aaj tujh ko jo falak par hain bithaane waale (zarraa)

by zarraa on September 08, 2012, 08:53:55 AM
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«Reply #15 on: September 09, 2012, 03:33:25 PM »
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saini sahab ....waqt dene ka aur sarahne ka shukriya. apki baath ekdum sahi hai. waqai ghazal lambi ho gayi hai. agar chhote behr ki ghazal ho to zyada sher ek baar parhe bhi ja sakte hain, lekin agar medium ya long behr bhi ho to waqai padhne mein bahaut heavy ho jaatee hai. apka mashwara bahaut acchaa hai. is par zaroor gaur karoonga. shukriya.

Zarraa bhai logon ne doghazlaa bhee kahaa hai meree ek ghazal men ek baar 42 sher ho gaye tab maine use 7 alag alag ghazlon me todaa agar aap is khoobssorat ghazal ko do ghazlon men alag alag post karte mazaa dobala ho jataa khair meree dheron da qubool karen
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«Reply #16 on: September 09, 2012, 03:37:02 PM »
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aadaab hassan sahab .... waqt dene ka aur daad dene ka shukriya. jaisa ki maine saini sahab ke reply mein kaha, ye mashwara bilkul sahi laga mujhe. bas, ab 1 naya matla aur 1 naya makta soch raha hoon Usual Smile

zarra  saheb . bahut  achhi  ghazal  hai . lekin  main   bhi
aapko  yahi  salaah  dena  chahunga  ki  itni  lambi   ghazal
ki  jagah  aap  2  ya  3  ghazlon  mein  break  kar  ke  pesh
karein   to   itne   khubsurat   ashaar   zyada  tawajjo  aur
dilchaspi  se  parhe  jaayeinge.
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«Reply #17 on: September 09, 2012, 03:38:09 PM »
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shukriya nandbahu ji

Bahut khoob, dhero dad
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«Reply #18 on: September 09, 2012, 03:39:24 PM »
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shukriya anmol ji

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«Reply #19 on: September 09, 2012, 03:40:00 PM »
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inayat azeem ji

Bohat Achcha Kalaam Hai, Yunhi Likhte Rahe,.
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«Reply #20 on: September 09, 2012, 03:40:51 PM »
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thank you suman ji

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