HUM BANPHOOL HAIN

by mamta bajpai on May 14, 2010, 05:35:24 PM
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CHANDNI RAAT ME DHOOP KI CHADAR BICHA LETE HAIN
HUM LOG BIYABAAN ME BHI SAHARA KA MAZA LETE HAIN

KYON BEKAR BAHATI HO ASHKON KE PANEELE MOTI
YE SHABNAMI QATARE HUME ROZ KAHAN DIKHTE HAIN

HUM BANPHOOL HAIN VEERANO ME BHI KHIL JAYEN
SHAHAR KE PHOOL BADI SHAISTGI SE KHILTE HAIN

FIZAON ME BIKHAR JAYEN RANG-O-BOO KE NAZARE
AISE SUHANE MOUSAM HUME KAHAN SE MILTE HAIN

ZINDAGI JISKI THI USKO HI ATA KAR DI HAMNE
BAAD MUDDAT KE MUH DHAANP KE HUM SOTE HAIN
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«Reply #1 on: May 14, 2010, 06:09:56 PM »
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kuch alag hi andaaz hai aapke likhne ka ki hume aapki kavitaayein padhne ke liye majboor karti hai. kavita sabhi likhte hain par aapka likha padhke aisa lagta hai jaise bhasha bhi sharma jaaye. alankaaron ko aap itni khoobsurti se apne kavitaon me istmaal karte hain ki kya kahen. bahut bahut sundar kavita likhi hai aapne Mamta ji.... bahut hi sundar....!!!

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«Reply #2 on: May 14, 2010, 07:50:09 PM »
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shahar key phool badi shaistgi sey khiltey hain....bahut khoob mamta ji Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause Applause
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«Reply #3 on: May 15, 2010, 03:01:54 PM »
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KLASKAR JI KOTISH DHANYWAAD! AAP KE DWARA KI GAYEE PRASHANSHA MUJHE ATYADHIK PROTSAHIT KARTI HAI.IS SE POORV AUR IS BHANTI MUJHE KISI NE BHI PROTSAHIT NAHI KIYA.PUNAH AAPKO SADHUWAAD PRADAN KARNA CHAHOONGI.SAATH HI YE APEKHSA BHI KAROONGI KI AAP MERI TRUTIYON PAR BHI DHYAN DE KAR MUJHE INGIT KARENGE.AAP KE MADHYAM SE MUJHE EK UTKRISHT AALOCHAK MILEGA JISSE MERI RACHNAYEN AUR PARISHKRIT HO KAR NIKHAR PAYEN.
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«Reply #4 on: May 15, 2010, 03:34:31 PM »
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teesra aur chautha shair bahot khoob hai


bahot khareeb se tu ne dekha hai zindegi ko...
tere ashaar iss baat ki gawahi dete hain......


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«Reply #5 on: May 15, 2010, 04:58:04 PM »
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Nazar ji ye tu tera kya hota hai. Kya aise daad di jati hai. Urdu ki nafaasat bhool gaye ?
teesra aur chautha shair bahot khoob hai


bahot khareeb se tu ne dekha hai zindegi ko...
tere ashaar iss baat ki gawahi dete hain......



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«Reply #6 on: May 15, 2010, 05:44:01 PM »
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Nazar ji ye tu tera kya hota hai. Kya aise daad di jati hai. Urdu ki nafaasat bhool gaye ?

huzoor a wala eak shayar sahab ,, kai aise azeem shayar aur urdu daan ne tu aur tera se muqatib howe hain apne ashar me ..

tu aur tera se murad kabhi yarana mizaj bhi hota hai ahemaqana nahi.. apki tanqeed pagal pan ki dalil hai .. nazar sahab se adban guzarish hai ke wo kis andaz me muqatib the tarjumani kar den ..


Khair andesh..

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«Reply #7 on: May 15, 2010, 06:09:44 PM »
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abdul qadeer bhai ne jo roshni daali hai 'tu aur tera' pe to mein samjhta hoon aap jaise aqel-e- faheem rakhne waale ke liye itna kaafi hai..mujhe lagta hai aapne bahut zyada padhliya ya phir zauq-e-shayeri ki zer-o-zabar tak bhi risai na ki hoo,, qadeer sahaab ne jo tashreeh ki hai "yarana mizaj " bahot khoob hai.nazar sahaab aap bhi thodi si tashreeh karden to munasib hoga.
Nazar ji ye tu tera kya hota hai. Kya aise daad di jati hai. Urdu ki nafaasat bhool gaye ?
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«Reply #8 on: May 15, 2010, 06:40:28 PM »
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ZAHE NASEEB NAZAR SAHEB!!!AAP KI DDAD MERI QALAM KO AABAD KARTI HAI.TAHE DIL SE SHUKRIYA.
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«Reply #9 on: May 15, 2010, 06:41:39 PM »
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wah mamta saheba bahoth qoob ,, dad hazir hai qubool karen .. apka andaz hi nirala hai ..allah apko khush rakhe


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«Reply #10 on: May 15, 2010, 06:45:39 PM »
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SHUKRIYA QADEER BHAI
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«Reply #11 on: May 15, 2010, 09:13:55 PM »
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Main aap logon ka likha hua padh padh ke hi sikh raha hoon. Mujhe kuch khaas likhna nahi aata. Achcha lagta hai aap sabka likha padh ke. Naya naya bahut kuch sikhne ko milta hai. Main bahut naya hoon is kshetra mein. Jise khud vishay ka gyaan nahi wo dusre ki trutiyaan kahaan dhund paayega. Waise aapke lekh me truti mil paana asambhav hai...!!!

KLASKAR JI KOTISH DHANYWAAD! AAP KE DWARA KI GAYEE PRASHANSHA MUJHE ATYADHIK PROTSAHIT KARTI HAI.IS SE POORV AUR IS BHANTI MUJHE KISI NE BHI PROTSAHIT NAHI KIYA.PUNAH AAPKO SADHUWAAD PRADAN KARNA CHAHOONGI.SAATH HI YE APEKHSA BHI KAROONGI KI AAP MERI TRUTIYON PAR BHI DHYAN DE KAR MUJHE INGIT KARENGE.AAP KE MADHYAM SE MUJHE EK UTKRISHT AALOCHAK MILEGA JISSE MERI RACHNAYEN AUR PARISHKRIT HO KAR NIKHAR PAYEN.
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«Reply #12 on: May 16, 2010, 05:35:42 AM »
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Zindagi jiski thi us ko hi ata kar di hamne
baad muddaton ke munh dhaanp ke sote hai

Mamta ji thora khiskne ke baad khoob sambhala, ye sher nahin gazab ka sher hai...
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«Reply #13 on: May 16, 2010, 05:38:20 AM »
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SHUKRIYA HARISH JI!!!AAP KE PROTSAHAN KI APEKCHA KARTI RAHOONGI.
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«Reply #14 on: May 16, 2010, 05:42:22 AM »
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KLASKAR JI MAI BHI IS KSHATRA ME ABHI HI AAYEE HOON.ISKE PAHLE HINDI KAVITA ME KUCH PRAYAS KIYE THE.JO APRAKASHIT HAIN.AAPKI SATEEK SAMALOCHNA KI MAI PHIR BHI AKANKSHA KARTI RAHOONGI.
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