-----/// Main udaas kyun hoon /// ----- Hriday

by ~Hriday~ on June 27, 2012, 05:09:38 PM
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hmmmmmm aaj kuch soch me doobaa huwa hoon.. par kya pataa nahi.. kisi wajah se mera mann udaas hai... samajh nahi aa raha hai ki wo wajah kya hai... bas jo dil me aayaa likhta chalaa gayaa... bas ashaant dil se nikle kuch lines hain koi poem nahi...!!!


aaj mera dil udaas kyun hai
kisi se koi rishta nahi mera
koi aisa nahi jo apna ho mera
magar fir bhi kuch to hai
kuch aisa jo mujhe roke huye hai
kuch aisa jo mujhe baandhe huye hai
magar kya? main samajh paataa nahi
main ye jaan paataa nahi

koi aisa nahi hai jisse mujhe mohabbat ho
koi aisa nahi jo mere khwaabon me aata ho
magar kuch to hai, koi to hai,
jisne mujhe roka hai
magar kaun? koi bataa de mujhe
main is koshish me hoon ki rok lun khudko
magar kiske liye, kyun rokun khud ko main
main udaas hoon aaj, par wajah maloom nahi
poochhta hoon main apne dil se bas ek sawaal
aaj main aur mera dil udaas kyun hai

kya aisa bhi hota hai ki koi wajah naa ho
koi hamaaraa ho magar humein maloom naa ho
tadap rahaa hoon kisi ke liye, par kaun hai wo
na samajh paayaa tha kabhi, naa ab samajh payaa hoon
par sawal bas yahi hai ki, main udaas kyun hoon
aaj ye dil mera bhalaa udaas kyun hai

maloom hai ki sambhal jaaunga main
kuch pal me sab bhool jaaunga main
magar kuch yaad nahi ki bhuloon kya
kuch to hai jisne mujhe paagal banaa rakha hai
magar kya ? koi hai kya jisse mera lagaaw hai
is baat ka ehsaas hai ki kuch chhoot raha hai
magar kya is baat ka aabhaas nahi hai mujhe
pataa hai to bas mujhe itna pataa hai
ki main udaas hoon, mera dil udaas hai
magar dil mera ye bhalaa udaas kyun hai???
ye dil mera aaj itna udaas kyun hai???


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«Reply #1 on: June 27, 2012, 05:14:40 PM »
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aaj apna bhi haal kuch aisa hi hai itni mayusi ki sab chhod jane ka mann kar raha hai........bahut hi khub kalaam hai aapko dhero dad aur mubarakbaad.........hamesa muskrate rahe.........aur likhe to hamesa chaht ke milan par jyada likhein kyunki wo aap par jyada sahi rehti hai.......

phir mulaqat hogi shayad.
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«Reply #2 on: June 27, 2012, 05:14:55 PM »
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 Applause Applause Applause Applause bahut bahut badhiya creation...!
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«Reply #3 on: June 27, 2012, 05:43:14 PM »
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Bohat khoobsurat start tha Nazm ka Hriday jee....really aap dil se likh rahey they......bas thoda Nazm ki closing gadbada gayee........ant me hamesha apni soch ko apne sawaal ko sameitne ko koshish karein........Nazm me agar climax nahi hoga to woh bekaar si lagegi.

But truly a wonderful attempt.
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«Reply #4 on: June 27, 2012, 06:22:29 PM »
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khubsuratttttttttttttttttttt.......... aur ab udasi chhodo aur ek new umang jaoagao.. nai zindagi naya destination bula raha hai tumhe.... enjoy evry minute of this time wid P nd family..... aur fir bhi udaasi dur na ho to main kis liye hun... tumhari udaasi dur karne ka best of best option,,, tongue3
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«Reply #5 on: June 28, 2012, 12:41:56 AM »
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heart touching creation
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«Reply #6 on: June 28, 2012, 06:02:46 AM »
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Bohot khub.....
Dil si likhi gayi lines hai....
Bohot khub..
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«Reply #7 on: July 15, 2012, 11:47:31 AM »
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khoobsuarti se sajaaye hai aapne apne dil k alfaazon ko.....bahut hi khoob...
i hope ab tak aapko apne udaas dil ka karan mil gaya hoga aur aapki udaasi door bhi ho gayi hogi.... Applause Applause Applause Applause
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«Reply #8 on: July 23, 2012, 02:07:10 PM »
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bahut bahut shukriyaa Soudagar ji... bas yunhi kabhi kabhi udaasi pe bhi likh lena chahiye..... dil ka bojh halka ho jaataa hai yahi soch ke likh liyaa...!!!

aaj apna bhi haal kuch aisa hi hai itni mayusi ki sab chhod jane ka mann kar raha hai........bahut hi khub kalaam hai aapko dhero dad aur mubarakbaad.........hamesa muskrate rahe.........aur likhe to hamesa chaht ke milan par jyada likhein kyunki wo aap par jyada sahi rehti hai.......

phir mulaqat hogi shayad.
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«Reply #9 on: July 24, 2012, 03:04:47 PM »
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bahut bahut shukriyaaa Jazbaat ji...!!!

Applause Applause Applause Applause bahut bahut badhiya creation...!
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«Reply #10 on: July 24, 2012, 03:32:08 PM »
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HIRDAY JI BARHEE KHOOBI SE MAN KI BAAT KAHI HAI
DI KI BAAT KAHNE SE RAAHAT MILTI HAI
DUKH BANT TE HAIN US SE JO KAREEB HOTA HAI
YO INDIA PE SAB APKE KAREEB HAIN
LIKHTE RAHEEYE BANT TE RAHEEYE KHSHI BHI GAM BHI
HAM SAB KE AUR KAREEB AATE RAHEEYE
GOD BLESS YOU
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«Reply #11 on: August 01, 2012, 02:19:56 PM »
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Thanks a lot...!!!

Bohat khoobsurat start tha Nazm ka Hriday jee....really aap dil se likh rahey they......bas thoda Nazm ki closing gadbada gayee........ant me hamesha apni soch ko apne sawaal ko sameitne ko koshish karein........Nazm me agar climax nahi hoga to woh bekaar si lagegi.

But truly a wonderful attempt.
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«Reply #12 on: August 02, 2012, 03:01:37 PM »
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Thanks a lot ji....!!!

khubsuratttttttttttttttttttt.......... aur ab udasi chhodo aur ek new umang jaoagao.. nai zindagi naya destination bula raha hai tumhe.... enjoy evry minute of this time wid P nd family..... aur fir bhi udaasi dur na ho to main kis liye hun... tumhari udaasi dur karne ka best of best option,,, tongue3
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«Reply #13 on: August 03, 2012, 01:03:59 PM »
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thanks a lot Saini ji....!!!

heart touching creation
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«Reply #14 on: August 06, 2012, 12:05:54 PM »
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bahut bahut shukriyaa Akash ji...!!!

Bohot khub.....
Dil si likhi gayi lines hai....
Bohot khub..
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