Mamta saheba aadab,,
mashallah kya khoob ghazal kahi hai apne ..dad hi dad ..mujhe ye dekh be inteha massarat ho rahi hai ke ab har bhr me taba azmai kar rahi hai ..ye apke zahin hone ki dalil hai .. allah apko aur bhi taraqiyun se nawaze ..Dili dad o mubarak baad ki mustahiq hain app..
Jaise ke parwaz sahab ne kafiye ke mutaliq arz kiya hai wo baath dusurt maloom hoti ..chunke jaawan..jaise ke apne khud arz kiya hai Noon Gunnah pe girta hai ..bilkul baja farmaya apne ..to is surat me kafiya Alif pe girana ki azadi nahi milti apko ..ye bus meri zaati rai hai mai galat bhi ho sakta hon ..ap dekh len
Magar mai samjhta hon ke iski zarorat hi nahi chunke apne jo naai surat is ghazal ki chaspa ki hai uske kya hi kahene hain ..meri ilteja yehi hai ke paheli wali surat ko kharij kar den ..Hazarah dad apki is naai ghazal pe...bus do ik baten arz karni hai ..so kahe deta hon umid hai meri in baton ka bura nahi manegi...
Meelon Chali Dhop me zulmaton ki
Mai ab yaar Ka aastaa.N chahtee HooN.
Is sher Ke pahele Misre me Ik Rukn Kamm Maloom hota hai .. Agar ap Pahele Misre ko yun kahen to Wazn Thik ho jayega shayad..
Yun Miloo.N...............
Akhir sher bhi khoob Kaha hai wah wah..
Udne ko Chune se badal Ke dekhiyega .. Waise apki ghazal ka har ik sher murassa hai ....apki is pur-acar , pur -lutf o murassa ghazal pe phir dad .. allah apko khush rakhe ..Meri baath se mutafiq hona zarori nahi...
khadim o khaddam
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