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« on: March 17, 2008, 01:40:22 AM » |
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Harash Mahajan
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« Reply #1 on: March 17, 2008, 09:54:16 AM » |
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Adaab aryan ji....aapka kalaam saamne toh hai..per hamari phoonch se bahoot door hai.....bahoot koshish ki ke kutchh harf pad sakeiN...per nakaamyaab rahe....shayad hamari ankheiN ab padne ke kaabil hi na rahi...Harash  |
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« Reply #2 on: March 17, 2008, 11:15:28 AM » |
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Bohat hi acha likha hai Aryaan..  |
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Celmira
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« Reply #3 on: March 17, 2008, 07:46:23 PM » |
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Bohot hi khoob Aryaan Harash, thoda sa ghaur kariye shayad aa jaaye...  |
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Roja
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« Reply #4 on: March 17, 2008, 07:51:34 PM » |
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Very well composed and well writtern Aryaan ji. Daad kabul kare
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Pooja
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« Reply #5 on: March 17, 2008, 09:09:11 PM » |
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Aryaan, I am agree with Harsh, it is really hard to see words clearly. I am finding very difficult to read... sorry.. But try to use lighter color combination!!
Can't comments bcs I am not able to read this poem!!!!
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Aryaan
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« Reply #6 on: March 18, 2008, 01:40:43 AM » |
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Thanks a lot HoneyRose, Talat & Roja...  Harash & Pooja, sara qusoor font ka hai, aainda yeh font use nahi karoon ga.. Jo Pyar Tumhein De Sake Apna
Aisa Ek Dil Talaash Kar Lena
Main Tau Bhatka Huwa Musafir Hoon
Apni Manzil Talaash Kar Lena
Tum Mere Sath Chal Na Paao Ge
Meri Raah Mein Tau Sirf Kaante Hain
Phool Barsein Tumhare Daaman Par
Aisi Mehfil Talaash Kar Lena
Doob Jana Naseeb Hai Mera
Alvida, Aakhri Salaam Tumhein Mera
Tum Na Aana Toofan Ke Qareeb
Koyi Saahil Talaash Kar Lena |
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Pooja
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« Reply #7 on: March 18, 2008, 01:48:13 AM » |
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Shukaria Aryaanji!! wah kaya baat hai.. bahoot hi achi rachna likhi hai apne!!! Good job!!!
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Harash Mahajan
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« Reply #8 on: March 18, 2008, 09:14:35 AM » |
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waah aryan ji..aap toh hameiN itni khoobsoorat nazm se hi door ker dete......achha kiya dubara post ki......Jo Pyar Tumhein De Sake Apna
Aisa Ek Dil Talaash Kar Lena
Main Tau Bhatka Huwa Musafir Hoon
Apni Manzil Talaash Kar Lena
Tum Mere Sath Chal Na Paao Ge
Meri Raah Mein Tau Sirf Kaante Hain
Phool Barsein Tumhare Daaman Par
Aisi Mehfil Talaash Kar Lena
Doob Jana Naseeb Hai Mera
Alvida, Aakhri Salaam Tumhein Mera
Tum Na Aana Toofan Ke Qareeb
Koyi Saahil Talaash Kar Lena Thheek kaha hai aapne....per hum toh uske baad se dil ki kitaab ke safe hi khola kiye haiN aryan ji.........Dil ki kitaab ke safe khola kiye haiN hum
Apna zameer aap hi tatola kiye haiN hum
TanhaiyoN maiN jab-jab bechainiyaN badieN
PerchhaiyoN se apni bola kiye haiN hum.
hamko na mayassar kabhi aaramm do garhi
Dil ki tapish ko aaj bhi shola kiye haiN hum
Hai khaak nasheman magar dil maanta nahiN
Kitna abhi baki lahoo tola kiye haiN hum.
Ashar Gum hue kahiN itna hue haiN pareshaaN
Hosh-o-hawaas maiN zeher Ghola kiye haiN hum.
harash
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Aryaan
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« Reply #9 on: March 19, 2008, 12:33:18 AM » |
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Bohat shukriya Pooja & Harash... Bohat hi acha likha Harash Aap ne bhi.. |
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« Reply #10 on: March 21, 2008, 05:13:22 PM » |
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beautiful dear
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Aryaan
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« Reply #11 on: March 24, 2008, 05:57:28 AM » |
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Thanks Raju...
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Harash Mahajan
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« Reply #12 on: March 24, 2008, 09:02:09 AM » |
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Shukriyaa^h aryan ji....
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« Reply #13 on: March 24, 2008, 11:41:08 AM » |
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Bohat khoob harash ji aur Aryaan..
Mere zindagi ki khushiyan aapke daman main bichaya hai
Tumse khushiyan mange aur ruswai ka daman main bichaya hai
Kuch kadam tumare saath chalu main kaanton ki chuban bhi inaayat hai
Mujhe khauf nahi hai toofano se tumare aakhri saalam mujhe ikraar nahi hai
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Aryaan
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« Reply #14 on: March 27, 2008, 05:13:34 AM » |
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Bohat khoob HoneyRose...
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