply #2 on: November 02, 2012, 06:04:01 AM »
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good good
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«Reply #3 on: November 02, 2012, 06:32:23 AM »
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nice, do not feel hurt, kavi ko aalochna sehne ki aadat honi chahiye, tabhi aapka hunar nikhrega, aap apne dost ko thanx kahiye
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«Reply #4 on: November 02, 2012, 01:24:05 PM »
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dont mind it
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