Innocent children------please critique

by unicorn_girl on July 16, 2005, 05:13:07 AM
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The innocense they possess
makes you love them
The bubbly talk of theirs
makes you give them care
The sweet face of theirs
and the small tiny hands
force you to take them
in your arms
They have their own charms
there smiling face
is so tender and beautiful
that forces to keep looking
at them
they are so innocent
so cute, and so free
they don’t hate
they don’t envy
they are in their
own world.
You love them
They love you back
Wish we never grew
Or atleast our
 heart remained
The same.
Wish  We never hated
Never cheated
Just loved and Be loved
By one and all

«Reply #1 on: July 17, 2005, 01:20:14 PM »
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Nice sentiments Uni.................for the child.....

another look.....


She Lovingly called her Son
To fetch the Milk,
He instantly reverted back
Shouted in a rage of anger,
Are you made of Silk?

Do your own
Don’t involve
Me as a drone.

Mom didn’t expect
This much,
Was shocked at such.

Sat on a chair
To think why
He reacted with a snarl
How she had nurtured his care.

Mouth shut,
Like the
Door to the poor’s hut
Voice Blocked
Breath Cocked
Physique Rocked
All the memories Good or Bad
Suddenly met together
And flocked.

She thought it a dream
Primed her body to scream
Wanted to ask her son
The reason behind his
Awesome fun.

As soon as she
Turned back to talk
She received a fatal stroke
Mom was murdered
Love with all relations
Was surrendered.

He pulled out her heart
Using sharp knife and maddened art.

He ran out of the house
Heart in one hand,
Knife in the other,
Avoiding the Crowd.

He was running
The heart was smiling
Son fearing
Mom was reveling.

He stumbled over a stone
Falling to the ground.
The heart fell apart
Immediately cried for her son
That he not be hurt and depart.

And asked
Oh, My son
Did you Get hurt?
Be careful,
Put me in your shirt.

He realized his Mom’s love
But what could he do now or above
He prayed for Mom to forgive
His heinous art
And said
“I pulled out your heart
to please my love and her
Fatalist Cult”.

Allow me to free my soul
I Don't want to live anymore.
Suddenly he heard a hollow sound
It was his mother in the heaven around
Told him to live and love
Only Love is not all above.

«Reply #2 on: July 17, 2005, 01:26:27 PM »
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woderful write usual..........i know my poem above went a little off track in between forgot to mention it there........just was feeling bored and penned it down........sorry typed it down. anyways you are an instant wonderful writer , lovely
«Reply #3 on: July 17, 2005, 02:33:40 PM »
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Thanx unicorn ...I love to answer the posts instantly.......god bless you always

always Harash
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