Zameen aur sahi

by suman59 on October 31, 2012, 09:29:42 PM
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Zameen aur sahi aasmaan aur sahi
Sikasta par ke liye ek udaan aur sahi

Hai mera ahad mohabbat mein jaan de doongi
Fir ek baar mera imtihaan aur sahi

Hamari soch zamane ki had se bahar hai,
Dilon mein apnon ke behmo-gumaan aur sahi

Shehar mein maine bhi kitne makaan badle hai
Ae mere dost, naya ek makaan aur sahi

Chalo hum aaj kisii mod par bhichad jayein
Chalo ab apni nayii daastan aur sahi

Bahut kareeb mai manzil ke aa gayii
Zara sa hausla, thodi thakaan aur sahi.


ज़मीन  और  सही  आसमान  और  सही
शिकस्ता   पर  के  लिए  एक  उड़ान  और  सही

है  मेरा  अहद,  मोहब्बत  में  जान  दे  दूँगी
फिर  एक  बार  मेरा  इम्तिहान  और  सही

हमारी  सोच  ज़माने  की  हद  से  बाहर  है,
दिलों  में  अपनों  के वहमो - गुमान  और  सही

शहर  में  मैंने  भी   कितने  मकान  बदले  है
ऐ  मेरे  दोस्त, नया  एक  मकान  और  सही

चलो  हम  आज  किसी  मोड़  पर  बिछड  जाएँ
चलो  अब  अपनी  नई   दास्तान  और  सही

बहुत  करीब  मै  मंजिल  के  आ  गई
ज़रा  सा  हौसला,  थोड़ी  थकान  और  सही .
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«Reply #1 on: October 31, 2012, 09:49:52 PM »
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Zameen aur sahi aasmaan aur sahi
Sikasta par ke liye ek udaan aur sahi
LAAJWAAB MUTLAA HAI. DAAD DAAD DAAD
Hai mera ahadh mohabbat mein jaan de doongi
Aunty jee Ahadh ki jagah Ahad honaa chaahiye. Sher jabardast hai
Fir ek baar mera imtihaan aur sahi

Hamari soch zamane ki hadh se bahar hai,
Aunty ye hadh ki bajaaye had hona chaahiye
Dilon mein apnon ke behmo-gumaan aur sahi
waah waah
Shehar mein maine bhi kitne makaan badle hai
Ae mere dost, naya ek makaan aur sahi
shaandaar
Chalo hum aaj kisii mod par bhichad jayein
Chalo ab apni nayii daastan aur sahi
kyaa kahnaa kamaal kaa sher hai
Bahut kareeb mai manzil ke aa gayii
Zara sa hausla, thodi thakaan aur sahi.
waah waah

Exellent
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«Reply #2 on: October 31, 2012, 10:24:06 PM »
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Zameen aur sahi aasmaan aur sahi
Sikasta par ke liye ek udaan aur sahi

Hai mera ahad mohabbat mein jaan de doongi
Fir ek baar mera imtihaan aur sahi

Hamari soch zamane ki had se bahar hai,
Dilon mein apnon ke behmo-gumaan aur sahi

Shehar mein maine bhi kitne makaan badle hai
Ae mere dost, naya ek makaan aur sahi

Chalo hum aaj kisii mod par bhichad jayein
Chalo ab apni nayii daastan aur sahi

Bahut kareeb mai manzil ke aa gayii
Zara sa hausla, thodi thakaan aur sahi.


ज़मीन  और  सही  आसमान  और  सही
शिकस्ता   पर  के  लिए  एक  उड़ान  और  सही

है  मेरा  अहद,  मोहब्बत  में  जान  दे  दूँगी
फिर  एक  बार  मेरा  इम्तिहान  और  सही

हमारी  सोच  ज़माने  की  हद  से  बाहर  है,
दिलों  में  अपनों  के वहमो - गुमान  और  सही

शहर  में  मैंने  भी   कितने  मकान  बदले  है
ऐ  मेरे  दोस्त, नया  एक  मकान  और  सही

चलो  हम  आज  किसी  मोड़  पर  बिछड  जाएँ
चलो  अब  अपनी  नई   दास्तान  और  सही

बहुत  करीब  मै  मंजिल  के  आ  गई
ज़रा  सा  हौसला,  थोड़ी  थकान  और  सही .


gr8 composition . maqta nahin likha aapne.khair very nice ghazal.sorry, maine apni taraf se maqta likha hai. buss.

          hain tayaar yalghaar-e-azaadi ke liye phir se hum.
          gayi jaaneinye  kayi  'suman' , ek  jaan aur sahi.
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«Reply #3 on: October 31, 2012, 11:33:47 PM »
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Awesome suman ji... Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Thumbs UP
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«Reply #4 on: October 31, 2012, 11:53:38 PM »
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ज़मीन  और  सही  आसमान  और  सही
शिकस्ता   पर  के  लिए  एक  उड़ान  और  सही

है  मेरा  अहद,  मोहब्बत  में  जान  दे  दूँगी
फिर  एक  बार  मेरा  इम्तिहान  और  सही

हमारी  सोच  ज़माने  की  हद  से  बाहर  है,
दिलों  में  अपनों  के वहमो - गुमान  और  सही

शहर  में  मैंने  भी   कितने  मकान  बदले  है
ऐ  मेरे  दोस्त, नया  एक  मकान  और  सही

चलो  हम  आज  किसी  मोड़  पर  बिछड  जाएँ
चलो  अब  अपनी  नई   दास्तान  और  सही

बहुत  करीब  मै  मंजिल  के  आ  गई
ज़रा  सा  हौसला,  थोड़ी  थकान  और  सही .

bahut khub
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«Reply #5 on: November 01, 2012, 06:06:54 AM »
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bahut khoob
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«Reply #6 on: November 01, 2012, 06:38:41 AM »
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ek rau aur sahi
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«Reply #7 on: November 01, 2012, 07:42:22 AM »
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Exellent

jahan correction bataya aapne beta maine kar diya. aur bahut bahut shukriya aapka to make the creation excellant. thanks onceagain beta
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«Reply #8 on: November 01, 2012, 09:56:59 AM »
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kya baat hai mam umda ghazal hai, khoobsurat andaz meN likhi gayi ghazal, behad mubarakbaad
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«Reply #9 on: November 01, 2012, 10:22:06 AM »
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Awesome,,,,,,,,zabardast superbbbbbbbbbb creation Suman ji .
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«Reply #10 on: November 01, 2012, 01:34:16 PM »
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Very nice suman ji  Applause Applause Applause
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«Reply #11 on: November 01, 2012, 08:29:34 PM »
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kya kehne sumanji bahut khooob
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«Reply #12 on: November 01, 2012, 08:53:41 PM »
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boht khub suman ji
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«Reply #13 on: November 02, 2012, 11:07:13 PM »
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gr8 composition . maqta nahin likha aapne.khair very nice ghazal.sorry, maine apni taraf se maqta likha hai. buss.

          hain tayaar yalghaar-e-azaadi ke liye phir se hum.
          gayi jaaneinye  kayi  'suman' , ek  jaan aur sahi.

thank you very much marhoom jee
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«Reply #14 on: November 03, 2012, 11:27:43 PM »
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very very nice
taareef ke shabdon pe na jaaiyega..
kam hai lekin wieghted haiN
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