Ek Sunhera Sapna Doob Gaya…….Koyal

by KOYAL46 on February 02, 2011, 04:26:22 PM
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love4 icon_flower love9 Ek Sunhera Sapna Doob Gaya  love9 icon_flower love4…….

Sone sa din Chandi jaisi har raat beet gayee
Kaahe ka rona jo beet gayee wo baat gayee
Kyu chhalkau aankhon se ashq kaun samjhega
Ek boond paani mai, ek pura jeevan doob gaya

Kaun kar paayaa band roshnee neegaahon mai
Kaun rok paayaa phoolon ki sugandh naak mai
Har aati hui raat ban jaatee meri majbooree hai
Kaun rok paayaa kabhi ugte suraj k ujale ko hai

Dard Dil ka chhupaane ko har pal gungunana hoga
Sab k saath milkar mujhe hassna-muskurana hoga
Palkon k peechhe  mere, kaun jaan paayega kabhee
Baraste huye naino mai ek sunhera sapna doob gaya
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«Reply #1 on: February 02, 2011, 04:46:05 PM »
icon_flower love4 icon_flower love4 icon_flower love4 icon_flower

mastammmmmmmmmmmm mastttttt re....
koyal bhtttttttttt hi payara likha hai tumne bht hi dil ko chhuta hua...padhte hue bas jaise kho gai maine isme.....

itni pyarai rachna k liye bht bht badhai re

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«Reply #2 on: February 02, 2011, 05:08:40 PM »
wah waah koyal ji.
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«Reply #3 on: February 02, 2011, 05:10:11 PM »
love4 icon_flower love9 Ek Sunhera Sapna Doob Gaya  love9 icon_flower love4…….

Sone sa din Chandi jaisi har raat beet gayee
Kaahe ka rona jo beet gayee wo baat gayee
Kyu chhalkau aankhon se ashq kaun samjhega
Ek boond paani mai, ek pura jeevan doob gaya

Kaun kar paayaa band roshnee neegaahon mai
Kaun rok paayaa phoolon ki sugandh naak mai
Har aati hui raat ban jaatee meri majbooree hai
Kaun rok paayaa kabhi ugte suraj k ujale ko hai

Dard Dil ka chhupaane ko har pal gungunana hoga
Sab k saath milkar mujhe hassna-muskurana hoga
Palkon k peechhe  mere, kaun jaan paayega kabhee
Baraste huye naino mai ek sunhera sapna doob gaya


Bahut acha likha hai sweetu but just wanna tell u terri kavita ka feel bahut bahut acha hai per har do lines k baad rhyme chhut rahi hai aur end  mein aake mil gyi hai just try to two two lines with same rhymeing yaa har dusri line mein rhyming rakho like let me give u eg:

Koyal-Sone sa din Chandi jaisi har raat beet gayee
Kaahe ka rona jo beet gayee wo baat gayee
Kyu chhalkau aankhon se ashq kaun samjhega
Ek boond paani mai, ek pura jeevan doob gaya..

Geet-Sone sa din Chandi jaisi har raat beet gayee
Kaahe ka rona jo beet gayee wo baat beet gayee
Kyu chhalkau aankhon se ashq kaun samjhega
Ek boond paani mai, ek pura jeevan doob jayega ..


Koyal-Kaun kar paayaa band roshnee neegaahon mai
Kaun rok paayaa phoolon ki sugandh naak mai
Har aati hui raat ban jaatee meri majbooree hai
Kaun rok paayaa kabhi ugte suraj k ujale ko hai..

Geet-Kaun rok paayaa h phoolon ki sugandh sanso mein
Kaun kar paayaa h band roshnee neegaahon mein
Har aati hui raat ban jaatee meri majbooree hai
Kaun rok paayaa h ugte suraj ko andheri raho mein..


Koyal-Dard Dil ka chhupaane ko har pal gungunana hoga
Sab k saath milkar mujhe hassna-muskurana hoga
Palkon k peechhe  mere, kaun jaan paayega kabhee
Baraste huye naino mai ek sunhera sapna doob gaya..

Geet-Dard Dil ka chhupaane ko har pal gungunana hoga
Sab k saath milkar mujhe hassna-muskurana hoga
Palkon k peechhe kya hai mere ye merri nigaho mein chhup gaya,
Baraste huye naino mai phir ek sunhera sapna doob gaya..


I think kuch aesa hona chahiye tha..baaki u knw it better...kuch bura laga ho tou maaf karne apni di ko take care...
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ParwaaZ
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«Reply #4 on: February 02, 2011, 05:28:45 PM »
Koyal Jee Aadaab!

Aapke Ahsaas O khayaal to masha Allah bahut khoob hai..
Sabhi stanzaa behad khoob lage hume..

Dil se daad O mubarkbaad kabool kijiye..
And haaN geet jee ne jo sujhaav diye hai bahut imp hai...
Koshish kariye aise likhane ki...
Aapke ahsaas O khayaal aur bhi nikhar aayeNge..

Likhati rahiye...
Khush O aabaad rahiye...
Khuda Hafez... Usual Smile         

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Anshumali
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«Reply #5 on: February 02, 2011, 06:33:10 PM »
love4 icon_flower love9 Ek Sunhera Sapna Doob Gaya  love9 icon_flower love4…….

Sone sa din Chandi jaisi har raat beet gayee
Kaahe ka rona jo beet gayee wo baat gayee
Kyu chhalkau aankhon se ashq kaun samjhega
Ek boond paani mai, ek pura jeevan doob gaya

Kaun kar paayaa band roshnee neegaahon mai
Kaun rok paayaa phoolon ki sugandh naak mai
Har aati hui raat ban jaatee meri majbooree hai
Kaun rok paayaa kabhi ugte suraj k ujale ko hai

Dard Dil ka chhupaane ko har pal gungunana hoga
Sab k saath milkar mujhe hassna-muskurana hoga
Palkon k peechhe  mere, kaun jaan paayega kabhee
Baraste huye naino mai ek sunhera sapna doob gaya


Very Nice & Sweet Poetry ... Koyal Ji !

Very Touching ...... dil se daad !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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nirala
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«Reply #6 on: February 03, 2011, 03:33:16 AM »
mast hai---
Taliyan re. mai symbol me taali nahi maar sakta issliye likh dia.
good poem.
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thanx
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