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MUJHE AABLON KA HEE SHOUQ THA,KUCH RAASTON SE GILAA NAHEEN
GUMGASHTAGEE HEE AZEEM THEE,KUCH RAHBARON SE GILA NAHEEN
YE RAAT LAMBI UDAAS OR PALAKON PE QATARE HAIN SHABNAMI
BEDAARIYAAN HI PASAND THEEN KHUMAARIYON SE GILA NAHEEN
TERI FURQATON ME HI KAT GAYEE YE TAVEEL UMRA AYE HUMNASHEEN
MUJHE FAASALE HI AZEEZ THE TERI WUSALATON SE GILA NAHEEN
YE JO ZAKHM MERE JIGAR ME HAIN UNHEN KYON NAHI TU KUREDATA
MUJHE ZAKHM MERE AZEEM HAIN TERI RAAHATON SE GILA NAHEEN
KUCH AUR DO MUJHE THOKAREN KI YE JAAN JISM ME HAI ABHI
TERI NAFRATEN HI NASEEB THEEN TERI CHAAHATON SE GILA NAHEEN
MAMTA BAJPAI
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MANOJ6568
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«Reply #2 on: August 20, 2010, 06:31:14 PM » |
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khub MUJHE AABLON KA HEE SHOUQ THA,KUCH RAASTON SE GILAA NAHEEN
GUMGASHTAGEE HEE AZEEM THEE,KUCH RAHBARON SE GILA NAHEEN
YE RAAT LAMBI UDAAS OR PALAKON PE QATARE HAIN SHABNAMI
BEDAARIYAAN HI PASAND THEEN KHUMAARIYON SE GILA NAHEEN
TERI FURQATON ME HI KAT GAYEE YE TAVEEL UMRA AYE HUMNASHEEN
MUJHE FAASALE HI AZEEZ THE TERI WUSALATON SE GILA NAHEEN
YE JO ZAKHM MERE JIGAR ME HAIN UNHEN KYON NAHI TU KUREDATA
MUJHE ZAKHM MERE AZEEM HAIN TERI RAAHATON SE GILA NAHEEN
KUCH AUR DO MUJHE THOKAREN KI YE JAAN JISM ME HAI ABHI
TERI NAFRATEN HI NASEEB THEEN TERI CHAAHATON SE GILA NAHEEN
MAMTA BAJPAI
khushi ka ek pal bhi mujhe khabhi mila nahi phir bhi jindgi se hame manoj koi gila nahi |
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«Reply #3 on: August 21, 2010, 07:09:48 AM » |
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PARWAAZ JEE KALAAM KEE PASANDEEDAGEE KE LIYE AAP KAA BAHUT BAHUT SHUKRIYAA.AAP KEE HOUSALA AFZAI HUMARI LEKHNEE KO SABAAT DETI HAI.ISI TARAH SAATH NIBHATE RAHIYE....
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«Reply #4 on: August 21, 2010, 07:20:20 AM » |
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SHUKRIYA MANOJ JEE.AAP NE BHI KHOOB KAHA HAI.YUN HI SAATH DETE RAHEN.......
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«Reply #5 on: August 21, 2010, 06:38:26 PM » |
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SHUKRIYA MANOJ JEE.AAP NE BHI KHOOB KAHA HAI.YUN HI SAATH DETE RAHEN.......
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«Reply #6 on: August 22, 2010, 01:46:22 PM » |
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Very Nice Poetry ... Mamta Ji ! Very Impressive ... Very Touching ... !
Very Nice Creation... !
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«Reply #7 on: August 22, 2010, 04:34:03 PM » |
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AAKAASH JEE AAP KA BEHAD SHUKRIYA!
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«Reply #8 on: August 25, 2010, 06:52:06 AM » |
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BAHU BAHUT SHUKRIYA AKAASH JEE!AAP KI HOUSLA AFZAI SE MERE KALAAM KO SABAAT MILA. YUN HI SAATH DETE RAHEN .......
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«Reply #9 on: August 25, 2010, 06:54:26 AM » |
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SHUKRIYA NARESH JEE ! AAP KI HOUSLA AFZAI KI BEHAD MAMNOON HOON.KALAAM KO WAQT DENE OR PASAND FARMANE KE LIYE BEHAD SHUKRIYA....
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«Reply #10 on: August 25, 2010, 08:20:11 PM » |
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Mahutrama Mamta saheba aadab,,
yaqeen janiye mujhe ye dekh behad massarath ho rahi hai ke ap itni uncommon bhr me bhi taba azmai kar rahi mashallah ...ye ghazal apke mashq pe dalalat karti hai ..mujhe apki ye khaawish behad pasand aai ..do ik jaga jahan bhr ka jhol nazar aya aur zubaan khuch gair manoos si lagi mujhe yaqeenhai ke ap khud hi usko thik kar lengi ...apki is khubsurath ghaza ke liye app dad o mubarak baad ki mustahiq hain..Allah kare zor-e-khalam aur ziyada ...allah apko khush rakhe ...
Dua go
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«Reply #11 on: August 26, 2010, 04:52:11 AM » |
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QADEER SAAHEB,
WALAIKUM AADAAB,
AAP KA KHAT PADHA.AAP KI NEK RAI SE MAI ITTEFAAQ RAKHTEE HOON.JO KAMI AAP KO NAZAR AA RAHI HAI USE MAINE BHI MASOOS KIYA HAI LEKIN TAMAAM KOSHISHON KE BA-VAJOOD BHI MAI UNHEN THEEK NA KAR SAKEE.PHIR BHI APNI KOSHISH ZARI RAKHOONGEE.AAP KI NAZAR-E-INAAYAT KE LIYE MAI DIL SE AABHAAREE HOON.OR CHAHOONGI KI HO SAKE TO AAP IS ME MERI KUCH MADAD KAREN.BAHUT BAHUT SHUKRIYA.......
KHUSH RAHEN ......
KHUSHIYAAN BAANTEN.......
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«Reply #12 on: August 31, 2010, 10:39:18 PM » |
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MUJHE AABLON KA HEE SHOUQ THA,KUCH RAASTON SE GILAA NAHEEN
GUMGASHTAGEE HEE AZEEM THEE,KUCH RAHBARON SE GILA NAHEEN
YE RAAT LAMBI UDAAS OR PALAKON PE QATARE HAIN SHABNAMI
BEDAARIYAAN HI PASAND THEEN KHUMAARIYON SE GILA NAHEEN
TERI FURQATON ME HI KAT GAYEE YE TAVEEL UMRA AYE HUMNASHEEN
MUJHE FAASALE HI AZEEZ THE TERI WUSALATON SE GILA NAHEEN
YE JO ZAKHM MERE JIGAR ME HAIN UNHEN KYON NAHI TU KUREDATA
MUJHE ZAKHM MERE AZEEM HAIN TERI RAAHATON SE GILA NAHEEN
KUCH AUR DO MUJHE THOKAREN KI YE JAAN JISM ME HAI ABHI
TERI NAFRATEN HI NASEEB THEEN TERI CHAAHATON SE GILA NAHEEN
MAMTA BAJPAI
Bahut khoob Mamta Ji |
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«Reply #13 on: August 31, 2010, 11:30:49 PM » |
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SHUKRIYA RAJESHJEE!
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«Reply #14 on: September 14, 2010, 07:39:22 AM » |
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mamta ji ...aap khoob likhtin hain.....
aapki ghazal bahut class hai...ek dum jhakaas
bus aisa laga jaise ek behad khubsurat ladki ho jaise....
aur yu laga ki jaise us ladki ka chehre par kuch bhadde nishaan hai...bada dard hua ye dekhkar...
to socha ki kyu na kuch koshish karke vo nishaan halka kar du..
itni khubsurat ghazal hai...itne khoobsurat ehsaans...bus mann nahi mana.....
so ye gustkhaaki kar raha hu.........
haa ek jagah zara phas gaya...'wusaalaton ' zara samajh na aaya...shayad 'vaslaton' ho ya 'was'aton'(area)....so us sher ki 2 hakle ban gayi
aapse bin izaazat liye gusthaaki kar raha hu......bus itni acchi ghal dekhkar dil nahi manaa...
agar nagawar guzra ho to bande ki gardan haazir hai...
mujhe aablon hi ka shauk tha koi raaston se gila nahi
ga.m_e gastagi hi azeem thi mujhe rahbaron se gila nahi
ye hai raat lambi udaas or meri palke bhi ku.ch_hai shabnami
ke bedariyaan hi pasand thi voh khumariyon se gila nahi
teri furqaton hi me kaT gayi meri taawe.l_umr ae humnashi
teri furqaton hi me kaT gayi meri umr-e-taaweel humnashi
mujhe faasle hi azeez the so 'wusalaton' se gila nahi
mujhe faasle hi azeez the kisi waslaton se gila nahi
ye jo zhakm mere jigar me hai use kyu nahi tu kuredta
mujhe zakhm mere azeem hai teri raahaton se gilaa nahi
mujhe thokare abhi aur do ke ye jaan jism me hai abhi
teri nafrate hi naseeb thi teri chahaton se gila nahi
.....wonderful ghazal in a rare meter....
regards
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