Taish- aankh me utraa to PAANI ho gaya...!!

by ghayal_shayar on July 28, 2013, 12:24:05 AM
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toota dil teri nishaani ho gaya,
ishq dekho kitna faanii* ho gaya...

*kamjor.

Kal talak aaNsu nageene the mere,
Aaj apna khoon paani ho gaya...

bhoolta rehta jise tha raat din,
yaad mujhko vo zubaani ho gaya...

vo hari saari pehan kar aayi hai,
rang mehfil ka bhi dhaani ho gaya...

chaahte the sab bulandi par jise,
gir gaya to ik kahaani ho gaya...

vo nawaazeN roz mujhko ghum naye,
meri khaatir kitna daani* ho gaya...

*daan karne waala.

jal raha tha ishq mere dil meN jo,
aaNkh meN utraa to paani ho gaya...

baat teri baandh di dil ne mere,
mera saani, tera saani ho gaya...


ye ek sher feedback ke liye ghazal se baahar rakha hai...

ishq ka ab dard maani ho gaya,
tu jo meri nathwani* ho gaya,

*durbalta.
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«Reply #1 on: July 28, 2013, 12:26:35 AM »
toota dil teri nishaani ho gaya,
ishq dekho kitna faanii* ho gaya...

*kamjor.

Kal talak aaNsu nageene the mere,
Aaj apna khoon paani ho gaya...

bhoolta rehta jise tha raat din,
yaad mujhko vo zubaani ho gaya...

vo hari saari pehan kar aayi hai,
rang-e-mehfil bhi hai dhaani ho gaya...

chaahte the sab bulandi par jise,
gir gaya to ik kahaani ho gaya...

vo nawaazeN roz mujhko ghum naye,
meri khaatir kitna daani ho gaya...

jal raha tha ishq mere dil meN jo,
aaNkh meN utraa to paani ho gaya...

baat teri baandh di dil ne mere,
mera saani, tera saani ho gaya...


ye ek sher feedback ke liye ghazal se baahar rakha hai...

ishq ka ab dard maani ho gaya,
tu jo meri nathwani* ho gaya,

*durbalta.
Gud
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«Reply #2 on: July 28, 2013, 12:27:54 AM »
nice
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«Reply #3 on: July 28, 2013, 03:32:17 AM »

chaahte the sab bulandi par jise,
gir gaya to ik kahaani ho gaya...

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«Reply #4 on: July 28, 2013, 04:03:16 AM »
toota dil teri nishaani ho gaya,
ishq dekho kitna faanii* ho gaya...

*kamjor.

Kal talak aaNsu nageene the mere,
Aaj apna khoon paani ho gaya...

bhoolta rehta jise tha raat din,
yaad mujhko vo zubaani ho gaya...

vo hari saari pehan kar aayi hai,
rang mehfil ka bhi dhaani ho gaya...

chaahte the sab bulandi par jise,
gir gaya to ik kahaani ho gaya...

vo nawaazeN roz mujhko ghum naye,
meri khaatir kitna daani* ho gaya...

*daan karne waala.

jal raha tha ishq mere dil meN jo,
aaNkh meN utraa to paani ho gaya...

baat teri baandh di dil ne mere,
mera saani, tera saani ho gaya...


ye ek sher feedback ke liye ghazal se baahar rakha hai...

ishq ka ab dard maani ho gaya,
tu jo meri nathwani* ho gaya,

*durbalta.

good......!
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«Reply #5 on: July 28, 2013, 08:38:36 AM »
Gud


shukriya saagar saaheb...
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«Reply #6 on: July 28, 2013, 11:33:45 AM »
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waah waah taishji. behad khoooob.gehre ehsaas se saji hui hai aapki ghazal.

bhoolta rehta jise tha raat din,
yaad mujhko vo zubaani ho gaya...
Awesomeeeeeeeeeee

chaahte the sab bulandi par jise,
gir gaya to ik kahaani ho gaya...
bahut khooooooooooob

vo nawaazeN roz mujhko ghum naye,
meri khaatir kitna daani* ho gaya...
kya baat hai

jal raha tha ishq mere dil meN jo,
aaNkh meN utraa to paani ho gaya...
khoobsurat khayal

baat teri baandh di dil ne mere,
mera saani, tera saani ho gaya...
superb
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«Reply #7 on: July 28, 2013, 12:57:14 PM »
nice

poonam ji thanks a tonne for liking it...!!
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«Reply #8 on: July 28, 2013, 01:56:23 PM »
bahut khoob
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«Reply #9 on: July 28, 2013, 02:40:45 PM »
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saraswat saahe hausla afzaayi ka bahut bahut shukriya janaab...!!
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«Reply #10 on: July 28, 2013, 06:06:00 PM »

good......!


sheba ji, hausla afzaayi ke liye shukriya...
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«Reply #11 on: July 28, 2013, 07:45:58 PM »
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«Reply #12 on: July 28, 2013, 07:55:50 PM »
Bahot khooob as usual...
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«Reply #13 on: July 29, 2013, 12:57:56 AM »
bahut khoob

shukriya bahukhandi saaheb...
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«Reply #14 on: July 29, 2013, 01:03:53 AM »
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