tukde sade dil de

by lovely_nancy on January 23, 2010, 04:53:14 AM
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my 2nd try hope u like it
please comment and suggest improvementss:

Karke tu tukde sade dil de,
sanu kala chad tur chaleya,
kiteya yakeena nu pairaan nal mar,
ohde uto tur chaleya,
jaa bhul jana tere varge yaar nu,
karke tabah tere darda nu,
asi jieunde ji mar chale aa
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«Reply #1 on: January 23, 2010, 08:55:19 AM »
nice lovely keep it up Applause Applause Applause
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«Reply #2 on: January 23, 2010, 09:45:36 AM »
wadi ya bohat wadiya
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«Reply #3 on: January 23, 2010, 01:31:24 PM »
Bahut Khub Nancy Ji Nice
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«Reply #4 on: January 23, 2010, 04:30:51 PM »
Bahoot Bahoot Khoob!. Keep it up...!
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«Reply #5 on: January 24, 2010, 04:05:42 AM »
Bahoot Bahoot Khoob!. Keep it up...!

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«Reply #6 on: January 24, 2010, 04:05:58 AM »
Bahut Khub Nancy Ji Nice

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«Reply #7 on: January 24, 2010, 04:06:28 AM »
nice lovely keep it up Applause Applause Applause

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«Reply #8 on: January 24, 2010, 04:06:49 AM »
wadi ya bohat wadiya
thnks
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«Reply #9 on: June 14, 2010, 01:09:23 AM »
good one....keep it up
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