Dil Bechain Hone Laga......

by punam on May 06, 2008, 07:48:30 AM
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punam
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Unki yaad mujhe yun jalane lagi hai.
Dil bechain hone laga sham dhalne lagi hai..

Tanhai mujhe yun dasne lagi hai.
Khud ki parchai bhi daarane lagi hai...

Kante hi kante hain aangan mein mere.
Chand ki chandni bhi mujhe jalane lagi hai...

Manzil ke qareeb khud ko dekha magar
Mujhe dekh jaise woh bhi peeche hatne lagi hai...
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syednaami
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«Reply #1 on: May 06, 2008, 07:55:50 AM »

Yaaden hain to Jalna bhi zaroori hai, -
Dil ki bechaine main aksar yeh hota hai, -

Tanhai ko mat konso mere sanam, -
Parchaai hi to saath nibhaati hai, -

Phoolon ke rakhwaale hain yeh kaante, -
Chandini to raah nayee dikhlaati hai, -

Paakar bhi kho dete ho manzil ko, -
Yaqeen rakh dil men raasta to sidha hai, -



(Syed Naami)


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Bravo!! Good creation, keep the spirit up....
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kaushikbhawna008
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«Reply #2 on: May 06, 2008, 10:29:07 AM »
nice creation punam ji and gud reply syednaami ji
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honeyrose
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«Reply #3 on: May 06, 2008, 12:59:02 PM »
punam aur syed  bohat khoob likha hai..Usual Smile
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sarthika
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«Reply #4 on: May 06, 2008, 01:28:02 PM »
Good work Punam and Syednaami jee!!

Sham ki tanhaai aor yah bechaini
Man mai kai khayal aor yah bechaini
Ankhon mai ek nami aor yah bechaini
Phir wo hi yaad aor yah bechaini!!

Kaali dasti se raat aor yah bechaini
Sooni sooni deewar aor yah bechaini
Ruki ruki se hawa aor yah bechaini
Wo hi main, wo hi tu aor yah bechaini!!!!
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punam
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«Reply #5 on: May 06, 2008, 01:59:19 PM »
Thanx  Honey di...

Thanx shihab ji..chalo aap ko acha laga..

Baadal ji thanx ...bahot acha likhe aap ne...

Roja di..thanx ...bas kuch sikh rahi hun...

Thanx sarthika ji...

bahot khoob likha aapne sach me ..bahot acha laga...
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Rajbir
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«Reply #6 on: May 06, 2008, 02:08:44 PM »
Punam and Syed

Bahut achcha laga aap ka likha padh kar!

@Sarthika tongue3

Kya baat hai ji aap ki bechaini ki Winking

End bahut achcha laga !
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syednaami
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«Reply #7 on: May 06, 2008, 03:32:56 PM »

Aasman men laali chhai tu khilkhilai, -
Mann men nayi tarang ubhri tu machli, -
Nainon men nayi umang ayi tu sambhli, -
Yaadon ne thhandi aah li tu tilmilai. -

Chand ne chaandini phailai tu jhilmilai, -
Jagmag hui galiyan chobaare tu Chahekdi, -
Thhandi hawa se khushboo ayi tu mahekdi, -
Meri chaah ne kya bechain to tu chali aai. -


(Syed Naami)

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Wonderful, logical attitude is visible in your poetry, what a nice piece of pure thoughts and depair.
Bravo!!


Good work Punam and Syednaami jee!!

Sham ki tanhaai aor yah bechaini
Man mai kai khayal aor yah bechaini
Ankhon mai ek nami aor yah bechaini
Phir wo hi yaad aor yah bechaini!!

Kaali dasti se raat aor yah bechaini
Sooni sooni deewar aor yah bechaini
Ruki ruki se hawa aor yah bechaini
Wo hi main, wo hi tu aor yah bechaini!!!!

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baadal102
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«Reply #8 on: May 06, 2008, 03:42:44 PM »
bahoot aache poonam kya baat hai hazoor  Applause Applause Applause

good work naami ji N sarthika ji





Baadal
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syednaami
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«Reply #9 on: May 06, 2008, 04:13:06 PM »
baadal102 saahib, Thanks a lot for encouragement.  wave
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pandit
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«Reply #10 on: May 06, 2008, 06:07:05 PM »
nice li
Unki yaad mujhe yun jalane lagi hai.
Dil bechain hone laga sham dhalne lagi hai..

Tanhai mujhe yun dasne lagi hai.
Khud ki parchai bhi daarane lagi hai...

Kante hi kante hain aangan mein mere.
Chand ki chandni bhi mujhe jalane lagi hai...

Manzil ke qareeb khud ko dekha magar
Mujhe dekh jaise woh bhi peeche hatne lagi hai...

nice lines poonam ji...
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A Saeed
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«Reply #11 on: July 20, 2009, 09:11:10 PM »
Yaadon main kisi ke  yon jala nahi karte
be-wajah khud ko bechain kiya nahi karte
tanhai to tnahai,parchai bhi saath chod degi (Punam Ji Usual Smile )
be-sabab dil kisi ko yon diya nahi karte
                      (A Saeed, Delhi)
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madhuwesh
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«Reply #12 on: July 20, 2009, 09:19:50 PM »
Wah Punam ji midblowing creation,bahut hi khoob,beautiful lines by Syednaami ji and Saeed ji,kamaal ke likha aap sabne.excellent. icon_thumleft Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley
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punam
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«Reply #13 on: July 21, 2009, 11:16:11 AM »
shukriya baadal ...and pandit ji....

Yaadon main kisi ke  yon jala nahi karte
be-wajah khud ko bechain kiya nahi karte
tanhai to tnahai,parchai bhi saath chod degi (Punam Ji Usual Smile )
be-sabab dil kisi ko yon diya nahi karte
                      (A Saeed, Delhi)

bahut khoob saeed ji...1 saal k baad yeh post bahar lake isme kuch likhe bahut bahut shukriya ..


Wah Punam ji midblowing creation,bahut hi khoob,beautiful lines by Syednaami ji and Saeed ji,kamaal ke likha aap sabne.excellent. icon_thumleft Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley

Thanx a lot Madhu ji....
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A Saeed
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«Reply #14 on: July 21, 2009, 06:56:09 PM »
Punam ji yeh baat to maine younhi mazaq main keh di. agr a bura laga ho to maaf karna
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