Tazurbe

by drpandey on January 31, 2010, 11:02:57 AM

Yoindia ShayariAdab > Shayri ( Poetry ) or Shayari > Shairi - E - Zindagi > Topic: Tazurbe

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drpandey

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1. MitroN mitr banayie jaani boojhi har dhang,
Jyon pay mein paani milat dou hoot ek rang,
Dou hoot ek rang, jalan nahin det doodh ko,
Jalat dekhi nij mitr koodi bujhwat aagi ko.!

2. MitroN jalan bujhayie ghar auran ke jaay,
Jyon jal sheetal hi rahat tapti aag bujhay,
Tapti aag bujhay, jalan auran ki soukhay,
Sab andhiyara khaay deep unjiyara deikhay.!

3. MitroN jal ko dekhiye kaisa sheel subhay,
Jaarat suraj har palak per na sadhuta jaay,
Per na sadhuta jaay, punah barsat dharti per,
Jeeva jyoti jagaay chadhat udikai amber per.!

Dr HP Pandey
Allahabad


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songwriter_123

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Re: Tazurbe

«Reply #1 on: January 31, 2010, 11:21:20 AM »

Good way to start but seems bit boring ,.....sorry to say this drpandey but its d fact ....

Hope u dont mind

Will expect a good poem from u ,


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drpandey

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Re: Tazurbe

«Reply #2 on: January 31, 2010, 11:29:01 AM »

Thanks a lot Amit ji Very nice Comment Padhkar Bahut Achchha laga...
Aapka aadesh sar aankhoN per...


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deepika_divya

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Re: Tazurbe

«Reply #3 on: January 31, 2010, 11:30:03 AM »

Hindi kavitayein Boring nahi hoti jahan tak mera manana hai usko samjane ke liye uske bhaav ko pehachaana jayada jaruri hota hai...

Pandey ji Aapne Bahoot Bahoot Khoob likha hai.. Mujhe Hindi mea likhi aapki yea rachna Behad Pasand Aaai hai..

Daad Kabool Kijiye !


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drpandey

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Re: Tazurbe

«Reply #4 on: January 31, 2010, 11:35:48 AM »

Quote from: Sophi on January 31, 2010, 11:30:03 AM

Hindi kavitayein Boring nahi hoti jahan tak mera manana hai usko samjane ke liye uske bhaav ko pehanana jayada jaruri hota hai...

Pandey ji Aapne Bahoot Bahoot Khoob likha hai.. Mujhe Hindi mea likhi aapki yea rachna Behad Pasand Aaai hai..

Daad Kabool Kijiye !

Bahot bahot Dhanyabaad.......Sophi JI Aapko ek purana prayog pasand aaya jo chalan se lagbhag jaa chuka hai...Girdhar ji ne es prakar ki dheroN kavitayen likhi hain.


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songwriter_123

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Re: Tazurbe

«Reply #5 on: January 31, 2010, 11:44:31 AM »

thanks dr saheb for accepting it .......u seems to b very soft hearted person .............but dats d fact i found it boring , sorry for it.....

wait 4 ur next good poem


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drpandey

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Re: Tazurbe

«Reply #6 on: January 31, 2010, 11:50:32 AM »

Dil Khush ho gaya aapki baat per...mai aap jaisa great song writer to nahin hun fir bhi koshish karta hun

Thanks


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songwriter_123

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Re: Tazurbe

«Reply #7 on: January 31, 2010, 11:55:07 AM »

hahahah ...its not d matter of great songwriter , even i m not a good writer ....its d matter of good writing and i just found it boring man ....

So pls don t take it personal and keep posting good writing

by ur last msg it seems u r takng personally , no need to take it personally and come back with a good poem

will wait for it drpandey


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drpandey

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Re: Tazurbe

«Reply #8 on: January 31, 2010, 12:11:44 PM »

Amit ji Aik hi baar me aapne bahut tareef kar diya..ab main do lines aapko deta hun

Jisko na nij bhasha tatha nij desh per abhimaan hai,
wah nar nahin narpashu nira hai aur mritak saman hai.
----------------NM--------------
I hope you will not take it personally it is UNIVERSAL

Bahut bahut dhanybaad.


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songwriter_123

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Re: Tazurbe

«Reply #9 on: January 31, 2010, 12:21:07 PM »

i m nt taking it personally dp ji , by ur message seems u dont like accepting my comment

actually i found it bit boring, tats y i said it.

But i guess i shall say now it was mindblowing, hope this will give u happiness dp ji


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drpandey

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Re: Tazurbe

«Reply #10 on: January 31, 2010, 12:37:46 PM »

My dear Amit Ji I live in reality and senses...
I accept your comments as if a festival for my heart..keep on sending comments I will always give them warm welcome..
Thanks a lot


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deepika_divya

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Re: Tazurbe

«Reply #11 on: January 31, 2010, 12:46:23 PM »

Quote from: drpandey on January 31, 2010, 12:11:44 PM

Waah Waah Kya baat hai DP ji.. Yea Reply bana jordaar tha.. Bahoot khoob!

Iss Par ak Muhavara yaad aa gaya.. Not feeling to say it here Usual Smile

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riyaz106

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Re: Tazurbe

«Reply #12 on: January 31, 2010, 01:45:32 PM »

Jahan tak main samajhta hun Pandey sahab ki ye rachna Hindi-Awadhi mein hai. Jo meri samajh puri tarah nahin aai kyonke main awadhi nahi jaanta. Agar langual problem ki wajah se meri samajh mein koi poem nahi aati to iska matlab ye nahi ke main use bekaar keh dun. Awadhi bhi hamare desh ki ek bhasha hai aur uska samman karna chahiye.

Amit ji ne Pandey Sahab ki rachna ko boring kaha lekin unhone ye bataane ki takleef nahi uthai ke unhe ye boring kyon lagi aur is rachna ko padhka unki samajh mein kya aaya.


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songwriter_123

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Re: Tazurbe

«Reply #13 on: January 31, 2010, 03:52:00 PM »

riyaz ji,

Boreness ka koi reason nahi hota, if u r not enjoying reading a poem or anything tat means u r feeling bored aur usme kuuch kami hai....

and FYI i knw the language in which DP ji has wrote ,

I have post my comment abt d same and i guess i m free to do that.

so,pls dont make this personal issue and enjoy it if u like

But i m free to say my own wordss...

Sorry dp ji, and i guess we shall stop this topic of conversation here .....


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malli

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Re: Tazurbe

«Reply #14 on: January 31, 2010, 04:18:14 PM »

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2. MitroN jalan bujhayie ghar auran ke jaay,
Jyon jal sheetal hi rahat tapti aag bujhay,
Tapti aag bujhay, jalan auran ki soukhay,
Sab andhiyara khaay deep unjiyara deikhay.!