APNEE NAZR.ON SE GIRAA DIYAA MUGHE(MUJHE)!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!:Tanziya aur Tehreekbaksh Shayariyan

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bosses!!!!!!!!!!!!

kuch 3 mahine qabal ek bahut hee mashur aur maroof YOINDIA ke shaayar sahaab ko main ne unke kalaam per ye comment kiya ke aap MUGHE YA MUGHKO ghalat likhte hain MUJHE ya MUJHKO likho aur doosree baat main ne ye kahaa ke aap ke jaisa hee ghalat MAYUR SRIVASTAV bhee likhte hain. buss isee baat per vo shaayar sahib PM kar ke mujhe kahne lage aap ke kahne ka matlab kyaa hai main ne aap ko apna guru manaa thaa aaj se aap mere nazaro.n se gir gaye aur aap please mere kalaam ko bhee naa padhe. yaqeen maaniye vo mashhoor shayaar saahab ne nazr.on se kyaa girayaa kee mere toh haddee paslee takk ek ho gaee. kaafee din.on takk HASPATAAL me.N ilaaj chaltaa rahaa ab jaa kar kuch recover hua hai to aap ke saam ne haazir hoon.

   ab har SAINEE title DR S.K SAINEE yaa SIDDIQUI title FH SIDDIQUI toh nahin ho sakta hai ................boliye!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

main kuchh likhne.N kee koshish kar rahaa hoon. meree bhee Urdu iss chakkar me.N kharaab ho gaee hai!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! sirf padhe.N ------samajhne kee koshish na kare.N

   giraa kar najar se mughe(mujhe) be-dum kar diya.
   achhee khaasee sehat ko kum kar diya.

   tere zajbaat samghne(samajhne)kee koshis me.N.
   her ek pathar taraash kar sanam kar diya.

   kaffa-kafaa sa kyon rahtaa hai mugh se toooo.
   dekh apne jakhhm.on ko hee marham kar diya.

   tughe YOINDIA kee vaat lagaane kee izaajat hai.
   toone acche khaase bajm ke naak me.N dum kar diya.

   sahee alfaaj ke bina gajjal jindaa nahin rahtee.
   sookhe chaman me.N bahwr.ON ne aanaa kam kar diya.

   jaraa rukk jaa qalb ke roj-roj tooo kyon likhta hai.
   achhee khaasee hansee-khushee ko ek gum kar diya.


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Re: APNEE NAZR.ON SE GIRAA DIYAA MUGHE(MUJHE)!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

«Reply #1 on: August 01, 2014, 09:39:42 AM »

Waah.
Aapne gusse me aa kar
Ghazal ko gajjal kar diya


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Re: APNEE NAZR.ON SE GIRAA DIYAA MUGHE(MUJHE)!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

«Reply #2 on: August 01, 2014, 10:32:28 AM »

qalbji ap ek acche shayar hain shayari mein sanjeedgi bahut zaruri hoti hai agar koi galat likta hai to use batayen par khayal rakhein uski bhavana ko thes na pahunche yun sareaam kisi ka mazak udana sahi nahi hai rahi baat sainiji ya siddiqui sir ki ko behtareen shayar hain par iska matlab ye nahi baki sabhi bekaar hain sabka apna alag andaaz hota hai naye shayaron ko appreciate karna chaiye aasha hai aap meri baat se kuch sehmat honge.khush rahein..


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Re: APNEE NAZR.ON SE GIRAA DIYAA MUGHE(MUJHE)!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

«Reply #3 on: August 01, 2014, 11:04:38 AM »

waah waah bhai bahut intezaar karwaayaa khudaa salaamat rakkhe


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Re: APNEE NAZR.ON SE GIRAA DIYAA MUGHE(MUJHE)!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

«Reply #4 on: August 01, 2014, 06:26:36 PM »

waah waah sahib


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Re: APNEE NAZR.ON SE GIRAA DIYAA MUGHE(MUJHE)!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

«Reply #5 on: August 01, 2014, 08:52:11 PM »

Waah waah waah Janaab bahut khoob, der aaye darust aaye, bahut daad.
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Re: APNEE NAZR.ON SE GIRAA DIYAA MUGHE(MUJHE)!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

«Reply #6 on: August 02, 2014, 04:43:29 AM »

bahut khub qalbji....

qalbji.... ham sabhi kahin kahin galtiyan karte hain aur ye forum ek aisi jagah hai jahan hamen aapni kala ko nikharne ka awasar milta hai.... ham hamesha chahte hain ki taliyon ke sath kuch sikhne ko bhi mile.... aur agar koi shayar kuch sujhav de ya hame kahin sudhar ki gunjaish bataye to khushi ki baat hai......


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Re: APNEE NAZR.ON SE GIRAA DIYAA MUGHE(MUJHE)!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

«Reply #7 on: August 02, 2014, 07:23:32 AM »

very nice, shayar bhavnao se jur kar hi achha likh pata hai


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Re: APNEE NAZR.ON SE GIRAA DIYAA MUGHE(MUJHE)!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

«Reply #8 on: August 02, 2014, 07:35:03 AM »

Palkon pe bithate hain log,
nazron se girane ke liye . {n.m}

Qalb sahab pehle to apki mizaaj ko sunke afsos hua Usual Smile

dusri baat ye ke jo koi kisi ko guru mane to uske samjhane ko
batane ko sikhane ko sar aankhon per rakhe na ke nazron se giraye.

khair teesri baat ye ke Qalb sahab apne bohut hi sahi nishan dehi ki hai main ap se sehmat hoon ,urdu ka talaffuz hi uski jaan hai pehchaan hai,

Yahan "ja" aur "za" ka bhi ghalat jagah istemal hora hai,

zindagi kehna hoto kehnge jindagi
janwar kehna hoto kehenge zanwar.

muze aur tuze
yani mujhe aur tujhe.
ko to alag hi rehnedo

is ki islaah zaroori hai.
guftugu ka asal maza to talaffuz se ata hai.

iske ilawa kisi ka dil dukhana maqsad nahi tha.


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Advo.RavinderaRavi

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Re: APNEE NAZR.ON SE GIRAA DIYAA MUGHE(MUJHE)!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

«Reply #9 on: August 02, 2014, 08:54:00 PM »

Good one.


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ParwaaZ

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Re: APNEE NAZR.ON SE GIRAA DIYAA MUGHE(MUJHE)!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

«Reply #10 on: August 03, 2014, 10:44:13 AM »

Qalb Sahaab Aadaab...!

Kia baat hai janab abhi toH aapke mizaaz thik haiN naa...
Behad sahiN aur khoobsurati se aapne apni baateN ko kalaam meiN dhalaa hai...

Waqai sach hai ke loG lafzoN ke sahiN talaffuz se bekhabar haiN aur sikhne meiN bhi apne aapko chhota samjh lete haiN...

Qair behad khoob kalaam kahi hai aapne...
Is khoob kalaam par humari dheroN dili daad O mubbarakabad kabul kijiye...

Likhate rahiye... Bazm meiN aate rahiye...
Shaad O aabaad rahiye...

Khuda Hafez...


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F.H.SIDDIQUI

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Re: APNEE NAZR.ON SE GIRAA DIYAA MUGHE(MUJHE)!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

«Reply #11 on: August 05, 2014, 06:41:22 AM »

Qalb saheb Adab . Khuda kare aap mukammal taur par roo-ba-sehat hon.Yeh baat likhte hichkicha bhi raha hoon ki kahin aapne hospitaliation wali baat mazaaqan to nahi kahi hai.Lekin kai maah ki ghair haziri iske mazaq nahin haqeeqat hone ki taraf ishara karti hai . Bahar haal aap ki sehat ke liye Allah taala se duago hoon .
Hasb e mizaaj , aapne khubsurat tanz o mizaah se bharpoor takhleeq k sath waapsi ki hai jo qabil e sad daad hai aur na sirf khubsurat tanz hai balki eik suggestion bhi hai un logon k liye jo shayri mein dilchaspi rakhte hain aur chhoti chhoti ghaltiyon ko sudhaarne ki koshish nahin karte jo unhin ki shayeri ke liye zuroori hai .
Yoindia bahut pyari Bazm hai , yahaan main ne bhi bahut kuchh seekha aur doston ka bhar poor pyar paya hai . Is Bazm ki khusoosyat hai ki har eik , even 12-13 saal ke bachhe bhi apni poems post kar sakte hain aur haousla afzai bhi paate hain. Lekin zuroori hai ki hum apni ghaltiyaan bhi sudhaarein taki hamaara shayeri ka shouq kisi standard ko pahunch sake aur 100 poems post karne ke baad bhi hum Anaadi na kahlaayein .Kisi zubaan mein uska pronunciation bahut aham hota hai . Hamaari Hindustaani zubaan jismein Urdu aur Hindi ke alfaaz shamil hain shayeri k liye bahut popular aur mauzu zubaan hai lekin Hindi ka lafz ho ya Urdu ka uske talaffuz ka khayal zuroor rakhna chahye 'Sheeshe' ko 'seesa' , Jaleel saheb ko Zaleel saheb kahna ya 'Darshan' ko darsan kahna kisi tarah munasib nahin . Aisi ghaltiyan is site par bahut hoti hain . Meri request apne sabhi doston se hai ki woh ilm ho jaane par aisi ghalti repeat na karein , aur aisi ghaltiyon ke point out kiye jaane par bura bhi na maanein . Hum sab eik doosre se seekhne ke liye hi is bazm mein hain .


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khujli

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Re: APNEE NAZR.ON SE GIRAA DIYAA MUGHE(MUJHE)!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

«Reply #12 on: August 16, 2014, 09:05:19 AM »

Quote from: NakulG on August 01, 2014, 09:39:42 AM

Waah.
Aapne gusse me aa kar
Ghazal ko gajjal kar diya


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«Reply #13 on: August 18, 2014, 09:50:03 AM »

Quote from: premdeep on August 01, 2014, 10:32:28 AM


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khujli

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Re: APNEE NAZR.ON SE GIRAA DIYAA MUGHE(MUJHE)!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

«Reply #14 on: August 20, 2014, 04:50:10 AM »

Quote from: sksaini4 on August 01, 2014, 11:04:38 AM

waah waah bhai bahut intezaar karwaayaa khudaa salaamat rakkhe


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