mushkil yeh muskuraana he!

by Prateek Mardia on December 03, 2008, 02:57:25 PM
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«Reply #15 on: December 04, 2008, 07:57:26 PM »
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Quote from: Pooja on December 04, 2008, 07:53:05 PM
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bahoot bahoot bahoot khoob Prateek ji... kamal ka likha hai...

Bekarar ji bahoot he acha jawab likha hai apne.....

Main in dino bahoot jayada busy ho gai hu... magar yaha jaroor likhne ki koshish hogi, jab bhi waqat mila!!

bahut bahut shukriya,pooja ji. Aapki kalam ki goonj ke to sada hi pratiksharat rehtey he,aapko jub anukul samay miley,is thread ko zarror sajjit kare apni kavitaao se.
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«Reply #16 on: December 05, 2008, 04:48:46 AM »
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prateek ji kya khoob likha hai aapne
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sanjeev ji good reply Applause
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«Reply #17 on: December 05, 2008, 05:42:00 AM »
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Nahi Alfaaz he koi, nahi koi taraana he
Tujhe –e-zindgi fir bhee, hume gungunaana he!


Shohratey  bik rahi he khoob, daam dekar kharid lo
Boli badhao bus, bazaar jaana-pehchaana he!


Hazaaron nibhaayi kasme,faqat si baat se dushman
Mere mehboob ka mujhse bada accha bahaana he!


Unhey hur baat pur tooku,meri tabiyat nahi aisi
Pur kuch bhee nahi kehkar kya is dil ko jalaana he!   

                                               
Yeh aaina sanam tumko dikhata kyon nahi sub such
Yeh kaisa dost he tera, yeh kiasa dostaana he!


Teri aankhon se jyada, mere adhron ki museebat he
Aanso aasani se aatey,mushkil ye muskuraana he!


Bade naazon se paala he,tum kehte chhodd do isko
Arey is dard se apna zara rishta puraana he!


Zindgi chaar din ki he,ranjishey fir bhee he hurdum
Hairaan hota hu, yeh kaisa zamanna he!


Zindgi mein nahi jub bhor, ujaala ho gaya kehkar kyon uthate ho
Yeh kaisi baat he saaki, yeh kaisa maikhaana he!



Bahut acha likha hai, Prateek Ji  Applause
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«Reply #18 on: December 05, 2008, 05:44:39 AM »
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Quote from: bekarar on December 03, 2008, 04:03:31 PM
ye sanam saaz hai kaisa, miyan kaisa tarana hai,
bhale hum besure kitne hume to gaate jaana hai,
mai kaise bhul jaaun, tere unkahe ehsaano ko
mere is besure-pan me bhi suna tune tarana hai,

kathputali hai har-ek aur manch jagat sara,
nachanewala hai koi aur, bas nachte jaana hai,
aisa mai nahi kahta, ye dharamwalon ke bayan hai bhai,
mera to mazhab hai maikhana yahi mera thikana hai,

duniyadaari ko tum bhi ishq aur aashiqi samajho
ik aag ka dariya hai aur doob ke jaana hai
jal jaao to bano khaak, raho hawa ke karam pe
bach jaaoge bhi to ek din khaak me jaana hai

one line of the last sher is not mine


Very nice, Bekraar Ji Usual Smile
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«Reply #19 on: December 05, 2008, 06:35:28 PM »
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Quote from: kaushikbhawna008 on December 05, 2008, 04:48:46 AM
prateek ji kya khoob likha hai aapne
wonderful creation Applause


sanjeev ji good reply Applause

Hausla afzaahi ka shukriya Bhawna Ji.
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«Reply #20 on: December 05, 2008, 06:38:00 PM »
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Bahut acha likha hai, Prateek Ji  Applause
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Shukria Deepti Ji.
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«Reply #21 on: December 06, 2008, 11:16:06 AM »
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BAHUT KHOOB PRATEEK JI, Applause  Applause  Applause
MAASHAALLAH KYA KHOOB ALFAAZ BHANDHE HAI AAPNE,

U LAGTA HAI JAISE KOI PHOLO KO CHUN CHUN KAR MALA
BANATA GAYA... Clapping Smiley  Clapping Smiley

BY. K.SHAEL

KUCH KOSHISH KI HAI, SHAYAD PASANDH AAYE...

MANJIL TO HAI KAREEB BAHUT,AUR MUJHE ZALD HI PAHUNCH BHI
JAANA HAI,PAR BAAT HAI SACH KI MUJHE LOUT KAR NAHI AANA HAI,

TUM TO KEHTE HO TUMHE MERA NAAM TAK YAAD NAHI,TUNE NA MUJHE
PEHCHAANA HAI, PAR LOGO SE SUNA HAI KI TO MERA BARSO SE DEEWANA HAI,

TERE LIYE HI ZINDA THE HAMM,YE SAANSE BHI TERI HI AMANAT THI,
DEEDAAR TERA HO GAYA, AAB BASS HAME ISS DUNIYA KO CHOD KAR JAANA HAI,
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«Reply #22 on: December 06, 2008, 08:08:08 PM »
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Quote from: k.shael on December 06, 2008, 11:16:06 AM
BAHUT KHOOB PRATEEK JI, Applause  Applause  Applause
MAASHAALLAH KYA KHOOB ALFAAZ BHANDHE HAI AAPNE,

U LAGTA HAI JAISE KOI PHOLO KO CHUN CHUN KAR MALA
BANATA GAYA... Clapping Smiley  Clapping Smiley

BY. K.SHAEL

KUCH KOSHISH KI HAI, SHAYAD PASANDH AAYE...

MANJIL TO HAI KAREEB BAHUT,AUR MUJHE ZALD HI PAHUNCH BHI
JAANA HAI,PAR BAAT HAI SACH KI MUJHE LOUT KAR NAHI AANA HAI,

TUM TO KEHTE HO TUMHE MERA NAAM TAK YAAD NAHI,TUNE NA MUJHE
PEHCHAANA HAI, PAR LOGO SE SUNA HAI KI TO MERA BARSO SE DEEWANA HAI,

TERE LIYE HI ZINDA THE HAMM,YE SAANSE BHI TERI HI AMANAT THI,
DEEDAAR TERA HO GAYA, AAB BASS HAME ISS DUNIYA KO CHOD KAR JAANA HAI,

Taareef ke liye shukriya, Shally ji.Aapko jo pasnad aa gaya to jaankar accha laga.Aapne bhee khoob likha he.
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«Reply #23 on: December 06, 2008, 08:14:35 PM »
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Few Add-ons to my poem...kuch aur panktiyaan bun gayi,chahta hu...yeh bhee aap tuk pahuche..Pesh he...


Badi aahista aahista,hum fookenge yeh rishta
baat apno ki he aakhir, nahi koi begaana he!


Mujhe jahannum miie mur ke,tumhe jannat nasseba ho
main aadat bun gaya teri,tu meri aadataana he!


Falak ke farishton se bhee mujhko baat karni he
dekha kiya sub kuch, ya ub bhee aazmaana he!


Nahi alfaaz he koi nahi koi taraana he
tujhe-e-zindgi fir bhee hume gungunnana he!
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«Reply #24 on: December 06, 2008, 09:09:08 PM »
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Nice add-ons Prateek Ji

Ek geet ke kuch panktiyan yaad aa gayee
Pesh hai

Gungunaati hai, geet gaati hai zindagi
Muskuraati hai, khilkhilaati hai zindagi
Dil mein ab jaise kaliyaan si khilti hai
Gul khilaati hai, maheke jaati hai zindagi
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«Reply #25 on: December 07, 2008, 06:06:48 AM »
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Quote from: Rajesh Harish on December 06, 2008, 09:09:08 PM
Nice add-ons Prateek Ji



Shukriya Rajeshji.
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«Reply #26 on: December 08, 2008, 03:06:05 AM »
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nice work shally, Prateek and Jas
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«Reply #27 on: December 13, 2008, 07:55:27 PM »
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Nahi Alfaaz he koi, nahi koi taraana he
Tujhe –e-zindgi fir bhee, hume gungunaana he!


Shohratey  bik rahi he khoob, daam dekar kharid lo
Boli badhao bus, bazaar jaana-pehchaana he!


Hazaaron nibhaayi kasme,faqat si baat se dushman
Mere mehboob ka mujhse bada accha bahaana he!


Unhey hur baat pur tooku,meri tabiyat nahi aisi
Pur kuch bhee nahi kehkar kya is dil ko jalaana he!   

                                               
Yeh aaina sanam tumko dikhata kyon nahi sub such
Yeh kaisa dost he tera, yeh kiasa dostaana he!


Teri aankhon se jyada, mere adhron ki museebat he
Aanso aasani se aatey,mushkil ye muskuraana he!


Bade naazon se paala he,tum kehte chhodd do isko
Arey is dard se apna zara rishta puraana he!


Zindgi chaar din ki he,ranjishey fir bhee he hurdum
Hairaan hota hu, yeh kaisa zamanna he!


Zindgi mein nahi jub bhor, ujaala ho gaya kehkar kyon uthate ho
Yeh kaisi baat he saaki, yeh kaisa maikhaana he!


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Bahut Bahut Khoob Prateekji..aapke kavita ki har ek akshar par dil se wah wah nikhalta hai..bahut hi ache Prateek ji,Bahut hi khoobsurti aur Gherai se aapne iss kavita ko likha hai.. Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause
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«Reply #28 on: December 13, 2008, 07:57:57 PM »
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Quote from: bekarar on December 03, 2008, 04:03:31 PM
ye sanam saaz hai kaisa, miyan kaisa tarana hai,
bhale hum besure kitne hume to gaate jaana hai,
mai kaise bhul jaaun, tere unkahe ehsaano ko
mere is besure-pan me bhi suna tune tarana hai,

kathputali hai har-ek aur manch jagat sara,
nachanewala hai koi aur, bas nachte jaana hai,
aisa mai nahi kahta, ye dharamwalon ke bayan hai bhai,
mera to mazhab hai maikhana yahi mera thikana hai,

duniyadaari ko tum bhi ishq aur aashiqi samajho
ik aag ka dariya hai aur doob ke jaana hai
jal jaao to bano khaak, raho hawa ke karam pe
bach jaaoge bhi to ek din khaak me jaana hai

one line of the last sher is not mine

Bahut Bahut Khoob Sanjeevji..
bahut hi acha likha hai aapne Applause Applause Applause
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«Reply #29 on: December 13, 2008, 08:02:20 PM »
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Quote from: khwaish on December 13, 2008, 07:55:27 PM
Nahi Alfaaz he koi, nahi koi taraana he
Tujhe –e-zindgi fir bhee, hume gungunaana he!


Shohratey  bik rahi he khoob, daam dekar kharid lo
Boli badhao bus, bazaar jaana-pehchaana he!


Hazaaron nibhaayi kasme,faqat si baat se dushman
Mere mehboob ka mujhse bada accha bahaana he!


Unhey hur baat pur tooku,meri tabiyat nahi aisi
Pur kuch bhee nahi kehkar kya is dil ko jalaana he!   

                                               
Yeh aaina sanam tumko dikhata kyon nahi sub such
Yeh kaisa dost he tera, yeh kiasa dostaana he!


Teri aankhon se jyada, mere adhron ki museebat he
Aanso aasani se aatey,mushkil ye muskuraana he!


Bade naazon se paala he,tum kehte chhodd do isko
Arey is dard se apna zara rishta puraana he!


Zindgi chaar din ki he,ranjishey fir bhee he hurdum
Hairaan hota hu, yeh kaisa zamanna he!


Zindgi mein nahi jub bhor, ujaala ho gaya kehkar kyon uthate ho
Yeh kaisi baat he saaki, yeh kaisa maikhaana he!


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Bahut Bahut Khoob Prateekji..aapke kavita ki har ek akshar par dil se wah wah nikhalta hai..bahut hi ache Prateek ji,Bahut hi khoobsurti aur Gherai se aapne iss kavita ko likha hai.. Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause
Nice one Khwaish Ji
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