~*~ Shayar badal jate hai ~*~ by Rahim

by dead heart on January 12, 2011, 09:15:36 PM
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Ek gane ki lines suni aj toh ussi line ko apni iss nazm ki pehli line bana raha hoon baki sab lines dil ne kehdi..

Najane kya likhna tha, kya likh gaya mager jo likha hai, woh dil se likha hai..alag alag sachayion kay saath kuch likh paya hoon..

Faraz ka ek shaer khaas tour pe quote karna chahta hoon yahan, especially for my last stanza of this poem..

"Charrte suraj kay pujari toh hazaron hai Faraz,
Doobte waqt humne suraj ko bhi tanha dekha hai.."

Aina wohi rehta hai; chehre badal jate hai,
Dil wohi rehta hai; bas rehne wale badal jate hai..

Aisa nahin hai kay sirf ussi ne zakhmi kiya mujhe,
Jism wohi rehta hai; bas zakhm dene wale badal jate hai..

Kabhi khushi toh kabhi ghum; wusul hai zindagi ka yeh,
Duniya wohi rehti hai; bas mausam badal jate hai..

Main likhta hoon nazmein toh isme koi karishma nahin,
Ehsaas wohi rehte hai; bas lavz badal jate hai..

Itrana nahin waah waahi paa kar tu kabhi ‘Khamosh’,
Tu bilkul suraj ki misal hai; ek dinn dhal jaega,
Mehfilein wohi rehti hai; bas shayar badal jate hai..

~..Rahim..~..A Silent Heart..~
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«Reply #1 on: January 12, 2011, 09:22:43 PM »
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kya baat hai rahim ji bahut hi khoob... khaas kar last stanza, bahut sahi kaha aapne... khush rahiye....


kisi ke badalne ka kya gila karein hum Rahim
ki zamaana badal gaya, par Intezar wahi reh gaya... !

Intezar !
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«Reply #2 on: January 12, 2011, 10:56:24 PM »
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Teh dil se shukriya Intezar dost..

Bahaut khoob likha hai apne..
Khush rahiye..!
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«Reply #3 on: January 13, 2011, 03:30:13 AM »
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bilkul sachhe ehsaas Rahim bhai.
khus rahiye
sukriya
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kaha thi aur kaha hai zindgi
maut ki sez pe dhua hai zindgi

car,bangla, izzato sohrat
yakenan ek nasha hai zindgi

jo zahar pee ke dawa de uski
fanaa hokar Baka hai zindgi

hawa ke rehmo-karam par sanse,
sookhi ret pe likha hai zindgi
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sukriya
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«Reply #4 on: January 13, 2011, 04:04:19 AM »
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wah wah....rahimji...khub likha hai

daad kubul karen

 Applause Applause Applause
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«Reply #5 on: January 13, 2011, 06:14:06 AM »
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rahim ji .........

sach likha he apne.........bina kisi milawat ke.haqiqat yahi he duniya ki.........bahot aacha laga apki ye poetry padkar.........aacha lagta he apko padna.........keep it up dear..
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«Reply #6 on: January 13, 2011, 07:43:22 AM »
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Bahut bahut Khoob Mere Bhai Rahim!!!!

Dil Se Daad!!!! "mehfile Wahi rehti Hai, Bas Shayar Badal jaate Hai"

Bahut AChe  Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley
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«Reply #7 on: January 13, 2011, 07:50:09 AM »
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Rahim ji bahut khoobsurat likha hai

padhkar bahut mazaa aaya. hello2 hello2 hello2 hello2 hello2 hello2 hello2 hello2

haan ek baat mehfil bhi wo nahin rehti.
shayar bhi badalte hain, mehfil bhi badalti hai,
I think so if u want to expain me u can add more lines to it.


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«Reply #8 on: January 13, 2011, 10:56:28 AM »
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bilkul sachhe ehsaas Rahim bhai.
khus rahiye
sukriya
***
kaha thi aur kaha hai zindgi
maut ki sez pe dhua hai zindgi

car,bangla, izzato sohrat
yakenan ek nasha hai zindgi

jo zahar pee ke dawa de uski
fanaa hokar Baka hai zindgi

hawa ke rehmo-karam par sanse,
sookhi ret pe likha hai zindgi
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sukriya
Shukriya Killbill jee..
Waqt dekar parrne ka shukriya..
Kya lines hai..bilkul sach..
Daaad..
Khush rahiye!
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«Reply #9 on: January 13, 2011, 10:57:13 AM »
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wah wah....rahimji...khub likha hai

daad kubul karen

 Applause Applause Applause
Teh dil se shukriya Manjum jee..
Yunhi saath dete rahiye..
Khush rahiye..!
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«Reply #10 on: January 13, 2011, 10:57:58 AM »
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rahim ji .........

sach likha he apne.........bina kisi milawat ke.haqiqat yahi he duniya ki.........bahot aacha laga apki ye poetry padkar.........aacha lagta he apko padna.........keep it up dear..
Badi khushi hui jankar kay kisi ko
mujhe parrne main maza ata hai..
Teh dil se shukriya dost..
Khush rahiye..!
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«Reply #11 on: January 13, 2011, 10:59:25 AM »
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Bahut bahut Khoob Mere Bhai Rahim!!!!

Dil Se Daad!!!! "mehfile Wahi rehti Hai, Bas Shayar Badal jaate Hai"

Bahut AChe  Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley

Mere Khwaish dost apka teh dil se shukriya..
Dil khush hogaya apka reply dekh..
Saath dete rahiye bass..
Khush rahiye..!
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«Reply #12 on: January 13, 2011, 11:00:48 AM »
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Rahim ji bahut khoobsurat likha hai

padhkar bahut mazaa aaya. hello2 hello2 hello2 hello2 hello2 hello2 hello2 hello2

haan ek baat mehfil bhi wo nahin rehti.
shayar bhi badalte hain, mehfil bhi badalti hai,
I think so if u want to expain me u can add more lines to it.



Pehle toh teh dil se shukriya Suresh jee..
Waise sach toh yehi hai kay mehfilein wohi rehti hai..
Yo ki mehfil ki misal le lijiye..
Yeh mehfil kal bhi yahin thi aur aj bhi yahin hai aur kal bhi yahin rahegi..mager shayad kal Rahim na ho, koi aur hoga..
Khush rahiye..!
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«Reply #13 on: January 13, 2011, 11:45:15 AM »
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bht khoob rahim ji...
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«Reply #14 on: January 13, 2011, 12:54:32 PM »
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Shihab bhaijan aur Manzil-e-ishq jee..
Teh dil se shukriya ap dono ka..
Khush rahiye..!
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