Kisi Ki Soch Par Koi Pahra Nahi Hota ... ( Radhika )

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Kisi Ki Soch Par Koi Pahra Nahi Hota
Saath Rehne Se Pyaar Gehra Nahi Hota

Mil Jaate Do Parwane Yahaa'N
Gar Ye Waqt YuN Thehra Nahi Hota

Fanna Hoti Ye Zindagi Pal Mai
Saath Yeh Gar Chehra Nahi Hota

Muqambal Karte Har Aarzoo Apni
Zamaane Ka Gar Pahra Nahi Hota

Puri Karti Har Tamanna 'Radhika'
Kismat Me'N Gar Pyaas Ka Sehra Nahi Hota
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«Reply #1 on: September 02, 2010, 09:08:47 PM »
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bahut bahut Khoob Radhika Ji.

Aapke Aur kalaamo ka Intezaar Rahega...

Bahut Ache Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley
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«Reply #2 on: September 02, 2010, 09:22:11 PM »
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WAh !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Kamal.................
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«Reply #3 on: September 02, 2010, 09:27:09 PM »
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Radhikaa Jee Aadaab!

Pahele to aapka is bazm meiN suwagat hai..... Aapko yahaaN dekhkar achcha laga hume... Usual Smile

Aur aapne kalaam bhi bahut pyaari pesh kii hai Daad mohtarmaa...... Usual Smile          



Kisi Ki Soch Par Koi Pahra Nahi Hota
Saath Rehne Se Pyaar Gehra Nahi Hota

Waah Kia baat hai...... bahut khoob bahut umdaa.... Aik talak sach ko bayaaN kiyaa hai aapne daad          


Mil Jaate Do Parwane Yahaa'N
Gar Ye Waqt YuN Thehra Nahi Hota

Aik wargi nazar meiN sher achcha laga hume... par Aapke is sher ko kafi der sochte raheN... par samjh meiN nahi aaya ke waqt thehra kaise... Kis baat ki taraf aapka ishaara hai          


Fanna Hoti Ye Zindagi Pal Mai
Saath Yeh Gar Chehra Nahi Hota

Masha Allah kia kaheN bus daad... bahut umdaa, bahut jyaada umdaa Usual Smile          


Muqambal Karte Har Aarzoo Apni
Zamaane Ka Gar Pahra Nahi Hota

Kia baat hai... Duniyaa ke rasmo rivaaj hi kuch aise hai .. Bahut achcah laga          


Puri Karti Har Tamanna 'Radhika'
Kismat Me'N Gar Pyaas Ka Sehra Nahi Hota

Maqta bhi khoob kaha hai aapne daad.. Usual Smile          




Achchi aur behad umdaa koshish per dil se daad hazir hai.....

Aur koi gustaqui huyi ho to dil se mazarrat khuwaa hai...

Likhati rahiye.....
Khush rahiye......
Khuda Hafez          

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«Reply #4 on: September 03, 2010, 03:06:52 AM »
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 Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley

Bahut khoob Radhika ji,.... bahut pyaara likha hai apne...!!!
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«Reply #5 on: September 03, 2010, 12:55:29 PM »
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Kisi Ki Soch Par Koi Pahra Nahi Hota
Saath Rehne Se Pyaar Gehra Nahi Hota

Mil Jaate Do Parwane Yahaa'N
Gar Ye Waqt YuN Thehra Nahi Hota

Fanna Hoti Ye Zindagi Pal Mai
Saath Yeh Gar Chehra Nahi Hota

Muqambal Karte Har Aarzoo Apni
Zamaane Ka Gar Pahra Nahi Hota

Puri Karti Har Tamanna 'Radhika'
Kismat Me'N Gar Pyaas Ka Sehra Nahi Hota

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«Reply #6 on: September 04, 2010, 04:04:22 AM »
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Kisi Ki Soch Par Koi Pahra Nahi Hota
Saath Rehne Se Pyaar Gehra Nahi Hota


Good One .... Radhika Ji ! Very Impressive ... !

Very Nice Creation... dil se daad ... !

khush rahen...
duaaon ke saath...
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«Reply #7 on: September 04, 2010, 04:18:19 PM »
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bahut khoob radhika ji  Applause
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«Reply #8 on: September 04, 2010, 04:33:49 PM »
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wah wah kaya baat hai Rdhika ji... First tow lines and last two lines... kamaal.. waise her ek line bahoot achi likhi hai magar yeh char line dil chu gai.. good work!!!
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«Reply #9 on: September 04, 2010, 05:14:15 PM »
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Achhi hai aapki poem.... Applause Applause Applause

Ye sher...mai aap jo kehna chah rahi hain clear nahi huaa...so mera suggestion

 
Mil Jaate Do Parwane-pyaar k Dewaane Yahaa'N
Gar Ye Waqt YuN hi kuchh dair aur Thehra Hota

Parwaazji ab dekhiye jara.....

Kisi Ki Soch Par Koi Pahra Nahi Hota
Saath Rehne Se Pyaar Gehra Nahi Hota

Mil Jaate Do Parwane Yahaa'N
Gar Ye Waqt YuN Thehra Nahi Hota

Fanna Hoti Ye Zindagi Pal Mai
Saath Yeh Gar Chehra Nahi Hota

Muqambal Karte Har Aarzoo Apni
Zamaane Ka Gar Pahra Nahi Hota

Puri Karti Har Tamanna 'Radhika'
Kismat Me'N Gar Pyaas Ka Sehra Nahi Hota


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«Reply #10 on: September 04, 2010, 05:47:51 PM »
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Achhi hai aapki poem.... Applause Applause Applause

Ye sher...mai aap jo kehna chah rahi hain clear nahi huaa...so mera suggestion

 
Mil Jaate Do Parwane-pyaar k Dewaane Yahaa'N
Gar Ye Waqt YuN hi kuchh dair aur Thehra Hota

Parwaazji ab dekhiye jara.....


Koyal Jee... Aapki koshish sahiN hai ... Baat to ban gayi per sher nahi bana..... tongue3 just kidding

unka basic rhyming word hi ulta hai "Nahi hota" isliye... sher sahiN nahi lag raha tha hume... aapne jyada kuch nahi karti  sirf "nahi" ko nikal deti aap to obviusly sher sahiN ho jata...... But nice try... keep trying... Usual Smile
         

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«Reply #11 on: September 05, 2010, 12:16:21 PM »
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Samjhi.......

Koyal Jee... Aapki koshish sahiN hai ... Baat to ban gayi per sher nahi bana..... tongue3 just kidding

unka basic rhyming word hi ulta hai "Nahi hota" isliye... sher sahiN nahi lag raha tha hume... aapne jyada kuch nahi karti  sirf "nahi" ko nikal deti aap to obviusly sher sahiN ho jata...... But nice try... keep trying... Usual Smile
         




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«Reply #12 on: September 06, 2010, 08:53:50 AM »
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Koyal Jee... Aapki koshish sahiN hai ... Baat to ban gayi per sher nahi bana..... tongue3 just kidding

unka basic rhyming word hi ulta hai "Nahi hota" isliye... sher sahiN nahi lag raha tha hume... aapne jyada kuch nahi karti  sirf "nahi" ko nikal deti aap to obviusly sher sahiN ho jata...... But nice try... keep trying... Usual Smile
         



ji bhaut dair se hi sahi samaj to aaya......
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«Reply #13 on: September 09, 2010, 05:21:50 AM »
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bahut bahut Khoob Radhika Ji.

Aapke Aur kalaamo ka Intezaar Rahega...

Bahut Ache Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley


ji bhaut bhaut shukriya...............
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«Reply #14 on: September 14, 2010, 03:12:35 PM »
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WAh !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Kamal.................

Ji .. bahut bahut shukriya ........ aapki daad ka
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