Balaatkaar--- sharm aati rahi~~Saahil

by salil2002 on July 18, 2009, 06:24:51 AM
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«Reply #15 on: July 18, 2009, 05:14:34 PM »
Wonderful... creation Saalil dear. Aap bahut accha likha hai. Applause Applause
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«Reply #16 on: July 18, 2009, 05:15:49 PM »
Shally and Cara dono b bahut accha likha hai  Thumbs UP
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«Reply #17 on: July 19, 2009, 09:41:33 AM »
Quote from: -Saahil- on July 18, 2009, 06:24:51 AM
bahut se doston ko yeh topic shayad achcha na lage magar meinb yahan ashleelta nahin faila kar .sirf ek sachchai ko bayaan kar raha haoon

woh der tak madad k liye roti chillati rahi
har dar par chaukhat par sar ko takraati rahi
thak haar kar phir oosne khudko bhediyo k hawale kar diya
oon haiwaano kii hansi fiza ko dehlaati rahi

phir woh manjar jab thama, ek majma lag gaya
phir badi der tak woh bheed aapas main batyaati rahi
kissii ne na haal poochha oos masoom ka
lalchi aankhen har kissii ki laar tapkaati rahi

bahut royi manaavta apni beti kii asmat lutti dekhkar
is napunsak samaaj ko gaali barsaati rahi
kaanp jaati thi woh oos ladki kii khamoshi dekhkar
aankhon mein jiski maut kii parchhayi mandarati rahi

agle roz akhbaar mein ek tasveer aayi laash kii
jiski surat logon ko uski yaad dilaati rahi
koi bola karti bhi kya woh bechari ji kar
sun kar yeh baat mujhe khud pe sharm aati rahi

Areeeee Yaar Salil Bhai.. Kya Kahun Dost.. Lafz Nahi Mil Rahe Hain Mujhe Tareef Ke Liye.. Such Me..!!! Aapki Qalam Humesha Hi Kuch Naya Lekar aati Hai.. Aur Aisi Jivant Samasyaon Par Humesha Likhte Hain Ki Humesha Zahan Me Ek Sawal Chod Jate hain Ki Aisa Kyun..??  icon_thumleft icon_thumleft

Waqai Bahut Hi Khooooooob Likha hai.. Daad Kubool Karen..  Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley


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«Reply #18 on: July 19, 2009, 09:43:23 AM »
Quote from: k.shael on July 18, 2009, 09:15:36 AM
Salil aap ne kaha to dil se bhi aawaj aayi ki iss topic pe kuch likh doo.n, par mein yahi likhna chahti ho ki aab aurat ko jagna chahiye, bahut ho gaye ye tamashe, aab use khud apni daal banna hoga na ki marna hoga.. bass isi ke upar kuch lines add kar rahi hoo.n, umeed hai kuch aacha likh pao.n..


Kab tak sahogi tum log ye sab kab tak marti jaogi,
Kyun inn haiwano ki lalsa ko apni mout banati jaogi..

U marne, rone bikharne se kya hoga batlao mujhe,
Kab talak khud ki kamjori ko majboori naam deti jaogi,

Parda tha kabhi teri shaan, maryada ka gawah,
Par iss parde ki aad me kab talak sehmi chipi reh paogi..

Tum Naari ho, saari duniya tere hi haath me hai,
Aaj khud ko marogi to kaise kal kisi aur ko bachaogi..

Kyun aise darindo ki lalsi nazron ka jawab nahi deti,
Kab tak u doult ban ke inn kamino ke haath lut.ti jaogi,

Aaj agar inke aage haar kar khud ko maar dogi to
batao mujhe kaise kal ko kisi aur ko bachaogi..

Shally.


Bahut Hi Khoob Likha Hai Shally.. Aur Is Rachna Ke zariye Jo aapne aaj Ki Ladkiyon ko, Mahilaaon Ko Jo Sandesh diya hai.. Waqai Qaabil-e-Tareef Hai.. Bahut Khooooooooob Dear.. Applause Applause


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«Reply #19 on: July 19, 2009, 09:44:39 AM »
Quote from: cara on July 18, 2009, 01:57:49 PM
kya baat hai saahil ji.......

luti meri izzat,mera hua balaatkaar,
khadi beed ne mujhko aise dekha,
jaise khud main hun iski zimeindaar.

koi mard  na mere saamne aaya,kisi ne na kaha,
ham un bhediyun ko pakar kar ,un ko sazaa dila degen.
ulta luti izaat meri dekh kar,
mujhe aur kar rahete sharamsaar.

kya fayeda aisi duniya main jeekar,
jahan mardo ki mardani hai,kisi ki izzat lut na,
aur zindagi bhar tak,usko uska ehsaas dilana.


shally ji aapne bhi  bahut hi badiya likha hai.




Cara ji aapne Bhi Kamaal Ka Likha hai Dost.. Really Great Words.. Applause Applause


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«Reply #20 on: July 19, 2009, 02:21:15 PM »
Quote from: @kaash on July 18, 2009, 11:25:21 AM
waah bahot khoob likha hai aapne Salil  Applause Applause Applause Applause
ek naye aur alag topic pe khoob likha hai
very nice

aur Shael ji aapne bhi bahot khoob likha hai  Applause Applause Applause
bahot khoob,behatreen

Quote from: SARVESH RASTOGI on July 18, 2009, 04:32:58 PM
Wah Saahil Ji
touching poem
Quote from: madhuwesh on July 18, 2009, 11:40:56 AM
Wah Saahil ji really sad and touching creation.excellent.samajh mein nahi aati kya kanhu. Applause Applause Applause
Shally ji aapne bhi bahut khoob likha. Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley
kaash ,sarvesh bhai bahut bahut shukriya magar agar aap dono apni kalam se kucch likh jaate toh bada achcha lagta

aur laila dear thanks a lot again
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salil2002
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«Reply #21 on: July 19, 2009, 02:24:38 PM »
Quote from: cara on July 18, 2009, 01:57:49 PM
kya baat hai saahil ji.......

luti meri izzat,mera hua balaatkaar,
khadi beed ne mujhko aise dekha,
jaise khud main hun iski zimeindaar.

koi mard  na mere saamne aaya,kisi ne na kaha,
ham un bhediyun ko pakar kar ,un ko sazaa dila degen.
ulta luti izaat meri dekh kar,
mujhe aur kar rahete sharamsaar.

kya fayeda aisi duniya main jeekar,
jahan mardo ki mardani hai,kisi ki izzat lut na,
aur zindagi bhar tak,usko uska ehsaas dilana.


shally ji aapne bhi  bahut hi badiya likha hai.




cara dear yeh jo aap doosron kii rachna mein doob kar eply karti hai yeh bahut hi achcha lagta hain..............
bahut ummda jawaab diya hain aapne daad kabool kare
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«Reply #22 on: July 19, 2009, 02:27:17 PM »
Quote from: Roja on July 18, 2009, 05:14:34 PM
Wonderful... creation Saalil dear. Aap bahut accha likha hai. Applause Applause
Quote from: Mann on July 19, 2009, 09:41:33 AM
Areeeee Yaar Salil Bhai.. Kya Kahun Dost.. Lafz Nahi Mil Rahe Hain Mujhe Tareef Ke Liye.. Such Me..!!! Aapki Qalam Humesha Hi Kuch Naya Lekar aati Hai.. Aur Aisi Jivant Samasyaon Par Humesha Likhte Hain Ki Humesha Zahan Me Ek Sawal Chod Jate hain Ki Aisa Kyun..??  icon_thumleft icon_thumleft

Waqai Bahut Hi Khooooooob Likha hai.. Daad Kubool Karen..  Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley


**~** Mann **~**
bahut bahut shukriya roja dear and vicky bhai
magar aap dono ne yahan par kucch likha nahin yeh baat pasand nahin aayi
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«Reply #23 on: July 21, 2009, 07:48:36 PM »
 Applause Applause Bahaut bahaut khoob Salil bhaijan..

 Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Nice responses Cara jee aur Shally jee
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«Reply #24 on: July 22, 2009, 11:19:09 AM »
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Bohot bohot khoob Salil....Don't have words to say....Great work.

Good work by you too Shally & Cara ... Bohot Khoob  Applause Applause Applause
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«Reply #25 on: July 24, 2009, 02:58:36 AM »
Quote from: -Saahil- on July 18, 2009, 06:24:51 AM
bahut se doston ko yeh topic shayad achcha na lage magar meinb yahan ashleelta nahin faila kar .sirf ek sachchai ko bayaan kar raha haoon

woh der tak madad k liye roti chillati rahi
har dar par chaukhat par sar ko takraati rahi
thak haar kar phir oosne khudko bhediyo k hawale kar diya
oon haiwaano kii hansi fiza ko dehlaati rahi

phir woh manjar jab thama, ek majma lag gaya
phir badi der tak woh bheed aapas main batyaati rahi
kissii ne na haal poochha oos masoom ka
lalchi aankhen har kissii ki laar tapkaati rahi

bahut royi manaavta apni beti kii asmat lutti dekhkar
is napunsak samaaj ko gaali barsaati rahi
kaanp jaati thi woh oos ladki kii khamoshi dekhkar
aankhon mein jiski maut kii parchhayi mandarati rahi

agle roz akhbaar mein ek tasveer aayi laash kii
jiski surat logon ko uski yaad dilaati rahi
koi bola karti bhi kya woh bechari ji kar
sun kar yeh baat mujhe khud pe sharm aati rahi

Sabse pehli maafi Chahunga Aapse Salil ,Jo itni Der Se Reply kar raha Hoon...

Bahut Bahut Bahut Khooob Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley

Har Lafz Dil Ko Cheerta Hua..Bahut Ache Bhai..

Excellent One's Shally And Cara..Bahut Ache.. Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley
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«Reply #26 on: July 24, 2009, 11:17:38 AM »
Quote from: -Rahim- on July 21, 2009, 07:48:36 PM
Applause Applause Bahaut bahaut khoob Salil bhaijan..

 Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Nice responses Cara jee aur Shally jee
Quote from: Celmira on July 22, 2009, 11:19:09 AM
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Bohot bohot khoob Salil....Don't have words to say....Great work.

Good work by you too Shally & Cara ... Bohot Khoob  Applause Applause Applause
bahut bahut shukriya rahim bhai and talat di
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«Reply #27 on: July 24, 2009, 11:19:15 AM »
Quote from: khwaish on July 24, 2009, 02:58:36 AM
Sabse pehli maafi Chahunga Aapse Salil ,Jo itni Der Se Reply kar raha Hoon...

Bahut Bahut Bahut Khooob Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley

Har Lafz Dil Ko Cheerta Hua..Bahut Ache Bhai..

Excellent One's Shally And Cara..Bahut Ache.. Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley
bhai aapne pada aur aapko pasand aaya yahi hamaare liye bahut hain
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«Reply #28 on: July 24, 2009, 11:22:12 AM »
Bahoot khoob likha Salil Applause Applause Applause
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«Reply #29 on: July 24, 2009, 11:26:29 AM »
good to see u salma dear/.after a long gap ur here again ........thanks a lot
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