----- /// Ek Din Bas Wo Hamaari Hongi /// ----- klaskar

by klaskar on July 14, 2010, 08:04:29 AM
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chaha humne hain chaha unko, chahat bhi ek din hamaari hogi,
      milengi jis din jaana humse, saari khushiyaan hamaari hongi,

ye duniya bas takti rahegi, jeet mohabbat ki hamaari hogi,
      chaahe humse dur hain aaj wo, par ek din wo hamaari hongi,

sukhe huye hain baag jahaan me, ek din unme bahaarein hongi,
        raat jo kaali amavas bani hai, ek din unme bhi sitaarein hongi,

bas kuch pal ki deri hogi, fir wo hamaari bas hamaari hongi,
      bandhan saare tod ke usdin, baahon me wo bas hamaari hongi,

jaanam kahenge, jaana kahenge, jaan to wo bas hamaari hongi,
      jisdin milne ayengi humse, tab hamesha ke liye hamaari hongi,

ji bharke dekhenge unko, jab aankhon ke aage hamaari hongi,
      julfon se khelenge unke, jis din baahon me wo hamaari hongi,

lad lenge duniya se hum tab, jis din wo paas hamaari hongi,
      jaan se jyaada pyaari hain jo, ek din bas wo hamaari hongi,

chaha humne hain chaha unko, chahat bhi ek din hamaari hogi,
       milengi jis din jaana humse, saari khushiyaan hamaari hongi...



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«Reply #1 on: July 14, 2010, 08:10:04 AM »
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klaskar ji aapki ye nazm bht pyari hai ..lekin kahin kuch adhuri si lag rahi hai....jaise aapne pure dil se nahin likhi ho...ya kahin atak gaye hon likhte likhte aur bas yunhi puri kar di ho.......
 aisa mujhe padhke laga..shayad main galat houn kyunki jayda nahin janti likhne  k bare me..par aapki jitni bhi rachnayen padhi hain unme ye kuch kum lagi to kahe bina nahin raha gaya....
kuch jyada kah diya ho to maaf karna ji...
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«Reply #2 on: July 14, 2010, 08:20:16 AM »
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Shukriya Kasak ji jo aapne meri is kavita ko apna waqt diya aur padha. Koshish karenge agli baar behtar likhne ka. Hum to bas flow me likh lete hain. Sochte nahi hain kya likh rahe hain. Maafi chahunga jo aapki ummeedon pe khara nahi utra. Aur aapki baat humein buri nahi lagi. Jab tak criticism nahi hoga improvement kahaan se ho paayega... Thanx  a lot...!!! Ummeed hai aage bhi yunhi aapka saath milta rahega aur apne lekhni ke baare me jaanne ka mauka milta rahega. Shukriya Kasak ji...!!! Usual Smile
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«Reply #3 on: July 14, 2010, 08:40:52 AM »
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uffffff.........likhne ko to likh gai padhke jo fel hua wo....par ab sharminda mehsus kar rahi hun....aap jaise acche shayar ko main kuch kahun.....ufffff ye kya kar gai main...
maaf kijiye ji ....par kya karen jo laga wo kehna pada
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«Reply #4 on: July 14, 2010, 10:59:09 AM »
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Kapil gud one !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! full of luv ........... lyk 2 c change in u ..... i czn feel it ... dnt worry she would b urs ....

Dekho tumne link beza to tumri poem padne aah gaye ........
Keep writing & Ur very very gud ...........
ek word....

JUST "KAMAL"...............
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«Reply #5 on: July 14, 2010, 12:36:55 PM »
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kafi umda likhi hai

sahi me wo aap ko mile iske liye mai dua karunga

sach me aaminnnnnnnnnnnnnnnn

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«Reply #6 on: July 14, 2010, 12:42:18 PM »
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Main koi shayar nahi hoon Kasak ji.. shayad aapne mera signature nahi padha....!!! Usual Smile

uffffff.........likhne ko to likh gai padhke jo fel hua wo....par ab sharminda mehsus kar rahi hun....aap jaise acche shayar ko main kuch kahun.....ufffff ye kya kar gai main...
maaf kijiye ji ....par kya karen jo laga wo kehna pada
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«Reply #7 on: July 14, 2010, 12:44:37 PM »
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Thanx a lot Neel ji... thank u so much.... haan koshish kar raha hoon kuch kuch badalne ki... ummeed hai mera khwaab jarur poora hoga aur jo aayegi meri zindagi me wo bas mujhe khushiyan hi khushiyaan degi... aap aajkal kuch nahi likh rahe hain kya ?

Kapil gud one !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! full of luv ........... lyk 2 c change in u ..... i czn feel it ... dnt worry she would b urs ....

Dekho tumne link beza to tumri poem padne aah gaye ........
Keep writing & Ur very very gud ...........
ek word....

JUST "KAMAL"...............
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«Reply #8 on: July 14, 2010, 12:46:03 PM »
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bahut bahut shukriya Rahi ji... main tahe dil se aapka shukriya adaa karta hoon...!!!

kafi umda likhi hai

sahi me wo aap ko mile iske liye mai dua karunga

sach me aaminnnnnnnnnnnnnnnn


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«Reply #9 on: July 14, 2010, 12:48:46 PM »
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maafi chahti hun apni galti k liye........
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«Reply #10 on: July 14, 2010, 12:54:40 PM »
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maafi chahti hun apni galti k liye........
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«Reply #11 on: July 14, 2010, 09:32:33 PM »
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I told u ... i dnt write yaha aah ke likhna shru kiya tha shyed logon ko pasnd nhi aya isliye dnt visit 2 dis syt anymre.... u send me d link so jst came to read ur post ......

yh kuch nhi likh rehi & u knoe tht ki main direct post karti thi kabhi phele likh ke nahi rakhti fir vahi baat aah jati hai usmain logon ko pob aah jati hai ....... so bttr nt 2 write .........
u guys cary on........

Thanx a lot Neel ji... thank u so much.... haan koshish kar raha hoon kuch kuch badalne ki... ummeed hai mera khwaab jarur poora hoga aur jo aayegi meri zindagi me wo bas mujhe khushiyan hi khushiyaan degi... aap aajkal kuch nahi likh rahe hain kya ?

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«Reply #12 on: July 14, 2010, 11:15:03 PM »
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chaha humne hain chaha unko, chahat bhi ek din hamaari hogi,
      milengi jis din jaana humse, saari khushiyaan hamaari hongi,

ye duniya bas takti rahegi, jeet mohabbat ki hamaari hogi,
      chaahe humse dur hain aaj wo, par ek din wo hamaari hongi,

sukhe huye hain baag jahaan me, ek din unme bahaarein hongi,
        raat jo kaali amavas bani hai, ek din unme bhi sitaarein hongi,

bas kuch pal ki deri hogi, fir wo hamaari bas hamaari hongi,
      bandhan saare tod ke usdin, baahon me wo bas hamaari hongi,

jaanam kahenge, jaana kahenge, jaan to wo bas hamaari hongi,
      jisdin milne ayengi humse, tab hamesha ke liye hamaari hongi,

ji bharke dekhenge unko, jab aankhon ke aage hamaari hongi,
      julfon se khelenge unke, jis din baahon me wo hamaari hongi,

lad lenge duniya se hum tab, jis din wo paas hamaari hongi,
      jaan se jyaada pyaari hain jo, ek din bas wo hamaari hongi,

chaha humne hain chaha unko, chahat bhi ek din hamaari hogi,
       milengi jis din jaana humse, saari khushiyaan hamaari hongi...



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very Nice poetry....very romantic....very touching....Klaskar Ji!
ashaar ki rawaangi .....very impressive rahi...dil se daad !

khush rahen...
apna khayal rakhen...
duaaon ke saath...
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«Reply #13 on: July 15, 2010, 05:13:02 AM »
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   Very Nice poetry Kapil Ji,Sweet n Simple. Thumbs UP Thumbs UP
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«Reply #14 on: July 15, 2010, 07:48:34 AM »
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Hmmmmmmmm.....

I told u ... i dnt write yaha aah ke likhna shru kiya tha shyed logon ko pasnd nhi aya isliye visit 2 dis syt anymre.... u send me d link so jst came to read ur post ......

yh kuch nhi likh rehi & u dnt tht i direct post karti thi kabhi phele likh ke nahi rakhti fir vahi baat aah jati hai usmain logon ko pob aah jati hai ....... so bttr nt 2 write .........
u guys cary on........

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