Balaatkaar--- sharm aati rahi~~Saahil

by salil2002 on July 18, 2009, 06:24:51 AM
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bahut se doston ko yeh topic shayad achcha na lage magar meinb yahan ashleelta nahin faila kar .sirf ek sachchai ko bayaan kar raha haoon

woh der tak madad k liye roti chillati rahi
har dar par chaukhat par sar ko takraati rahi
thak haar kar phir oosne khudko bhediyo k hawale kar diya
oon haiwaano kii hansi fiza ko dehlaati rahi

phir woh manjar jab thama, ek majma lag gaya
phir badi der tak woh bheed aapas main batyaati rahi
kissii ne na haal poochha oos masoom ka
lalchi aankhen har kissii ki laar tapkaati rahi

bahut royi manaavta apni beti kii asmat lutti dekhkar
is napunsak samaaj ko gaali barsaati rahi
kaanp jaati thi woh oos ladki kii khamoshi dekhkar
aankhon mein jiski maut kii parchhayi mandarati rahi

agle roz akhbaar mein ek tasveer aayi laash kii
jiski surat logon ko uski yaad dilaati rahi
koi bola karti bhi kya woh bechari ji kar
sun kar yeh baat mujhe khud pe sharm aati rahi
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deepika_divya
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«Reply #1 on: July 18, 2009, 06:28:17 AM »
I am speechless to comment over here but this for you  Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause
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k.shael
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«Reply #2 on: July 18, 2009, 06:48:04 AM »
Wah Wah Wah Wah Wah Wah Wah Wah Clapping Smiley  Clapping Smiley  Clapping Smiley  Clapping Smiley

Shally.
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salil2002
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«Reply #3 on: July 18, 2009, 06:49:46 AM »
I am speechless to comment over here but this for you  Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause
Wah Wah Wah Wah Wah Wah Wah Wah Clapping Smiley  Clapping Smiley  Clapping Smiley  Clapping Smiley

Shally.
bahut bahut shukriya shally and sophi dear
aapki taareef ne hosla badaya mera...magar agar aap dono bhi is mudde par kucch kehte toh badiya lagta
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k.shael
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«Reply #4 on: July 18, 2009, 09:15:36 AM »
Salil aap ne kaha to dil se bhi aawaj aayi ki iss topic pe kuch likh doo.n, par mein yahi likhna chahti ho ki aab aurat ko jagna chahiye, bahut ho gaye ye tamashe, aab use khud apni daal banna hoga na ki marna hoga.. bass isi ke upar kuch lines add kar rahi hoo.n, umeed hai kuch aacha likh pao.n..


Kab tak sahogi tum log ye sab kab tak marti jaogi,
Kyun inn haiwano ki lalsa ko apni mout banati jaogi..

U marne, rone bikharne se kya hoga batlao mujhe,
Kab talak khud ki kamjori ko majboori naam deti jaogi,

Parda tha kabhi teri shaan, maryada ka gawah,
Par iss parde ki aad me kab talak sehmi chipi reh paogi..

Tum Naari ho, saari duniya tere hi haath me hai,
Aaj khud ko marogi to kaise kal kisi aur ko bachaogi..

Kyun aise darindo ki lalsi nazron ka jawab nahi deti,
Kab tak u doult ban ke inn kamino ke haath lut.ti jaogi,

Aaj agar inke aage haar kar khud ko maar dogi to
batao mujhe kaise kal ko kisi aur ko bachaogi..

Shally.

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deepika_divya
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«Reply #5 on: July 18, 2009, 09:19:43 AM »
Superb Shally... bahoot bahoot inspiring likha hai... bahoot khooob!
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salil2002
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«Reply #6 on: July 18, 2009, 09:56:50 AM »
Salil aap ne kaha to dil se bhi aawaj aayi ki iss topic pe kuch likh doo.n, par mein yahi likhna chahti ho ki aab aurat ko jagna chahiye, bahut ho gaye ye tamashe, aab use khud apni daal banna hoga na ki marna hoga.. bass isi ke upar kuch lines add kar rahi hoo.n, umeed hai kuch aacha likh pao.n..


Kab tak sahogi tum log ye sab kab tak marti jaogi,
Kyun inn haiwano ki lalsa ko apni mout banati jaogi..

U marne, rone bikharne se kya hoga batlao mujhe,
Kab talak khud ki kamjori ko majboori naam deti jaogi,

Parda tha kabhi teri shaan, maryada ka gawah,
Par iss parde ki aad me kab talak sehmi chipi reh paogi..

Tum Naari ho, saari duniya tere hi haath me hai,
Aaj khud ko marogi to kaise kal kisi aur ko bachaogi..

Kyun aise darindo ki lalsi nazron ka jawab nahi deti,
Kab tak u doult ban ke inn kamino ke haath lut.ti jaogi,

Aaj agar inke aage haar kar khud ko maar dogi to
batao mujhe kaise kal ko kisi aur ko bachaogi..

Shally.


awesome reply shally dear
.......i m speech less

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k.shael
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«Reply #7 on: July 18, 2009, 10:02:18 AM »
Superb Shally... bahoot bahoot inspiring likha hai... bahoot khooob!

Shukriya Sophi dear..

Shally.
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k.shael
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«Reply #8 on: July 18, 2009, 11:34:58 AM »
awesome reply shally dear
.......i m speech less



Shukriya Salil Ji..

Shally.
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k.shael
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«Reply #9 on: July 18, 2009, 11:35:32 AM »
waah bahot khoob likha hai aapne Salil  Applause Applause Applause Applause
ek naye aur alag topic pe khoob likha hai
very nice

aur Shael ji aapne bhi bahot khoob likha hai  Applause Applause Applause
bahot khoob,behatreen


Shukriya Kaash Ji,..

Shally.
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madhuwesh
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«Reply #10 on: July 18, 2009, 11:40:56 AM »
Wah Saahil ji really sad and touching creation.excellent.samajh mein nahi aati kya kanhu. Applause Applause Applause
Shally ji aapne bhi bahut khoob likha. Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley
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cara
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«Reply #11 on: July 18, 2009, 01:57:49 PM »
kya baat hai saahil ji.......

luti meri izzat,mera hua balaatkaar,
khadi beed ne mujhko aise dekha,
jaise khud main hun iski zimeindaar.

koi mard  na mere saamne aaya,kisi ne na kaha,
ham un bhediyun ko pakar kar ,un ko sazaa dila degen.
ulta luti izaat meri dekh kar,
mujhe aur kar rahete sharamsaar.

kya fayeda aisi duniya main jeekar,
jahan mardo ki mardani hai,kisi ki izzat lut na,
aur zindagi bhar tak,usko uska ehsaas dilana.


shally ji aapne bhi  bahut hi badiya likha hai.


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deepika_divya
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«Reply #12 on: July 18, 2009, 02:44:03 PM »
kya baat hai saahil ji.......

luti meri izzat,mera hua balaatkaar,
khadi beed ne mujhko aise dekha,
jaise khud main hun iski zimeindaar.

koi mard  na mere saamne aaya,kisi ne na kaha,
ham un bhediyun ko pakar kar ,un ko sazaa dila degen.
ulta luti izaat meri dekh kar,
mujhe aur kar rahete sharamsaar.

kya fayeda aisi duniya main jeekar,
jahan mardo ki mardani hai,kisi ki izzat lut na,
aur zindagi bhar tak,usko uska ehsaas dilana.


shally ji aapne bhi  bahut hi badiya likha hai.




Bahoot Khoob Cera ji.. Wakai.. bahoot khoob kaha hai aapne...

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SARVESH RASTOGI
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«Reply #13 on: July 18, 2009, 04:32:58 PM »
Wah Saahil Ji
touching poem
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SARVESH RASTOGI
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«Reply #14 on: July 18, 2009, 04:33:20 PM »
Wah wah Shally Ji
nice addition
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