Chup Rehna, Kuch Naa Kehna "Khwaish"

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Kissa Koi Purana Lagta Hoon
Bade Shayaro Ke Beech Main Ek Diwana Lagta Hoon....

Bas Jazbaaton Ko lafzon Mein Utaarta Raha!!!
Main Iss Mehfil mein Ab Ek Anjaana Lagta Hoon...

Yeh Ghazal Koi Behr Mein Nahi,
Mujh Jaisa Ghatiya Shayar Iss Shehar mein Nahi!!!
Ab Main Guzra Hua Zamaana Lagta Hoon...

Chup Rehna, Kuch Naa Kehna Bhi Bahut zaroori Hai!!!
Samajdaaro ke Beech main Bhi Ek Syaana Lagta Hoon...

"Khwaish" Kuch Naa Kehkar Bhi bahut Kuch Keh Gaya!!!!
Maan Wale Logon Ke Beech main Ek NIMAANA Lagta Hoon...

                ~~~~~Khwaish~~~~~
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«Reply #1 on: August 04, 2010, 09:06:43 PM »
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Pehle toh main bahaut zada gussa hoon apse Khwaish jee...Bilkul tariff nahin kar sakta apki iss kalam ki..kaise likh diya apne kay ap guzra hua zamana lagte hai..kaise keh diya kay ap ek ghatiya shayar hai..Ufff thats sooo not right...Ap mere fav shayar hai...Ap bahaut zada acha likte hai..Hamesha yaad rakhiyega kay iss duniya main, apki shayari ka Rahim bahaut bada fan hai...Bahaut mohobat hai mujhe apke kalamon se..
Iss main bhi ap bahaut kuch kehgaye..
Aur sach kaha, khamoshi woh baatein keh jati hai jo zuban nahin keh sakti...
Aur 'nimaana' ka matlab kya hota hai...?
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«Reply #2 on: August 04, 2010, 09:13:12 PM »
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kya kahey aap koh khwaish ji ... aap na janey ku aisa keh rahey ho par ek baat hai ... yeh baat bhi aap ney badey hi shairana dhang sey kari hai .....

and sir u toh write so beautifully ... pls dont under-estimate your talent ... we know what writer you are and we surely enjoy your poems .... plss .... dont ever think what you said ...

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«Reply #3 on: August 04, 2010, 09:41:39 PM »
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Pehle toh main bahaut zada gussa hoon apse Khwaish jee...Bilkul tariff nahin kar sakta apki iss kalam ki..kaise likh diya apne kay ap guzra hua zamana lagte hai..kaise keh diya kay ap ek ghatiya shayar hai..Ufff thats sooo not right...Ap mere fav shayar hai...Ap bahaut zada acha likte hai..Hamesha yaad rakhiyega kay iss duniya main, apki shayari ka Rahim bahaut bada fan hai...Bahaut mohobat hai mujhe apke kalamon se..
Iss main bhi ap bahaut kuch kehgaye..
Aur sach kaha, khamoshi woh baatein keh jati hai jo zuban nahin keh sakti...
Aur 'nimaana' ka matlab kya hota hai...?

Bhai Rahim!!! Kya Kahoon,Aapka pyaar,Satkaar Hi hai,jo Himmat Deti hai Kuch Likhne ki..Varna Aaj Kal kayi baar yeh Mehsoos Hota Hai ke aajkal jazbaaton ko kam Likhne Ke Andaaz Ko Zyaada Tawaju Di jaati hai..Aapne Itna Kuch Keh Diya Jiske main Yakeen Maniye,Bilkul Bhi laayak nahi..Phir Bhi Aapka Teh Dil Se Shukriya Mere Bhai Jo Aapne Humesha Se Yuh Saath Diya hai...Bahut bahut Shukriya Aapka..

Aur Nimaane Ka matlab hota hai jiske Andar Koi Maan Nahi Ya Yuh Kehlo jiski Koi Izzat Nahi..
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«Reply #4 on: August 04, 2010, 09:46:51 PM »
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kya kahey aap koh khwaish ji ... aap na janey ku aisa keh rahey ho par ek baat hai ... yeh baat bhi aap ney badey hi shairana dhang sey kari hai .....

and sir u toh write so beautifully ... pls dont under-estimate your talent ... we know what writer you are and we surely enjoy your poems .... plss .... dont ever think what you said ...

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Jasbir Ji, Your Words Means A Lotttttttttt To Me....

This Poetry is just to express something which i Felt In My heart!!!

Thankyou Sooooooooooooooooo Much Sir For Appreciating..I will always remember your words..Thanks a Million!!!!
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«Reply #5 on: August 04, 2010, 10:41:17 PM »
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Bhai Rahim!!! Kya Kahoon,Aapka pyaar,Satkaar Hi hai,jo Himmat Deti hai Kuch Likhne ki..Varna Aaj Kal kayi baar yeh Mehsoos Hota Hai ke aajkal jazbaaton ko kam Likhne Ke Andaaz Ko Zyaada Tawaju Di jaati hai..Aapne Itna Kuch Keh Diya Jiske main Yakeen Maniye,Bilkul Bhi laayak nahi..Phir Bhi Aapka Teh Dil Se Shukriya Mere Bhai Jo Aapne Humesha Se Yuh Saath Diya hai...Bahut bahut Shukriya Aapka..

Aur Nimaane Ka matlab hota hai jiske Andar Koi Maan Nahi Ya Yuh Kehlo jiski Koi Izzat Nahi..


Apke liye mere dil main bahaut zada izzat hai..
Hmm yeh ap bilkul thek keh rahe hai kay jazbaton ko nahin, likhne kay tarikhe ko zada dekha jaa raha hai..Kuch doston ne yahan behad izzat di hai iss nadan ko isiliye ab tak yahan share kar raha hoon warna main yahan sirf parrne ata..
Meri bhi kuch posts ko kam tawako mili hai aur kuch ko kuch logon ne bade kadve lavzon main tariff ki hai..yehi zindagi hai dost..!
Apka saath deta rahunga inshAllah, zindagi rahi toh..!
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«Reply #6 on: August 04, 2010, 11:06:18 PM »
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hmmmmmmmmmmm bhai aap mere bhi fav. shayar hai. aapki likhi har poem mujhe behad pasand aati hai...aur ye bhi aayi....bas aap kalam chalate rahen ...moti to khud - ba-khud bikhar jaate hain panne pe
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«Reply #7 on: August 04, 2010, 11:44:25 PM »
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Saadgi se likhi is kavita me apne to kamal kar diya. Apne very frankly apni hakikat ko describe kiya hai. Apne bare me yu accept karna badi baat hai tabhi insan improvement karta hai. Nice poem ji. 
Kissa Koi Purana Lagta Hoon
Bade Shayaro Ke Beech Main Ek Diwana Lagta Hoon....

Bas Jazbaaton Ko lafzon Mein Utaarta Raha!!!
Main Iss Mehfil mein Ab Ek Anjaana Lagta Hoon...

Yeh Ghazal Koi Behr Mein Nahi,
Mujh Jaisa Ghatiya Shayar Iss Shehar mein Nahi!!!
Ab Main Guzra Hua Zamaana Lagta Hoon...

Chup Rehna, Kuch Naa Kehna Bhi Bahut zaroori Hai!!!
Samajdaaro ke Beech main Bhi Ek Syaana Lagta Hoon...

"Khwaish" Kuch Naa Kehkar Bhi bahut Kuch Keh Gaya!!!!
Maan Wale Logon Ke Beech main Ek NIMAANA Lagta Hoon...

                ~~~~~Khwaish~~~~~

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«Reply #8 on: August 05, 2010, 12:21:19 AM »
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ye jo bhi likha hai dil se likha hai..koi jhuti tareef ya aapke gazal ko padhke nahin...aapnne jo yahan khud k liye kaha wo kuch achcha nahin laga...aap hamare liye kya hain samjha nahin sakti...but i love ur poems...mere likhne me jo nai soch aai hai aapka likha padhke hi aai hain....bht kuch hai jo keh sakti hun yahan..aaj iss gazal pe...par wo chhota muh bdi baat hogi....
bas kuch feelings jo aapke liye hain man me wo yhan bayaan karti hun...ummeed hai aapko pasand aayegi...

Tere shabdon me wo taaseer hai khwaish
K pathar ki murat bhi padhke pighal jaye

Wo jazbaaton ka samundra hai jiske ehsaas se
Yahan har dil me tuufaan machal jaye

Har lafz tera jo hota hai gazal me teri
Usme tere dil me chhupa dard nazar aa jaye

Iss mehfil me aise shayar bht hi kum hai
Jo gehri baatein bhi aasani se yun keh jaye

Har ek kalaam tera  har nazm teri hai khub yaara
Jo har bar mere dil ko aake chupke se chhu jaye

Chahe jitni bhi  padhun me nai gazal teri
 Wo ek nai paribhasha zindagi ki samjha jaye

Kehte ho tum khud ko anjana deewana guzra zamana
Lekin gazlon se apni tu dil me sabke utar jaye

Hai kuch aisi baat teri khwaishon me “khwaish”
K chahe to saari mehfil tere saamne sir jhuka jaye…!!!
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«Reply #9 on: August 05, 2010, 12:26:45 AM »
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wah wah wah wah kasak ji... wah wah .. bahut hi badiya kavita aap ki, bahut hi badiya tarikey sey aap ney yeh khwaish ji koh jatla dia ki woh kitna badiya likhtey hai ... aap ki iss poem neh dil chu lia .... yeh fir sey ehsaas ho gaya ki hum sab ek family members hai and hum sab ek dusre key liye dil meh kitni ijjat rakhtey hai... aap ney hamara bhi dil khush kar dia ... GOD BLESS YOU ...


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«Reply #10 on: August 05, 2010, 12:33:26 AM »
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wah wah wah wah kasak ji... wah wah .. bahut hi badiya kavita aap ki, bahut hi badiya tarikey sey aap ney yeh khwaish ji koh jatla dia ki woh kitna badiya likhtey hai ... aap ki iss poem neh dil chu lia .... yeh fir sey ehsaas ho gaya ki hum sab ek family members hai and hum sab ek dusre key liye dil meh kitni ijjat rakhtey hai... aap ney hamara bhi dil khush kar dia ... GOD BLESS YOU ...


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thnx js ji......thnx a lot for this reply......
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«Reply #11 on: August 05, 2010, 01:34:46 AM »
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Anamika di, behad khubsoorati se likha hai! Applause Applause
ye jo bhi likha hai dil se likha hai..koi jhuti tareef ya aapke gazal ko padhke nahin...aapnne jo yahan khud k liye kaha wo kuch achcha nahin laga...aap hamare liye kya hain samjha nahin sakti...but i love ur poems...mere likhne me jo nai soch aai hai aapka likha padhke hi aai hain....bht kuch hai jo keh sakti hun yahan..aaj iss gazal pe...par wo chhota muh bdi baat hogi....
bas kuch feelings jo aapke liye hain man me wo yhan bayaan karti hun...ummeed hai aapko pasand aayegi...

Tere shabdon me wo taaseer hai khwaish
K pathar ki murat bhi padhke pighal jaye

Wo jazbaaton ka samundra hai jiske ehsaas se
Yahan har dil me tuufaan machal jaye

Har lafz tera jo hota hai gazal me teri
Usme tere dil me chhupa dard nazar aa jaye

Iss mehfil me aise shayar bht hi kum hai
Jo gehri baatein bhi aasani se yun keh jaye

Har ek kalaam tera  har nazm teri hai khub yaara
Jo har bar mere dil ko aake chupke se chhu jaye

Chahe jitni bhi  padhun me nai gazal teri
 Wo ek nai paribhasha zindagi ki samjha jaye

Kehte ho tum khud ko anjana deewana guzra zamana
Lekin gazlon se apni tu dil me sabke utar jaye

Hai kuch aisi baat teri khwaishon me “khwaish”
K chahe to saari mehfil tere saamne sir jhuka jaye…!!!
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«Reply #12 on: August 05, 2010, 01:55:04 AM »
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Kya baat hai mere bhai kafi diljale nazar aa rahe ho.........waise to aap bade sabr wale insaan hai aaj kya ho gaya aapke sabr ko, aji aap hi himmat haar jayege to Ghayel ka kya hoga.

I love your writing too dear........waise agar kisi baat par baat karna ho to you are welcome. Aap jante ho main jo baat karta hu neutral karta hu.
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«Reply #13 on: August 05, 2010, 06:27:03 AM »
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hmmmmmmm..... kahaan se shuru karun.... abhi soch hi raha hoon... chaliye kuch likhne ki koshish karte hain....

musaafir hoon main jeewan ka,
mera kaam bas chalte jaana hai,

ghazal kya hai beher kya hai,
mera kaam bas padhte jaana hai,

padhne waale chaahe jo bhi kahen,
mera kaam bas likhte jaana hai,

kami nahi hai chahne waalon ki,
mujhe to bas unka saath nibhaana hai,

kya faida aisi lekhni ka jisme koi ehsaas hi nahi,
mera kaam to bas ehsaason ko samajhte jaana hai,

hote hain kuch jo bas likhne ke andaaz pe dhyaan dete hain,
na usme koi ehsaas hai hota naa hi use samjhe zamaana hai,

kya kahen aapki lekhni ke baare me,
aapka to har andaaz niraala hai,

mud mud ke aate hain padhne aap ke lekh,
apna kaam to bas aapko padhte hi jaana hai...


Sach kahen Khwaish ji to hum kuch hi logon ka likha Yo pe pasand karte hain... unme se aap ek hain... aapka likha hua naam dekh ke hi use padhta hoon bas isliye ki usme title me aapka naam hai... kuch to khaas hoga apke lekh me jiske kaaran main use padhta jarur hoon... ab kya kahun aapki taarif me .. aap bahut achcha likhte hain and you you are inspiration for most of us... kaash hum bhi aap jaisa likh paate...

bahut khoobsurat peshkash hai ye bhi aapki.. bahut khoobsurti se jasbaaton ko pesh kiya hai... bahut khoob...!!!

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«Reply #14 on: August 05, 2010, 04:19:40 PM »
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Apke liye mere dil main bahaut zada izzat hai..
Hmm yeh ap bilkul thek keh rahe hai kay jazbaton ko nahin, likhne kay tarikhe ko zada dekha jaa raha hai..Kuch doston ne yahan behad izzat di hai iss nadan ko isiliye ab tak yahan share kar raha hoon warna main yahan sirf parrne ata..
Meri bhi kuch posts ko kam tawako mili hai aur kuch ko kuch logon ne bade kadve lavzon main tariff ki hai..yehi zindagi hai dost..!
Apka saath deta rahunga inshAllah, zindagi rahi toh..!

Itni Izzat Bakshne ke liye Teh dillllllllll se shukriya Bhai Rahim!!!!! icon_flower
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