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Dosto..kai din bad ek or puraani yad taaza ho aayi hai jab Intezaar ji ki ek post padh raha tha kuchh shabda achanak ghumad aaye or yadon ne milkar fir ek bar shabdon ki barsaat kar di...lijiye pesh karta hun aap ke samne~ wo subah jo teri mujh sang shuru hua karti thi
wo raate bhi ab kaha rahi jo sath dhala karti thi~
wo tere izhaar par mera athkheli me mukarna kya hua
bikhar gayi jo saanse tujh sang chalne ko bhara kartin thi~
aaj bade din bad roya hun teri yad me fir se
bhool gaya tha ki dhadkan bas tere liye hi chala karthi thi~
suna he uparwala sab ko apne hisse ki khushi deta he
me to khush tha jab tak khushi tere paas hua karti thi~
dil ab bhi dhadakta he chhalakte he ab bhi paimane
wo baat par kahan jo teri pyaari muskaan me hua karti thi~
mere sath ab bhi he pilane wale mujhe saaki kai
deewangi in may kahan jo tere labon se chhalka karti thi~
kai bar husna ke kai jalwo ne pukara mujhko
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«Reply #1 on: December 15, 2010, 06:26:37 AM » |
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Wah! Abhi ji kya peshkash hai
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«Reply #2 on: December 15, 2010, 07:00:32 AM » |
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abhi ji thnx ji.......kal kaha and aaj aapne wish puri kardi
bht hi khubsurat peshkash hai..words nahin sujh rahe kuch kehne ko bas reply de pai isi se samjh lijiye
kuch likha hai hope thik hi bana hoga....
Bht haseen the wo pal jab main roz tumse mila karti thi
Sajti thi sanwarti thi roz ek naye rang me dhala karti thi
Mehak uthti thi meri sansein jab main teri soch se machalti thi
Khanak uthti thi ye hasi jab tujhe khud me mehsus kiya karti thi
Ladkahadte kadmon se jab main tere kareeb se jaya karti thi
Thaam loge mujhe tum apni baahon me isly khudko aazmaya karti thi
Aaj bhi sanwarti hun main aur nikharti hun main usi tarah magar
Nahin hai wo bat mere shringaar me jo tere liye sajne pe hua karti thi
Khona padta hai aaj bhi mujhe unn mazboot baahon k ghere me
Par nahin wo athkheliyan jo tujhe mehsus bhar kar lene se hua karti thi
Aajao k ab to nahin sahi jaati ye jalan ye tadap mahobbat me doorie ki
Tujh bin beete har kaali raat yahan ..mujhe kaali naagin si dasa karti thi…!!!
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AbhiTamrakar
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«Reply #3 on: December 15, 2010, 07:03:23 AM » |
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Wah! Abhi ji kya peshkash hai
shukriya rajesh ji..yunhi sath rahiye~ |
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Rajesh Harish
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«Reply #4 on: December 15, 2010, 07:10:30 AM » |
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abhi ji thnx ji.......kal kaha and aaj aapne wish puri kardi
bht hi khubsurat peshkash hai..words nahin sujh rahe kuch kehne ko bas reply de pai isi se samjh lijiye
kuch likha hai hope thik hi bana hoga....
Bht haseen the wo pal jab main roz tumse mila karti thi
Sajti thi sanwarti thi roz ek naye rang me dhala karti thi
Mehak uthti thi meri sansein jab main teri soch se machalti thi
Khanak uthti thi ye hasi jab tujhe khud me mehsus kiya karti thi
Ladkahadte kadmon se jab main tere kareeb se jaya karti thi
Thaam loge mujhe tum apni baahon me isly khudko aazmaya karti thi
Aaj bhi sanwarti hun main aur nikharti hun main usi tarah magar
Nahin hai wo bat mere shringaar me jo tere liye sajne pe hua karti thi
Khona padta hai aaj bhi mujhe unn mazboot baahon k ghere me
Par nahin wo athkheliyan jo tujhe mehsus bhar kar lene se hua karti thi
Aajao k ab to nahin sahi jaati ye jalan ye tadap mahobbat me doorie ki
Tujh bin beete har kaali raat yahan ..mujhe kaali naagin si dasa karti thi…!!!
Bahut umda peshkash hai |
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nirala
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«Reply #5 on: December 15, 2010, 07:20:41 AM » |
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bahut acchi peshkash abhi ji..
par gustakhi maaf ek chij kahne ja rha hu..
"wo raat dhala"wali line ko agar
uss "izhaar athkheli" wali line ke baad rakhte to mujhe aur jada achha lagta"
--lekin bahut khubsurat kavita hai--
mujhe jada jaankari nhi issliye shayd mene galat kah dia ho
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«Reply #6 on: December 15, 2010, 08:22:47 AM » |
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abhi ji thnx ji.......kal kaha and aaj aapne wish puri kardi
bht hi khubsurat peshkash hai..words nahin sujh rahe kuch kehne ko bas reply de pai isi se samjh lijiye
kuch likha hai hope thik hi bana hoga....
Bht haseen the wo pal jab main roz tumse mila karti thi
Sajti thi sanwarti thi roz ek naye rang me dhala karti thi
Mehak uthti thi meri sansein jab main teri soch se machalti thi
Khanak uthti thi ye hasi jab tujhe khud me mehsus kiya karti thi
Ladkahadte kadmon se jab main tere kareeb se jaya karti thi
Thaam loge mujhe tum apni baahon me isly khudko aazmaya karti thi
Aaj bhi sanwarti hun main aur nikharti hun main usi tarah magar
Nahin hai wo bat mere shringaar me jo tere liye sajne pe hua karti thi
Khona padta hai aaj bhi mujhe unn mazboot baahon k ghere me
Par nahin wo athkheliyan jo tujhe mehsus bhar kar lene se hua karti thi
Aajao k ab to nahin sahi jaati ye jalan ye tadap mahobbat me doorie ki
Tujh bin beete har kaali raat yahan ..mujhe kaali naagin si dasa karti thi…!!!
bahut badhiya he anu ji ... bade din bad apne reply diya achha laga.. yunhi sath rahiye~ waise bhi kahan jaoge~ |
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«Reply #7 on: December 15, 2010, 08:36:25 AM » |
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AbhiTamrakar
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«Reply #8 on: December 15, 2010, 09:21:47 AM » |
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bahut acchi peshkash abhi ji..
par gustakhi maaf ek chij kahne ja rha hu..
"wo raat dhala"wali line ko agar
uss "izhaar athkheli" wali line ke baad rakhte to mujhe aur jada achha lagta"
--lekin bahut khubsurat kavita hai--
mujhe jada jaankari nhi issliye shayd mene galat kah dia ho
hmm padhne or sarahne ka shukriya nirala ji, maine wo pankti upar kuchh or sochkar h rakhi hai~ khair yunhi sath rahye~ |
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«Reply #9 on: December 15, 2010, 11:09:33 AM » |
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bahut bahut shukriya madhu ji.. yunhi sath rahiye~ |
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«Reply #10 on: December 15, 2010, 04:11:57 PM » |
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AbhiTamrakar
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«Reply #12 on: December 16, 2010, 05:27:30 AM » |
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shukriya Rahim bhai... yunhi sath dete rahiye~ |
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«Reply #14 on: December 16, 2010, 08:54:08 AM » |
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bahut hi khbsurat ghazal kahi hai aapne
ehesaas apna sa laga
daad
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