Haal-e-dil ab kisay sunanaa hai

by Brijinder on February 01, 2006, 07:27:39 PM
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Haal-e-dil ab kisey sunaanaa hai
MaiN to rusva tere saath yeh zamaana hai

Traadeed to raaz-e-fasuN hai yaroO
Sach hai kya aur kya fasaana hai

Umr se kashmkash hai jazboN ki
Dil jawaN aur chehra buzurgavaanaa hai

Tadbeer aag ki tere haath meiN hai
Ghar ko roshan ki ghar jalaanaa hai

Masarrat ki tamanna bhi abhi kaise kareN
Dard ka karz abhi chukaanaa hai

"Sagar" ajeeb shakhs hai dost
Kabhi daanaa to kabhi diwaanaa hai
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«Reply #1 on: February 02, 2006, 07:37:37 PM »
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As this poem got written in the format of gazal n so I am open to the suggestions so as to make it sticking to the rules of gazal.
Any suggestions?
«Reply #2 on: February 06, 2006, 01:58:41 PM »
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dear brijinder
           i am not a poet which can give u any suggetion.please write the meaning of difficult words of urdu in ur every post so that every one can understand the poem.

 ...................  nice work

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