FOR MY FRIEND....................:Shairy-e-Dost (Friendship Poetry)

smile_deep1

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How can i thank u my dear friend?
for every little support, u always lent.
you taught me the meaning of real frnd,
which in life i will never forget.............

I dont have enuf words to express,
wat i think of u, out of the rest.
You r so special to me............
even the word special doesn't seems the best.

you have been there at my side,
when i needed u, day or night.
U never consulted ur diary for date,
whenever i needed, u was never late.

i know u r always there for me...
u need no words to express this till eternity.
i thought of friend and u was there,
thats so much,i can never repay.............

How can i thank u my dear friend?


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myheart_ursonly

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Re: FOR MY FRIEND....................

«Reply #1 on: December 22, 2004, 09:14:44 PM »

Quote from: "smile_deep1"

How can i thank you my dear friend?
for every little support, you always lent.
you taught me the meaning of real frnd,
which in life i will never forget.............

I dont have enuf words to express,
wat i think of you, out of the rest.
You r so special to me............
even the word special doesn't seems the best.

you have been there at my side,
when i needed you, day or night.
you never consulted ur diary for date,
whenever i needed, you was never late.

i know you r always there for me...
you need no words to express this till eternity.
i thought of friend and you was there,
thats so much,i can never repay.............

How can i thank you my dear friend?

amazing work deep! beautiful

one correction shud be done (infact better to mind in future)

* the dots express "incomplete things" avoid their use.
dont use more than 3 dots

* i know you r always there for me... >> to express someone's presence, "here" is better than there

* missing title

wht i liked in ur poem was use of punctuation marks consistently throughout the poem, n it was expressible. n at last wht i noticed is use of full words like "you" instead of "u" (i remember mansi never learnt that, though i told her many a times). its nice keep it up.

overall, it was a nice effort from your side

hope to c more of your work in future.

love,
heart


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smile_deep1

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FOR MY FRIEND....................

«Reply #2 on: December 22, 2004, 09:18:26 PM »

thank u so much for ur suggestions yaar........... i really need them............. i'll keep in mind all the points next time ........... for sure.......... well hopefully i'll be better next time.........

thanks a lot yaar............. happy9


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myheart_ursonly

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FOR MY FRIEND....................

«Reply #3 on: December 22, 2004, 10:04:48 PM »

ur welcome deep

if u need any help in rhyming, u can try rhymezone.com,
it features a searchable interface such that

u enter "sister"
it will search for rhymes "glister", "blister", it'll display all results that
matchh. hope u'll need it in future.

it helped me a lot many times when im stuck :wink:


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smile_deep1

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FOR MY FRIEND....................

«Reply #4 on: December 22, 2004, 10:09:06 PM »

thats for the help heart........... really thankful......... kasam se


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myheart_ursonly

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«Reply #5 on: December 22, 2004, 10:21:45 PM »

u knw whenevr sumone says "kasam se" tumhari yaad aa jaati hai! lol

anyways, ur welcome always... with smile :wink:


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smile_deep1

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«Reply #6 on: December 22, 2004, 10:23:54 PM »


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myheart_ursonly

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«Reply #7 on: December 22, 2004, 10:27:05 PM »

waise ek baat to hai, jahan bhi hum jaate hain wo thread aabaad ho jaata hai :wink: ab ek nayi poem likhna jaldi se, nahi to yunhi meri bakwaas se bhar jayega thread tumhara!


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smile_deep1

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«Reply #8 on: December 22, 2004, 10:32:17 PM »

ok........... i'll try to post it tomorrow........... waisay aisay bhi baat karnay ka alag maza hain


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myheart_ursonly

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«Reply #9 on: December 22, 2004, 10:34:52 PM »

haan wo to hai... waise u knw wht i liked this avatar so much! i think its most bful here at yoindia... dont b flattered :wink:


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smile_deep1

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«Reply #10 on: December 22, 2004, 10:37:09 PM »

i too think so.............. i m thankful to u for that


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myheart_ursonly

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«Reply #11 on: December 22, 2004, 10:40:43 PM »

ur welcome always... if im not wrong u removed this pic last nite for sum reason?? or maybe im confused... i think i visited without logging in last nite, n this pic wasnt here :wink:


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smile_deep1

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«Reply #12 on: December 22, 2004, 10:49:44 PM »

i didnt removed it yaar.......... kasam se


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nishita

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«Reply #13 on: December 23, 2004, 03:40:48 PM »

wow deeep very nice Usual Smile


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smile_deep1

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«Reply #14 on: December 23, 2004, 11:53:14 PM »

thanks nishita....................................... happy9


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