Bemiyaadee sazaa kaa mujrim hooN.............Mamta Bajpai

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Kuchh naa kuchh to mujhe silaa deeje
khak ko khak me milaa deeje

tishnagee had se baRh gayee ab to
kuchh nahee to zahar pilaa deeje

bemiyaadee sazaa kaa mujrim hooN
bas rihaai mujhe dilaa deeje

le mashaaleN do saath 'Annaa' kaa
chooleN sarkaar kee hilaa deeje

jazbe murdaa hue haiN logoN ke
kuchh to keeje unheN zilaa deej


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«Reply #1 on: May 03, 2011, 05:55:41 PM »
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Ms Mamta Bajpai,

Bahut achchhee hai..ghazal lekin..
Kya "Annaa" aapka takhallus hai
agar naheen to NM(Not Mine) ke saath
poet ke naam se post karna chahiye.

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Satish Shukla 'Raqeeb'
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«Reply #2 on: May 03, 2011, 07:43:12 PM »
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Mamtaa Jee Aadaab!

Kia baat hai bade ghamguzaar ashaaroN meiN Gazal
adaa ki aapne... ?

Par sabhi ashaar behad umdaa rahe...
Dil se daad O mubarakbad kabul kijiye.. Usual Smile           



Kuchh naa kuchh to mujhe silaa deeje
khak ko khak me milaa deeje

Achcha Matla hai daad           

tishnagee had se baRh gayee ab to
kuchh nahee to zahar pilaa deeje

Kia kahne jee bahut khoob... behad achcha sher kaha hai Usual Smile         

bemiyaadee sazaa kaa mujrim hooN
bas rihaai mujhe dilaa deeje

Waah bahut khoob .. Usual Smile         

jazbe murdaa hue haiN logoN ke
kuchh to keeje unheN zilaa deeje

Aameen aapki duaa asar laye.. Usual Smile         

le mashaaleN do saath 'Annaa' kaa
chooleN sarkaar kee hilaa deeje

Kia kahne Mamta jee achcha sher hai daad Usual Smile
Par aapne is sher ko dusre angle se socha nahi hai shayad, Kuch ajeeb sa sound ho raha hai ?         


Mamta Bajpai


Likhate rahiye...
Khush O aabaad rahiye..
Khuda Hafez Usual Smile         

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«Reply #3 on: May 04, 2011, 04:18:38 AM »
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wah wah mamtaji.. bahut khub...

 Applause Applause Applause
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«Reply #4 on: May 04, 2011, 07:19:48 AM »
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Kuchh naa kuchh to mujhe silaa deeje
khak ko khak me milaa deeje

tishnagee had se baRh gayee ab to
kuchh nahee to zahar pilaa deeje

bemiyaadee sazaa kaa mujrim hooN
bas rihaai mujhe dilaa deeje

jazbe murdaa hue haiN logoN ke
kuchh to keeje unheN zilaa deeje

le mashaaleN do saath 'Annaa' kaa
chooleN sarkaar kee hilaa deeje


Mamta Bajpai


vrey very nice mamta ji
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«Reply #5 on: May 04, 2011, 07:25:35 AM »
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Satish jee!
sab se pahle aap ko gazal paRhane karne kaa shukriya adaa karooNgee...gazal pooree tarah se meri likhee hui hai...yahaaN 'Annaa' llikh kar Annaa Hazaare jee ka ziqra kiyaa gayaa hai...Annaa koi takhaluus nahee...haan is baat se ye ahsaas zaroor huaa ki is sher ko gazal ke aakhir me naa likh kar pahale likhnaa thaa varnaa log aap kee tarah Annaa ko humaaraa takhallus maan baithenge.......
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«Reply #6 on: May 04, 2011, 07:26:09 AM »
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bahut bahut shukriyaa Sheba jee!
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«Reply #7 on: May 04, 2011, 07:35:59 AM »
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Bahut bahut shukriya Parwaz jee!kyaa paini nazar rakhte haiN aap .aap kee baat se mai poori tarah sahmat hooN.....
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«Reply #8 on: May 04, 2011, 07:36:35 AM »
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shukriyaa Manjum jee!
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«Reply #9 on: May 04, 2011, 08:11:14 AM »
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Mast Gazal hai Mamta-di.... Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause

Bangaal mai raaj ho jaaye Mamta ka dil se duaa keeje
Khak me miljaye bhrasht karunaneedhi aysa kuchh keeje




Kuchh naa kuchh to mujhe silaa deeje
khak ko khak me milaa deeje

tishnagee had se baRh gayee ab to
kuchh nahee to zahar pilaa deeje

bemiyaadee sazaa kaa mujrim hooN
bas rihaai mujhe dilaa deeje

jazbe murdaa hue haiN logoN ke
kuchh to keeje unheN zilaa deeje

le mashaaleN do saath 'Annaa' kaa
chooleN sarkaar kee hilaa deeje


Mamta Bajpai

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«Reply #10 on: May 04, 2011, 08:20:48 AM »
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Bahut bahut Khooob Mamtaji..

Har Ek Ashaar lajawaab!!

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«Reply #11 on: May 04, 2011, 09:00:16 AM »
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Very well said  Bajpai saheba

SARAAPA  JOSH  HAI,  EK  AAWAZ  HAI,  EK  AZM  HAI USKA;
CHALO MILKAR KE MAUQA HAI, AAINDA AAYE KE NA AAYE!

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«Reply #12 on: May 04, 2011, 10:09:52 AM »
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Mamta Ji,

Aapka bahut..bahut shukriya jawaab dene ke liye
ek shayar ke man men doubt ho yeh achchha naheen
lagta.

Jab saari bandishen ghazal jaisi hain jinko aapne
bakhoobi follow kiya hai fir ye aakhiri sher MAQTA
hua. Ek shayar ke haisiyat se masvira dena chaahunga
ki order change karke aakhiri sher ko oopar le len aur
kisi doosre shre ko apna takhallus lagakar maqta bana
den, baki aapki marzi.

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«Reply #13 on: May 04, 2011, 10:15:28 AM »
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Shukriyaa Koyal!


Aawaam kee soch me jo inqalaab le aaye
kisi bhee jaanib se koi paigaam ye aaye
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«Reply #14 on: May 04, 2011, 10:17:31 AM »
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Shukriyaa Satish jee! aap kaa mashwarah sar aaNkhoN par....is nek nawaazish kaa phir se behad shukriyaa........
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