BEBASII........................... Abhi Tamrakar..

by AbhiTamrakar on July 02, 2012, 07:21:12 AM
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Ek or ghazal aapke supurd kar rahaa hun .... is ummeed ke sath ki isme mujhe sachche comments milege....bilkul sahi sahi... kharab ho to kharab ...bekar to bekar..achhi to achhi... hehe..



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«Reply #1 on: July 02, 2012, 07:41:48 AM »
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acha laga dear
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«Reply #2 on: July 02, 2012, 08:44:02 AM »
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Priya abhee ji is rachnaa ke bhaaw bade shaandaar hain lekin jis fragdilee se aapne is par sachhee rai maangee hai to main ye kahoongaa ki ye rachnaa ghazal ke grammar se door hai yaa yoon kahen ki bahr se khaariz hai
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«Reply #3 on: July 02, 2012, 08:53:32 AM »
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Pyaari  peshkash  hai . 3rd sher  bahut  khoobsurat hai . Rythm  bhi  hai .
Haan , agar  bahr  mein  hoti  to  maza  dobaala ho jaata.  
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«Reply #4 on: July 02, 2012, 03:53:35 PM »
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Abhi jee
Bahut acche khayaalo ko jaama pahnaaya hai aapne.
Baaki kuch kahne ka mujhe haq nahee.
Sacche comment kee chahat kise nahee hotee..aap bhee chahte hai..fakra hai mujhe aap par.
Is field ka koee ant nahee.. par basic ko seekhkar dheere dheere aage badhna accha hai. jaha chah vaha raah. ek na ek din safalta haath lagegee.
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«Reply #5 on: July 02, 2012, 05:03:42 PM »
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bohoot khoob likha hai abhe g Applause Applause

bohot khoobsorat 
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«Reply #6 on: July 02, 2012, 11:34:33 PM »
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abhi jee nicely designed and wonderful ghazal  Applause Applause Applause Applause
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«Reply #7 on: July 03, 2012, 02:05:22 AM »
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abhi ji bhut hi zabardast aur khubsurat creation............ dhero daad aur mubrakbaad. Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley
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«Reply #8 on: July 06, 2012, 05:04:45 PM »
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acha laga dear
Priya abhee ji is rachnaa ke bhaaw bade shaandaar hain lekin jis fragdilee se aapne is par sachhee rai maangee hai to main ye kahoongaa ki ye rachnaa ghazal ke grammar se door hai yaa yoon kahen ki bahr se khaariz hai
Pyaari  peshkash  hai . 3rd sher  bahut  khoobsurat hai . Rythm  bhi  hai .
Haan , agar  bahr  mein  hoti  to  maza  dobaala ho jaata.   
Abhi jee
Bahut acche khayaalo ko jaama pahnaaya hai aapne.
Baaki kuch kahne ka mujhe haq nahee.
Sacche comment kee chahat kise nahee hotee..aap bhee chahte hai..fakra hai mujhe aap par.
Is field ka koee ant nahee.. par basic ko seekhkar dheere dheere aage badhna accha hai. jaha chah vaha raah. ek na ek din safalta haath lagegee.

bohoot khoob likha hai abhe g Applause Applause

bohot khoobsorat 
Applause
abhi jee nicely designed and wonderful ghazal  Applause Applause Applause Applause
abhi ji bhut hi zabardast aur khubsurat creation............ dhero daad aur mubrakbaad. Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley Clapping Smiley



bahut bahut shukriya aap sabhi dosto kaa....


sksaini sirji bahr se aapka ishara takhtii se hoga shayad...iska aage se khyal rakhuga..

F H siddiqui ji aapne sahi kaha is bar meri jyada koshish rhythm thii so pa li ...ab bahr par takhtii karke kam shuru karne ki koshish me hun...dekhte he agli peshkash sahi rakh pata hun ya nahi..

mkv ji yunhi sath rahiye ...

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