Betiyaan Gareeb Ki........(Ghayel)

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«Reply #15 on: February 26, 2009, 08:45:43 AM »
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adhunik samaj ki ek jwalant samasya par aapki kalam ne khoob likha hai sajid ji..
aur talat aapne bhi apne shabdon se ise bakhoobi samajhaya hai....
shally chand shabdon me hi baat ki gahraai ka andaaza aapne bhi karaya hai....
sabhi ko sadhuwad
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«Reply #16 on: February 26, 2009, 02:36:23 PM »
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Quote from: Pooja on February 25, 2009, 05:20:26 PM
A beautiful thread... sabhi ne ek se bad kar ek likha hai...

Good work Sajid, Celmira, Shally and Chitralsony!!!

Bohat bohat shukriyaan Pooja...

Quote from: bekarar on February 26, 2009, 08:45:43 AM
adhunik samaj ki ek jwalant samasya par aapki kalam ne khoob likha hai sajid ji..
aur talat aapne bhi apne shabdon se ise bakhoobi samajhaya hai....
shally chand shabdon me hi baat ki gahraai ka andaaza aapne bhi karaya hai....
sabhi ko sadhuwad

Bohat bohat shukriya mere yaar bas dua kar Ghayel ki kalam se jo nikle achcha nikle...
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«Reply #17 on: February 26, 2009, 03:00:35 PM »
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Quote from: chitralsony on February 24, 2009, 02:12:18 PM
hoti mehsoos kabi jo aziyat ghareeb ki
kiya kabi hum be khol kay muskurasaktay?
rakh kay khod ko onki baytion ki jaga
kiya kabi thora sokon pa saktay?
daikh lain bhook ki shidat say bilaktay bachay
kiya kabi hum be pait bher kay kha saktay?
shab ko onka drd say ghayel sa wajood
ah tasawer be karain kiya kabi hum so saktay?



Chitral, aapne bhi bohot hi touching lines likhi hain yahan.....
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«Reply #18 on: February 26, 2009, 03:01:46 PM »
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Quote from: k.shael on February 25, 2009, 10:39:48 AM
Sach kahoo to sajid ji mujhe aapke iss kalam ko pad ke rona nahi aaya,
kyunki ye mere khud ke ghar ki halaat hai jo shayad aapke lafzo ne bayan
kar diye...

Aur ye neeche jo lines maine likhi hai ye khud mere ghar me maine mehsoos
ki hai, ye sachayi hai meri zindagi ki...


Aapne bahut aacha likha hai sajid Clapping Smiley  Clapping Smiley  Clapping Smiley

kuch saath likh rahi ho,umeed hai aacha likh pao


Dekh kar bada hote betiyoon ko baap ki hassi kahiin kho gayi,
Kaise karega wida wo bin daheez ke betiyoon ko isi soch me raat
se din aur din se raat ho gayi,

Maa se karte baat suna baapu ko ki ye kaisi mushqil ghadi hai,
Wida bhi karna hai inhe aur paisso ki bhi kammi ho gayi,

Bhai hota koi inka to shayad bhar deta inki jholiyaan,
Meri to sarii umar roti laane, ghar banane me hi basar ho gayi...

Choti si gudiyaa thi ye dono choti hi rehti to aacha tha,
Khuda jaane kyun pal-bhar me ye badi ho gayi... tearyeyed

Shally.



Shally, aapki post padh ke aankhain nam hain....Khuda aapki saari mushkilain door kare.....Humesha khush raho....
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«Reply #19 on: February 26, 2009, 03:15:55 PM »
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Sach Kehta Hoon,Bahut Kam Hota Hai Ke,Kabhi Hum kuch aisa Padhe jisse Humari Ankhein Nam Ho Jaaye..Sajid Bhai,Har ek Alfaaz,Ek Pukaar hai..Aapne jo baatein kahin hai,rozana ki zindagi mein,jaane kitne log,yeh haqeeqat ka saamna karte hai..

AUR SHALLY PEHLI BAAR,MERE SAATH AISA HUA HAI KE PADHTE-PADHTE AANKHON SE AANSU GIR PADHE..SHAYAD MERE PAAS TAAREF KE LIYE ALFAAZ NAHI HAI PAR DUAYEN HAI..WAHEGURU AAP KI HAR MUSHKIL DOOR KARE..AAPKE ANG-SANG SAHAI RAHE..
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«Reply #20 on: February 27, 2009, 06:08:12 AM »
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Quote from: Pooja on February 25, 2009, 05:20:26 PM
A beautiful thread... sabhi ne ek se bad kar ek likha hai...

Good work Sajid, Celmira, Shally and Chitralsony!!!

Shukriya Pooja didi,

Shally.
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«Reply #21 on: February 27, 2009, 06:09:44 AM »
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Quote from: bekarar on February 26, 2009, 08:45:43 AM
adhunik samaj ki ek jwalant samasya par aapki kalam ne khoob likha hai sajid ji..
aur talat aapne bhi apne shabdon se ise bakhoobi samajhaya hai....
shally chand shabdon me hi baat ki gahraai ka andaaza aapne bhi karaya hai....
sabhi ko sadhuwad

Shukriya Sanjeev Brother,

Aapse to sirf aashirwaad milne ki umeed rehti hai,
aur sach kahoo to wahi bahut badi doulat hai meri,

SHally.
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«Reply #22 on: February 27, 2009, 06:11:04 AM »
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Quote from: Celmira on February 26, 2009, 03:01:46 PM
Shally, aapki post padh ke aankhain nam hain....Khuda aapki saari mushkilain door kare.....Humesha khush raho....

Shukriya Celmira dear,

Aur aapne bhi bahoot khoob likha hai Clapping Smiley  Clapping Smiley

Kya hua jo na bakshi khuda ne doulat mujhe,
Tum jaise dost dekar saari duniyaa meri kardi...
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«Reply #23 on: February 27, 2009, 06:13:09 AM »
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Quote from: khwaish on February 26, 2009, 03:15:55 PM
Sach Kehta Hoon,Bahut Kam Hota Hai Ke,Kabhi Hum kuch aisa Padhe jisse Humari Ankhein Nam Ho Jaaye..Sajid Bhai,Har ek Alfaaz,Ek Pukaar hai..Aapne jo baatein kahin hai,rozana ki zindagi mein,jaane kitne log,yeh haqeeqat ka saamna karte hai..

AUR SHALLY PEHLI BAAR,MERE SAATH AISA HUA HAI KE PADHTE-PADHTE AANKHON SE AANSU GIR PADHE..SHAYAD MERE PAAS TAAREF KE LIYE ALFAAZ NAHI HAI PAR DUAYEN HAI..WAHEGURU AAP KI HAR MUSHKIL DOOR KARE..AAPKE ANG-SANG SAHAI RAHE..


Shukriya Khawish,

Maksad mera mehfil ko rulaana na tha,
Par jab baat aayi apne ghar ki to chup rehne ka
koi bahana na tha...

Shally.
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«Reply #24 on: February 28, 2009, 10:57:05 PM »
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Quote from: Celmira on February 26, 2009, 03:00:35 PM
Chitral, aapne bhi bohot hi touching lines likhi hain yahan.....
thank u so much talat sis
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«Reply #25 on: May 02, 2009, 01:32:37 PM »
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Quote from: khwaish on February 26, 2009, 03:15:55 PM
Sach Kehta Hoon,Bahut Kam Hota Hai Ke,Kabhi Hum kuch aisa Padhe jisse Humari Ankhein Nam Ho Jaaye..Sajid Bhai,Har ek Alfaaz,Ek Pukaar hai..Aapne jo baatein kahin hai,rozana ki zindagi mein,jaane kitne log,yeh haqeeqat ka saamna karte hai..

AUR SHALLY PEHLI BAAR,MERE SAATH AISA HUA HAI KE PADHTE-PADHTE AANKHON SE AANSU GIR PADHE..SHAYAD MERE PAAS TAAREF KE LIYE ALFAAZ NAHI HAI PAR DUAYEN HAI..WAHEGURU AAP KI HAR MUSHKIL DOOR KARE..AAPKE ANG-SANG SAHAI RAHE..

Bohat bohat shukriyaan khwaish mere likhe ko mehsoos karne ka.....bas yuhi sath dete rehna.
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«Reply #26 on: April 10, 2010, 11:10:18 AM »
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Syahi me khoon tha, use kitna junoon tha

Ghayel raha wajood, na dil me sukoon tha...
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«Reply #28 on: September 12, 2015, 02:57:32 AM »
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Hi,m tasjeel.Mujhe ap sbki lines bht bht psnd ai,or sch me mujhe b rona agya sajid bhiya ki lines pdh kr.. Mere fathr ki b kuch aisi hi halt h,mera koi bhai ni h ,hm 5bhne h,main apne fathr ki hlp krna chahti hu pr kuch ni kr pati.;'(
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