DEATH

by vinery on May 17, 2015, 05:27:22 AM
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"He peeped through the window,
On his victim keeping an eye,
It was a dreary day and
Angels were fluttering by,
Pale and grizzled sufferer lying down,
He looked at him with a knowing frown,
Enjoying the look of pain on his face,
He doubled his pace & took him in embrace,
Leading the poor soul astray,
He finally took him away."
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«Reply #1 on: May 17, 2015, 05:58:11 AM »
"He peeped through the window,
On his victim keeping an eye,
It was a dreary day and
Angels were fluttering by,
Pale and grizzled sufferer lying down,
He looked at him with a knowing frown,
Enjoying the look of pain on his face,
He doubled his pace & took him in embrace,
Leading the poor soul astray,
He finally took him away."


Ms.vinery,
         nice composition..........a "rau" for it.Thaaaaaaaaaanks to Almighty I was not a victim while  every body has to encounter it.
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«Reply #2 on: May 17, 2015, 05:59:46 AM »
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«Reply #3 on: May 17, 2015, 06:04:18 AM »
Ms.vinery,
         nice composition..........a "rau" for it.Thaaaaaaaaaanks to Almighty I was not a victim while  every body has to encounter it.

Thank you so much.
But didn't get the second sentence.
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«Reply #4 on: May 17, 2015, 06:05:24 AM »
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«Reply #5 on: May 17, 2015, 06:39:22 AM »
nice creation
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«Reply #6 on: May 17, 2015, 11:18:13 AM »
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«Reply #7 on: May 17, 2015, 11:39:50 AM »
"He peeped through the window,
On his victim keeping an eye,
It was a dreary day and
Angels were fluttering by,
Pale and grizzled sufferer lying down,
He looked at him with a knowing frown,
Enjoying the look of pain on his face,
He doubled his pace & took him in embrace,
Leading the poor soul astray,
He finally took him away."


good narration and imagination ,ma'am
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«Reply #8 on: May 17, 2015, 04:31:43 PM »
 Beautiful and stunning.
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«Reply #9 on: May 17, 2015, 06:32:19 PM »
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«Reply #10 on: May 17, 2015, 09:56:33 PM »
good narration and imagination ,ma'am
Thank you.
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«Reply #11 on: May 17, 2015, 09:57:30 PM »
Thank you so much everyone.
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«Reply #12 on: May 18, 2015, 06:49:01 AM »
very very nice  waaaahhhhh keep writing
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«Reply #13 on: May 18, 2015, 11:23:33 AM »
very very nice  waaaahhhhh keep writing
Thank you so much.
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