Jab Hum Chale Jaenge

by Abul Asad on December 11, 2011, 02:48:39 AM
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Jab hum chale jaenge to yaad na koi layenge
 Na koi nishaan rahega, na koi gham
 
Jiss ke liye kia tha jo kuch
 Woh hisab sath liye jayenge
 
Kayee the rah-guzar, kai the karvaan idhar
 Jo guzre yanhaan se, so hum bhi guzar jayenge
 
Har mausam ke rang dekhe badaltey kai bar
 Jo khaza ka rang dekha na dekha bar bar
 
Hai waqt muqarrar aye bande tera bhi
 Dena hai ahl-e basirat ka saath tujhe bhi
 
Daikh ke hai kaisi teri raftaar janhaan mein
 Hoga tu bhi kandhay char, aik din, issi janhaan mein
 
Ayega woh bhi aik din, Kuch hi, dinon mein
 Na rahega Abul Asad sunney ko Aba tere janhaan mein.
 
Abul Asad
 

Rah guzar: raste se guzarne wale
 Muqarrar: fixed (also in another context it means to repeat)
 Ahle basirat: Jo mar gaye hain woh log, jo khabrastan mein rehne wale hain
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«Reply #1 on: December 11, 2011, 07:01:04 AM »
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Bahut khoob,abu asad saheb.Likhte rahiye.Hasan
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«Reply #2 on: December 11, 2011, 07:43:49 AM »
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Jab hum chale jaenge to yaad na koi layenge
 Na koi nishaan rahega, na koi gham
 
Jiss ke liye kia tha jo kuch
 Woh hisab sath liye jayenge
 
Kayee the rah-guzar, kai the karvaan idhar
 Jo guzre yanhaan se, so hum bhi guzar jayenge
 
Har mausam ke rang dekhe badaltey kai bar
 Jo khaza ka rang dekha na dekha bar bar
 
Hai waqt muqarrar aye bande tera bhi
 Dena hai ahl-e basirat ka saath tujhe bhi
 
Daikh ke hai kaisi teri raftaar janhaan mein
 Hoga tu bhi kandhay char, aik din, issi janhaan mein
 
Ayega woh bhi aik din, Kuch hi, dinon mein
 Na rahega Abul Asad sunney ko Aba tere janhaan mein.
 
Abul Asad
 

Rah guzar: raste se guzarne wale
 Muqarrar: fixed (also in another context it means to repeat)
 Ahle basirat: Jo mar gaye hain woh log, jo khabrastan mein rehne wale hain

bht khoob Abul sahab--
aape khayaloN ke kya kahne--

bht khoob
daad daad

--
ek baat kahna chahunga ki-- aapke har aasshar ek duje se alg nazar aate hain
--
ab hume jada jaankari nahi shayd islie aisa lag raha ho--

lekin poetry/ghazal/shayri ka jada maza tab hai jab vo ek tune par ho
aisa hume lagta hai bas--
--
bura laga ho to muafi ka haqdaar hoon

khus rahie
muskurate rahie

Usual Smile aise Usual Smile
sukriya
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«Reply #3 on: December 11, 2011, 08:44:13 AM »
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Sarfira Saheb,

Har baar ki tarha, aapka mein mamnum aur mashkur rahunga,
Khusoosi taur par aapki rehnumai ka, jis qadr aap meri islah
kare uska. Aap ka har alfaz mere dil ke khareeb hai.

Aap bilkul baja farmate hain, yeh baat sahi hai, magar kabhi
jab aapKuch ustad shayer ki gazlein pardhen. Jaise Ghalib ka misali taur pe yeh Ghazal hai: to har sher apni wazn ka hai zaroor, phir har sher apni jagah par aik master piece hai. Magar kabhi aik doosre se nahi milte apni maine mein.
jaise:(ghalib ki alfaaze bayaani ka aaj tak jawaab nahi)

baaziichaa-e-atfaal hai duniyaa mere aage
hotaa hai shab-o-roz tamaashaa mere aage
[baaziichaa-e-atfaal = child's play]

ik khel hai aurang-e-sulemaa.N mere nazadiik
ik baat hai ejaaz-e-masiihaa mere aage
[aurang = throne; ejaaz = miracle)

Phir Faiz Ahmed Faiz ki woh gazl le lein:
 
Chasme nam jaane shohrida kaafi nahi.
Tohmate ishq poshida kaafi nahi
Aaj bazaar mein pajaolan chalo.

Is mein na kafiya radeef hai, na maine khareeb hain. Azad khayal ke  hain Faiz ke ashar, magar behad maine rakhte hain agar aap puri ghazal padhen, aur unka andaaze bayaan ka kiya kehna, unke alfazon ka kiya kehna.

Yeh mera khayaal hai ke jab ashaar kabhi shayar kissi falsafe par
likhta ho to woh kuch aise alfaaz istmal karta hai, keh aap usko badal dein to
woh wazn par to baithjate hain magar shayari ka lubab khatam ho jata hai.

To iss raushni mein aapka kiya khayal hai Sarfira saheb.
Mein badi mazarat ke saath ye aap ko kehne ki gustaqhi kiya hoon, meri qataon ko maaf kardein. Mein aap ki bahut izzat karta hon aur apne aap ko talib-e sukhan samajhta rahonga. Main ab bhi aap se meri ghalatiyon ke islah ki darkhwast rakhta hon aur aap se wohi muhabbat ki umeed rakhta hoon.

Bada Mashkur saheb aapka
Abul Asad
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«Reply #4 on: December 11, 2011, 09:17:53 AM »
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Sarfira Saheb,

Har baar ki tarha, aapka mein mamnum aur mashkur rahunga,
Khusoosi taur par aapki rehnumai ka, jis qadr aap meri islah
kare uska. Aap ka har alfaz mere dil ke khareeb hai.

Aap bilkul baja farmate hain, yeh baat sahi hai, magar kabhi
jab aapKuch ustad shayer ki gazlein pardhen. Jaise Ghalib ka misali taur pe yeh Ghazal hai: to har sher apni wazn ka hai zaroor, phir har sher apni jagah par aik master piece hai. Magar kabhi aik doosre se nahi milte apni maine mein.
jaise:(ghalib ki alfaaze bayaani ka aaj tak jawaab nahi)

baaziichaa-e-atfaal hai duniyaa mere aage
hotaa hai shab-o-roz tamaashaa mere aage
[baaziichaa-e-atfaal = child's play]

ik khel hai aurang-e-sulemaa.N mere nazadiik
ik baat hai ejaaz-e-masiihaa mere aage
[aurang = throne; ejaaz = miracle)

Phir Faiz Ahmed Faiz ki woh gazl le lein:
 
Chasme nam jaane shohrida kaafi nahi.
Tohmate ishq poshida kaafi nahi
Aaj bazaar mein pajaolan chalo.

Is mein na kafiya radeef hai, na maine khareeb hain. Azad khayal ke  hain Faiz ke ashar, magar behad maine rakhte hain agar aap puri ghazal padhen, aur unka andaaze bayaan ka kiya kehna, unke alfazon ka kiya kehna.

Yeh mera khayaal hai ke jab ashaar kabhi shayar kissi falsafe par
likhta ho to woh kuch aise alfaaz istmal karta hai, keh aap usko badal dein to
woh wazn par to baithjate hain magar shayari ka lubab khatam ho jata hai.

To iss raushni mein aapka kiya khayal hai Sarfira saheb.
Mein badi mazarat ke saath ye aap ko kehne ki gustaqhi kiya hoon, meri qataon ko maaf kardein. Mein aap ki bahut izzat karta hon aur apne aap ko talib-e sukhan samajhta rahonga. Main ab bhi aap se meri ghalatiyon ke islah ki darkhwast rakhta hon aur aap se wohi muhabbat ki umeed rakhta hoon.

Bada Mashkur saheb aapka
Abul Asad
Abul sahab--

aapka sukriya ata krne ke shabd nhi mere paas--

aapne to hume vo baateN batai jinse hum aajtalak nawakif the--

aur aise mahan aur shandar shayron ke xample die ki bas--

dekha aapne humari kam akli ka nazara--

chlie issi bahane se hume kuch seekhne ko mila Usual Smile

aur jo aashaar aapne share kie hain janaabunki to shaani nahi Usual Smile

ek baar aur teh dil se sukriya

ese hi hume jaankari dete rahen-- aage bhi Usual Smile

khus rahen
muskurate rahen

aur han hum sach me muafi ke kabil haain--
galtiyan to nadaano se ho hi jaati hain na--

Usual Smile
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