mushkil yeh muskuraana he!

by Prateek Mardia on December 03, 2008, 08:27:25 PM
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Nahi Alfaaz he koi, nahi koi taraana he
Tujhe –e-zindgi fir bhee, hume gungunaana he!


Shohratey  bik rahi he khoob, daam dekar kharid lo
Boli badhao bus, bazaar jaana-pehchaana he!


Hazaaron nibhaayi kasme,faqat si baat se dushman
Mere mehboob ka mujhse bada accha bahaana he!


Unhey hur baat pur tooku,meri tabiyat nahi aisi
Pur kuch bhee nahi kehkar kya is dil ko jalaana he!  

                                               
Yeh aaina sanam tumko dikhata kyon nahi sub such
Yeh kaisa dost he tera, yeh kiasa dostaana he!


Teri aankhon se jyada, mere adhron ki museebat he
Aanso aasani se aatey,mushkil ye muskuraana he!


Bade naazon se paala he,tum kehte chhodd do isko
Arey is dard se apna zara rishta puraana he!


Zindgi chaar din ki he,ranjishey fir bhee he hurdum
Hairaan hota hu, yeh kaisa zamanna he!


Zindgi mein nahi jub bhor, ujaala ho gaya kehkar kyon uthate ho
Yeh kaisi baat he saaki, yeh kaisa maikhaana he!
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«Reply #1 on: December 03, 2008, 08:31:46 PM »
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bahut acha likha hain aapna
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«Reply #2 on: December 03, 2008, 08:45:20 PM »
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Nahi Alfaaz he koi, nahi koi taraana he
Tujhe –e-zindgi fir bhee, hume gungunaana he!


Shohratey  bik rahi he khoob, daam dekar kharid lo
Boli badhao bus, bazaar jaana-pehchaana he!


Hazaaron nibhaayi kasme,faqat si baat se dushman
Mere mehboob ka mujhse bada accha bahaana he!


Unhey hur baat pur tooku,meri tabiyat nahi aisi
Pur kuch bhee nahi kehkar kya is dil ko jalaana he!   

                                               
Yeh aaina sanam tumko dikhata kyon nahi sub such
Yeh kaisa dost he tera, yeh kiasa dostaana he!


Teri aankhon se jyada, mere adhron ki museebat he
Aanso aasani se aatey,mushkil ye muskuraana he!


Bade naazon se paala he,tum kehte chhodd do isko
Arey is dard se apna zara rishta puraana he!


Zindgi chaar din ki he,ranjishey fir bhee he hurdum
Hairaan hota hu, yeh kaisa zamanna he!


Zindgi mein nahi jub bhor, ujaala ho gaya kehkar kyon uthate ho
Yeh kaisi baat he saaki, yeh kaisa maikhaana he!


Prateek ji,

Pehla sheir padha toh laga, is se behtar aur kya ho sakta hai...
Doosra padha toh laga.. yeh toh is shayari ka "best one" hoga..
Teesra padha toh.. Woh bhi pehle aur doosre se kam naa laga..
Phir forth one..  Phir fifth... aur sach mein pata hi nahin chala, kab har ek ashaar par "waah.. Prateek ji ka jawaab nahin" kehte kehte hum dobaara  online khinche aaye... DOH

Sach mein, aapka toh jawaab nahin... Applause Applause Applause
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«Reply #3 on: December 03, 2008, 08:48:40 PM »
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bahut acha likha hain aapna
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shukriya saloni ji.
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«Reply #4 on: December 03, 2008, 08:51:34 PM »
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subhan-allah..behtreen likha hai prateek ji...daad kabool karen...



tere har sher pe wah bhi ab choti hi lagti hai
meri ulajhan ka ye silsila kaafi purana hai,
thodi frequency badhao likhne ki to baat ban jaaye,
tere zahan me abhi baaqi shabdon ka khajana hai
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«Reply #5 on: December 03, 2008, 08:54:19 PM »
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Prateek ji,

Pehla sheir padha toh laga, is se behtar aur kya ho sakta hai...
Doosra padha toh laga.. yeh toh is shayari ka "best one" hoga..
Teesra padha toh.. Woh bhi pehle aur doosre se kam naa laga..
Phir forth one..  Phir fifth... aur sach mein pata hi nahin chala, kab har ek ashaar par "waah.. Prateek ji ka jawaab nahin" kehte kehte hum dobaara  online khinche aaye... DOH

Sach mein, aapka toh jawaab nahin... Applause Applause Applause[/quote)}


jinse seekhte he hum,unhone thupthaadi peeth
thodi der ke liye hume bhee itraana he!

Mahiya ji-Shukriya, aapne pasand kiya..toh lagta he ki theek theek likha gaya hoga!


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«Reply #6 on: December 03, 2008, 08:57:23 PM »
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Applause Applause

subhan-allah..behtreen likha hai prateek ji...daad kabool karen...



tere har sher pe wah bhi ab choti hi lagti hai
meri ulajhan ka ye silsila kaafi purana hai,
thodi frequency badhao likhne ki to baat ban jaaye,
tere zahan me abhi baaqi shabdon ka khajana hai




Tahe dil se shukriya,aapke saraahna ke alfaaz hi mere likhne ki manziley he, sanjeev bhai.

Frequency badhai thee, currency ghut gayi saari
pur tyaar hu main bhee,mujhe sub kuch lootana he!
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«Reply #7 on: December 03, 2008, 09:33:31 PM »
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ye sanam saaz hai kaisa, miyan kaisa tarana hai,
bhale hum besure kitne hume to gaate jaana hai,
mai kaise bhul jaaun, tere unkahe ehsaano ko
mere is besure-pan me bhi suna tune tarana hai,

kathputali hai har-ek aur manch jagat sara,
nachanewala hai koi aur, bas nachte jaana hai,
aisa mai nahi kahta, ye dharamwalon ke bayan hai bhai,
mera to mazhab hai maikhana yahi mera thikana hai,

duniyadaari ko tum bhi ishq aur aashiqi samajho
ik aag ka dariya hai aur doob ke jaana hai
jal jaao to bano khaak, raho hawa ke karam pe
bach jaaoge bhi to ek din khaak me jaana hai


one line of the last sher is not mine
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ye sanam saaz hai kaisa, miyan kaisa tarana hai,
bhale hum besure kitne hume to gaate jaana hai,
mai kaise bhul jaaun, tere unkahe ehsaano ko
mere is besure-pan me bhi suna tune tarana hai,

kathputali hai har-ek aur manch jagat sara,
nachanewala hai koi aur, bas nachte jaana hai,
aisa mai nahi kahta, ye dharamwalon ke bayan hai bhai,
mera to mazhab hai maikhana yahi mera thikana hai,

duniyadaari ko tum bhi ishq aur aashiqi samajho
ik aag ka dariya hai aur doob ke jaana hai
jal jaao to bano khaak, raho hawa ke karam pe
bach jaaoge bhi to ek din khaak me jaana hai


one line of the last sher is not mine


Bahoot khoob hazoor....bhaut achhe!
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bas Prateek kehne ke liye alfaz nahi hain aur shayed mere shabd kam pad jaye bas itna kahuga Subhan-Allah
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«Reply #11 on: December 04, 2008, 12:05:46 AM »
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Bahut khoob likhte ho Prateek Ji
Aap ka bhi jawaab nahi Bekarar Ji
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bas Prateek kehne ke liye alfaz nahi hain aur shayed mere shabd kam pad jaye bas itna kahuga Subhan-Allah

Aapko pasand aaya,mujhe khushi hui.

Ghayel ho gaya mein bhee,dard ki ghazlen likh likha kar
kalam yeh chahti meri khumaar mein doob jaana he.
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Bahut khoob likhte ho Prateek Ji
Aap ka bhi jawaab nahi Bekarar Ji

bahut khoob padhte ho harish ji,dhnyawaad.
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«Reply #14 on: December 05, 2008, 01:23:05 AM »
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bahoot bahoot bahoot khoob Prateek ji... kamal ka likha hai...

Bekarar ji bahoot he acha jawab likha hai apne.....

Main in dino bahoot jayada busy ho gai hu... magar yaha jaroor likhne ki koshish hogi, jab bhi waqat mila!!
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