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veham aashiqi ke tootne lage hai....
hatho se ab lamhe chutne lage hai...
apna hamare saath rahta hai koi...
bharam is dil ke sab mitne lage hai...
aaram s dil ko u pahle bhi na tha...
sajaye the kabhi jo khawab ab simatne lage hai....
duriyo me tanhayi pahle to na thi...
najdikiyo se lekin ab darne lage hai...
Priya......
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«Reply #1 on: January 15, 2011, 06:09:59 AM » |
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wah bahut hi gahri peshkash Priya.
pata hai--ye to ek pyar bhare dil ki uljhan, gussa aur beshumaar pyar ke saath judai ka dard bhi bayaan krta hai.
kuch lines me bahut hi sundar bayaan.
daad hi daad.
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tinka tinka sjaya tha khab kabhi mohabbat ka
ab aalam ye hai---
palken tak jhapkti nahi
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sukriya
khus rahen
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«Reply #2 on: January 15, 2011, 06:46:40 AM » |
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thanx kb....
aapne in lines ki feeling ko samjha.... to laga mehnat safal ho gayi...
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«Reply #3 on: January 15, 2011, 07:49:16 AM » |
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hi... priyaji...
bahu bahut badia bahut khub....
khush rahen
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«Reply #4 on: January 15, 2011, 08:09:37 AM » |
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mai feeling se hi post ko padhta hu Priya.
no thanx iske liye
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«Reply #5 on: January 15, 2011, 10:07:26 AM » |
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Bahut Khub Mazil e Ishq Ji...
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«Reply #6 on: January 15, 2011, 10:20:01 AM » |
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lovely poetry priya........
bahot aacha aur bht sweet likha he
few lines fo it
veham aashiqi ke tootne lage hai....
hatho se ab lamhe chutne lage hai...
banaya tha jisne hume sartaj zindagi ka
sar-e-raah ab wo hi lootne lage he
wo kya gaye apna hausla bhi jata rha
ab kadam zamee se chootne lage he
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«Reply #7 on: January 15, 2011, 09:20:13 PM » |
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Priya di aur Utkarsh jee.. Bahaut bahaut khubsoorat..  Khush rahiye.. Ab aur kya saboot doun apni mohobat ka iske sivae janaam,
Teri muskurahat ki khatir apni khushian hum bechne lage hai.. |
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«Reply #8 on: January 16, 2011, 06:43:02 AM » |
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bahut khubb.
Gulaam Ali sahab ki kuch lines peshe khidmat hai
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apni aawaaz ki larjish pe to kaboooo paa lo
pyar ke bol to hothon se nikal jaate hain
apne tewar to sambhalo ke koi ye na kahe
dil badalte hain to chehre bhi badal jaate hain
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thanx
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«Reply #9 on: January 16, 2011, 07:22:18 AM » |
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manjum ji....
hum-dum ji....
nirala ji......
aap sabhi logo ka bht bht shukria.... ki aapne meri is choti si koshish ko pasand kiya.....
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«Reply #10 on: January 16, 2011, 07:23:39 AM » |
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hmmmmm.... samajh gayi kb.... but really thanx for reading & liking it.... mai feeling se hi post ko padhta hu Priya.
no thanx iske liye
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«Reply #11 on: January 16, 2011, 07:26:04 AM » |
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thanx mg.... & superb lines...... kya kahu aapki lines ke bare me.... excellent..... i wish ye lines mere mind me aayi hoti..... lovely poetry priya........
bahot aacha aur bht sweet likha he
few lines fo it
veham aashiqi ke tootne lage hai....
hatho se ab lamhe chutne lage hai...
banaya tha jisne hume sartaj zindagi ka
sar-e-raah ab wo hi lootne lage he
wo kya gaye apna hausla bhi jata rha
ab kadam zamee se chootne lage he
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«Reply #12 on: January 16, 2011, 07:26:49 AM » |
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thanx rahim....... & beautiful lines.... Priya di aur Utkarsh jee.. Bahaut bahaut khubsoorat.. Khush rahiye.. Ab aur kya saboot doun apni mohobat ka iske sivae janaam,
Teri muskurahat ki khatir apni khushian hum bechne lage hai.. |
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«Reply #13 on: January 16, 2011, 11:29:03 AM » |
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veham aashiqi ke tootne lage hai....
hatho se ab lamhe chutne lage hai...
apna hamare saath rahta hai koi...
bharam is dil ke sab mitne lage hai...
aaram s dil ko u pahle bhi na tha...
sajaye the kabhi jo khawab ab simatne lage hai....
duriyo me tanhayi pahle to na thi...
najdikiyo se lekin ab darne lage hai...
Priya......
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«Reply #14 on: January 16, 2011, 01:30:19 PM » |
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Bahut Khub Priya Ji
U Hi Likhte Rahiye
God Bless u
Rishi
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