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by Jaanasheen on February 22, 2009, 02:36:37 PM
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Doston Kuch Hattke Likh Raha Hoon, Jo Haqeeqat Hai Kuch Galti Nazar Aaye To Maaf Karna,.




Main Bhi Ek Aurat Hoon, Har Ghar Ki Main Zarurat Hoon,.
Aai Yahaan Majboori Se, Ab Mehfill Ki Main Zeenat Hoon,.

Sabke Taane Main Sehti Hoon, Phir Bhi Chup-Chaap Rehti Hoon,.
Sab Aurton Ki Izzat Bachaati Hoon, Khud Ko Tawaayaf Kehti Hoon,.

Main Na Hoti To Kya Hota, Manzar Duniya Ka Judaa Hota,.
Karte Mard "Shikaar Masoomon Ka, Aurton Ka Haal Buraa Hota,.

Phir Bhi, Samaajh Mujhe Izaat Ki Nazar Se Nahi Dekhta,.
Tawaayaf Bhi Ek Samaajh Sewak Hai, Ye Koi Nahi Sochta,.

Main To Har Raat Suhaagan Banti Ho, Har Din Widhwah Hoti Hoon,.
Kaisi Zindagi Rab Ne Bakshi, Ye Sochkar Apni Kismat Pe Main Roti Hoon,.

Har Khwaaish Ko Maarkar, Badsurat Mard Se Bhi Milti Hoon,.
Main Wo Kali Hoon Murjhaakar Bhi, Har Taraf Khilti Hoon,.

Apni Khushi Se Main Is Dhand Mein Utri Nahi,.
Majboor Hokar Aayi,.
Jab Dard Ki Kahaani Zindagi Se Guzri Nahi,.

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«Reply #1 on: February 22, 2009, 02:45:24 PM »
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Nahi azeem mujhe kahi galati nazar nahi aayi. aur
mujhe dard b hua kuch lines padte waqt. Dil ko dukh zarur hua ke
aaj b dunia mein Badnam Galiyan hai.. Nice expression Azeem  Thumbs UP
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«Reply #2 on: February 22, 2009, 02:48:42 PM »
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waah waah Janasheen bhai.... Applause Applause

behatareen composition...behad acha likha hai.... Applause

Shukriya Kaash Ji,.
Khushi Hui ke Aapne Ise Pasand Kiya,.
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«Reply #3 on: February 22, 2009, 02:51:16 PM »
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Nahi azeem mujhe kahi galati nazar nahi aayi. aur
mujhe dard b hua kuch lines padte waqt. Dil ko dukh zarur hua ke
aaj b dunia mein Badnam Galiyan hai.. Nice expression Azeem  Thumbs UP


Thank U Roja Didi,.
Bas Is Subject Ko Likhte Waqt Thoda Darr Laga ke Kahin Kisi Ko Koi Aitraaz Na Ho Mujhse,.

Aur Shukriya ke Aapne Hamaari Koshish Ko, Saraaha,.
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«Reply #4 on: February 22, 2009, 02:55:52 PM »
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Thank U Roja Didi,.
Bas Is Subject Ko Likhte Waqt Thoda Darr Laga ke Kahin Kisi Ko Koi Aitraaz Na Ho Mujhse,.

Aur Shukriya ke Aapne Hamaari Koshish Ko, Saraaha,.

Aitraz kaisa Azeem.. sacchayi hai aapne
wohi likha jo sach hai.. Again I appreciate your work.. Thumbs UP
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«Reply #5 on: February 22, 2009, 02:57:21 PM »
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Aitraz kaisa Azeem.. sacchayi hai aapne
wohi likha jo sach hai.. Again I appreciate your work.. Thumbs UP


Thank U Sis,.
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«Reply #6 on: February 22, 2009, 02:58:10 PM »
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wah wah...bahaut acha likha hai apne Azeem bhaijan...kamal ka likha hai...yahan sab apne dard ke upar ya apne aap pe likte hain par apki tarif karni chahiye jop aap dusron ke dard ke liye bhi likte hai jaisa Gareeb ke liye likha aur ab Tawaf ke liye.. Applause Applause i loved this line "Main To Har Raat Suhaagan Banti Ho, Har Din Widhwah Hoti Hoon"...well done Azeem bhai and keep writing...
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«Reply #7 on: February 22, 2009, 02:59:21 PM »
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Doston Kuch Hattke Likh Raha Hoon, Jo Haqeeqat Hai Kuch Galti Nazar Aaye To Maaf Karna,.


Main Bhi Ek Aurat Hoon, Har Ghar Ki Main Zarurat Hoon,.
Aai Yahaan Majboori Se, Ab Mehfill Ki Main Zeenat Hoon,.

Sabke Taane Main Sehti Hoon, Phir Bhi Chup-Chaap Rehti Hoon,.
Sab Aurton Ki Izzat Bachaati Hoon, Khud Ko Tawaayaf Kehti Hoon,.

Main Na Hoti To Kya Hota, Manzar Duniya Ka Judaa Hota,.
Karte Mard "Shikaar Masoomon Ka, Aurton Ka Haal Buraa Hota,.

Phir Bhi, Samaajh Mujhe Izaat Ki Nazar Se Nahi Dekhta,.
Tawaayaf Bhi Ek Samaajh Sewak Hai, Ye Koi Nahi Sochta,.

Main To Har Raat Suhaagan Banti Ho, Har Din Widhwah Hoti Hoon,.
Kaisi Zindagi Rab Ne Bakshi, Ye Sochkar Apni Kismat Pe Main Roti Hoon,.

Har Khwaaish Ko Maarkar, Badsurat Mard Se Bhi Milti Hoon,.
Main Wo Kali Hoon Murjhaakar Bhi, Har Taraf Khilti Hoon,.

Apni Khushi Se Main Is Dhand Mein Utri Nahi,.
Majboor Hokar Aayi,.
Jab Dard Ki Kahaani Zindagi Se Guzri Nahi,.

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jaanasheen jee,

kya kahane aap ke!

behad khuub likha hai, seedhe dil par asar kar rahi hai aap ki tehreer.. isay paDh ke hame saahir ludhiyanvi saaheb ki Ghazal yaad aa gayee...


aurat ne janam diyaa mardoN ko, mardoN ne use baazaar diyaa
jab ji chaahaa maslaa kuchlaa, jab ji chaahaa dutkaar diyaa

tulti hai kahin deenaaroN mein, bikti hai kahin baazaaroN mein
nangi nachvaai jaati hai, aiyyaashoN ke darbaaroN mein
ye vo be-izzat cheez hai jo, baNT jaati hai izzatdaaroN mein
(sahir)


mujhe aap ki koshish behad achchhi lagiii, keep writing!

best wishes


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«Reply #8 on: February 22, 2009, 03:00:46 PM »
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wah wah...bahaut acha likha hai apne Azeem bhaijan...kamal ka likha hai...yahan sab apne dard ke upar ya apne aap pe likte hain par apki tarif karni chahiye jop aap dusron ke dard ke liye bhi likte hai jaisa Gareeb ke liye likha aur ab Tawaf ke liye.. Applause Applause i loved this line "Main To Har Raat Suhaagan Banti Ho, Har Din Widhwah Hoti Hoon"...well done Azeem bhai and keep writing...


Thank U Rahim Bhai, Jo Aapne Hamaari Koshish Ko Saraaha,.
Aur Pasand Kiya,..

May Allah Bless You, Khush Rahein,.

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«Reply #9 on: February 22, 2009, 03:03:38 PM »
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jaanasheen jee,

kya kahane aap ke!

behad khuub likha hai, seedhe dil par asar kar rahi hai aap ki tehreer.. isay paDh ke hame saahir ludhiyanvi saaheb ki Ghazal yaad aa gayee...


aurat ne janam diyaa mardoN ko, mardoN ne use baazaar diyaa
jab ji chaahaa maslaa kuchlaa, jab ji chaahaa dutkaar diyaa

tulti hai kahin deenaaroN mein, bikti hai kahin baazaaroN mein
nangi nachvaai jaati hai, aiyyaashoN ke darbaaroN mein
ye vo be-izzat cheez hai jo, baNT jaati hai izzatdaaroN mein
(sahir)


mujhe aap ki koshish behad achchhi lagiii, keep writing!

best wishes




Shukriya Divya Ji,.

Aur Yaar Aapne kHush Kar Diya Hume Saahir Ji Ki Ghazal Ke Lines Share Karke,.
These Lines Are Superb,.

Aur Shukriya Aapka Jo Aapne Hamari Koshish Ko Pasand Kiya,.

May Allah Bless You,.
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«Reply #10 on: February 22, 2009, 03:08:20 PM »
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Thank U Rahim Bhai, Jo Aapne Hamaari Koshish Ko Saraaha,.
Aur Pasand Kiya,..

May Allah Bless You, Khush Rahein,.
Ur most welcome and May Allah bless you too dear bro...
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«Reply #11 on: February 22, 2009, 04:27:19 PM »
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Applause Applause

Bohat achcha likha hai BhaiJaan..
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«Reply #12 on: February 22, 2009, 06:44:22 PM »
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BAUT KHOOB JAANASHEEN BHAI KHUDA KARE AAP AISE LIKHTE REHAIN.ASGHR
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«Reply #13 on: February 23, 2009, 04:26:11 AM »
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Bahut hi pyaari tashweer key saath bahut hi painee baateyn bayaan keen hai aapney, Jaanasheen ji!
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«Reply #14 on: February 23, 2009, 04:40:43 AM »
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bahoot khoob likha hai bhai aapne

nahi gunah kee wo ek aurat hai
nahi gunah kee wo mamtaa kee murat hai
laiye aankh me paanee, god me jimmedaree
yahee gunah uskaa, kee wo ek aurat hai....

nahi hotaa vajood kisee kaa jo naree n hotee
nahi janmte  raam n gandhee jo aurat n hotee
kon janegaa ise n ye khud ko ye jaan payee hai
bas yahee gunah hai kee wo ek aurat hai..


netra...
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