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by JEET* on September 29, 2009, 06:45:01 PM
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JEET*
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hai kis jahan mein teri soch doobi huyi
kyun hua jata hai tu pareshan eh dil

guftgu na teri kissi se kabhi hui hai ,
na kissi ka hua tu mehmaan eh dil,

kya aayi kabhi kissi ke hath parchai bhi
phir kayun zid hai tujhe mere eh nadan dil

tere nasseb mein hai jab Khiza ka khazana
toh umeed kayun karta hai bahar ki eh dil



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madhuwesh
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«Reply #1 on: September 29, 2009, 09:41:53 PM »
Bahut bahut khoob Jeet ji,very touching  beautiful creation,welcome to yo. icon_thumleft Applause Applause Applause Applause hello
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Pooja
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«Reply #2 on: September 30, 2009, 04:14:13 AM »

hai kis jahan mein teri soch doobi huyi
kyun hua jata hai tu pareshan eh dil

guftgu na teri kissi se kabhi hui hai ,
na kissi ka hua tu mehmaan eh dil,

kya aayi kabhi kissi ke hath parchai bhi
phir kayun zid hai tujhe mere eh nadan dil

tere nasseb mein hai jab Khiza ka khazana
toh umeed kayun karta hai bahar ki eh dil



JEET*


wow too good jeet!! Atte he kamaal@dhmaal.superbb 

ek ek line bahoot hi achi likhi hai... Good work!!
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Rishi Agarwal
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«Reply #3 on: September 30, 2009, 05:33:45 AM »
nice lines jeet ji  Applause Applause Applause
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JEET*
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«Reply #4 on: October 01, 2009, 02:02:34 PM »
Thanks Madhu and Rishi !!!

Aur Pooja ji.. aap kab se bina reply kiye thread se jaane lage.. not fair !!! (thnks for appreciating)
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Pooja
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«Reply #5 on: October 01, 2009, 04:24:26 PM »
Thanks Madhu and Rishi !!!

Aur Pooja ji.. aap kab se bina reply kiye thread se jaane lage.. not fair !!! (thnks for appreciating)


shayri-e-dard mai likhne ki manahi ho rakhi hai Nanmunh ji!!! chaliye jaise he waqat mila likhne ki koshish karugi!!
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JEET*
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«Reply #6 on: October 01, 2009, 04:32:26 PM »
ok ji .. kahin aur se agaaz kar dein....aapko shabdon ki kami hai kya tongue3
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«Reply #7 on: October 01, 2009, 06:07:19 PM »
Jeet Ji Winking tongue3

Bahut khoob ! Applause

Aap ka Yoindia par swagat hai Usual Smile
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Roja
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«Reply #8 on: October 02, 2009, 02:22:05 AM »
Nice 1. Welcome to Yoindia
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«Reply #9 on: October 02, 2009, 02:42:27 PM »
Bahut Bahut Khoob Jeet Ji

Bahut Khoobsurat Likha Hai Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley
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«Reply #10 on: October 03, 2009, 09:25:24 PM »
Roja ji and Khawish ji.. yeh Ji lagana band karein pls.. mera Jee ghabra raha hai  tongue3
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«Reply #11 on: October 03, 2009, 09:27:55 PM »
Jeet Ji Winking tongue3

Tusi vi  icon_scratch


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JEET*
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«Reply #12 on: October 03, 2009, 09:28:50 PM »
Thanks to all for appreciating !!!
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