Yaad uss khoobsuriti ki .. jab khula asmaan tha

by Ricky on November 06, 2012, 12:49:54 AM
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A very small effort remembering the day when we used to wake up with sound of birds on poll or tree outside your home, but we didn't realize, its not anymore, no matter how many trees you have in your house or compound, its not there.. ie. the nature..

I have felt it , just decided to pen it down, a quick few minute effort brought up following :


Chidiyo ke cheh-chahat,

phoolon ki mehek,

Subah ki sondhi tazgi,

Shaam ki woh meethi chaadar,

chamakti  woh dopohar,

Bheegi si wo chandni,

Kahan dhakk  gayi hai !!

Kyun patthar ke Jungle mein

Jaise simat gayi hai,

Lauta do mujhe wo seher

Jo unchi imarton mein

Kahin rukk gayi hai.. !!

Kahin chupp gayi hai..  !!



Thank you for reading it.
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«Reply #1 on: November 06, 2012, 06:32:36 AM »
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A very small effort remembering the day when we used to wake up with sound of birds on poll or tree outside your home, but we didn't realize, its not anymore, no matter how many trees you have in your house or compound, its not there.. ie. the nature..

I have felt it , just decided to pen it down, a quick few minute effort brought up following :


Chidiyo ke cheh-chahat,

phoolon ki mehek,

Subah ki sondhi tazgi,

Shaam ki woh meethi chaadar,

chamakti  woh dopohar,

Bheegi si wo chandni,

Kahan dhakk  gayi hai !!

Kyun patthar ke Jungle mein

Jaise simat gayi hai,

Lauta do mujhe wo seher

Jo unchi imarton mein

Kahin rukk gayi hai.. !!

Kahin chupp gayi hai..  !!



Thank you for reading it.
bohut Umda ricky jee. sach kaha aapne , achchi nazm kahi hai mubarakbaad qubool

kijiye,

kisi ka ek shair yaad aaraha hai,

ab maiN ration ki qataroN men nazar aata huN,

apne khetoN se bichadhne ki saza pata hun...
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«Reply #2 on: November 06, 2012, 08:20:56 AM »
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JUST BEAUTIFUL........ BAHUT HI PYARI AUR KHUBSURAT AUR  KAHIN NA KAHIN JO DIKHA RAHA HAI AAJ USKA DARD DIKHATI......... Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley
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«Reply #3 on: November 06, 2012, 08:52:35 AM »
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bahut khoobsurat badi pyaari dheron daad
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«Reply #4 on: November 06, 2012, 09:23:00 AM »
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very nice
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«Reply #5 on: November 06, 2012, 09:31:50 AM »
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bahut sunder
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«Reply #6 on: November 06, 2012, 09:35:31 AM »
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Bahut Khub
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«Reply #7 on: November 07, 2012, 05:37:22 PM »
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I really appreciate all the feedback. I am glad that these few lines were appreciable.

@Arish, behad umda sher.

@saudagar,  ya, its somewhat true.

And thanks every one else.
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«Reply #8 on: December 28, 2012, 02:56:03 PM »
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Congratulations,

Your work has been featured in Dec-2012 Yoindia Shayariadab newsletter.

You can visit link given above to get more information about it.
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«Reply #9 on: December 28, 2012, 03:19:29 PM »
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A very small effort remembering the day when we used to wake up with sound of birds on poll or tree outside your home, but we didn't realize, its not anymore, no matter how many trees you have in your house or compound, its not there.. ie. the nature..

I have felt it , just decided to pen it down, a quick few minute effort brought up following :


Chidiyo ke cheh-chahat,

phoolon ki mehek,

Subah ki sondhi tazgi,

Shaam ki woh meethi chaadar,

chamakti  woh dopohar,

Bheegi si wo chandni,

Kahan dhakk  gayi hai !!

Kyun patthar ke Jungle mein

Jaise simat gayi hai,

Lauta do mujhe wo seher

Jo unchi imarton mein

Kahin rukk gayi hai.. !!

Kahin chupp gayi hai..  !!



Thank you for reading it.

waah ati sundar ricky jee  Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Thumbs UP
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Shukriya Suman Mohtarma zarra Nawazi aur hausla afzai ke liye.
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