Tadap rahi hun main tadap raha hai tu jabse

by deepika_divya on May 07, 2007, 11:47:35 AM
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Tadap rai hun main tadap raha hai tu jabse
Dil bechan hai tu juda huye hai hum jabse

Raah main aai kai muskhile hameri
Umeed thi mujhe tum ak roz miloge mujse

Kanto bari  Raah-e- Mohabbat pe  chal dilye the jabse
Chaht badi thi hum dono ki tabse

Haath tham kar tune saath chalane ka vada kiya tha jabse
Kushgawar hui hameri mohabbat logo ki nazar mein  tabse

Tadap rahi hun main tadap raha hai tu jabse

Beruki badi dono k beech jabse
Nazar lagi thi zamane ki tabse

Aag lag chuki tan mein, tadap badi seene mein jabse
Rukh gayi thi sanse, milne ko machale lage the hum tabse

Bichad gaye hum, kush hue log jabse
Machalte  rahe man humhare tabse

Mili rahe hai ab hume Khudha ki karam se
Khushi mili hume Dosto ke Dham se

Tadap rahi hun main tadap raha hai tu jabse…(2)

 ~*~Divya~*~
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«Reply #1 on: May 08, 2007, 06:48:57 PM »
Good effort.. just little typing errors.. you may correct them !
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«Reply #2 on: May 09, 2007, 03:53:28 AM »
Thank U so much Ricky ji.. haan bahut spelling mistake ho gai.. thanks for notification. but apne marks nahi diye
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«Reply #3 on: May 09, 2007, 10:19:33 AM »
Abhi bhi kuch errors hai..

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Tadap rai hun main tadap raha hai tu jabse
Dil bechan hai tu juda huye hai hum jabse


Here highlighted one are having error.  Actually it can be ..
Dil bechain hai JO juda huye hai hum tabse !!
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«Reply #4 on: May 09, 2007, 11:02:26 AM »
thanks for again notification....next time I time I will Notice the whole thing & try it to make it clear.. thanks once again...
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«Reply #5 on: May 24, 2007, 01:48:37 PM »
Bohot achcha likha hai Divs !
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