Surmai sham .......... (neel)

by neelgold on September 02, 2010, 10:19:04 PM
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Milan ke baad judai kyun hoti hai
Mehfil ke baad fir tanhai kyun hoti hai

Tera milna koi sapne se kum nahi tha
Sapno mein bi fir baat rusvai ki kyun hoti hai

Rehte the hum ek saath har paal
Dil ki raahon mein fir Judai kyun hoti hai

Surat liye baithe hain nigaahon mein teri aaj bi
Fir in aankhon mein ansuon ki purvai kyun hoti hai

Dil bichhae baithe hain aaj bi teri raahon mein hum
meri sham aaj bi tere naam se surmai kyun hoti hai

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«Reply #1 on: September 03, 2010, 12:53:38 AM »
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Aapke waapas aane se jaise Yo ki jaan wapas aa gayi... aapko jaisa chhoda tha pichhli baar ab bhi waisi hi hain... aapke likhne me koi fark nahi hai.. aap tab bhi "Kamaal" likhti thi aur aaj bhi bas "Kamaal" likhti hain... aapke pyaar ki ye dard bhari daastaan dil ko chhoo gayi... bahut bahut khoob likha hai aapne...!!!

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Koshish ki hai humne kuch likhne ki iske jawaab me... ummeed hai aapko pasand aayegi...!!!



kuch sawaalon ke koi jawaab huwa nahi karte,
mohabbat me kabhi dil juda huwa nahi karte,

kya hua jo hum aaj ek dusre ke kareeb nahi hain,
judai jismon ki hoti hai, aatma juda huwa nahi karte,

milna hamaara ek khoobsurat sapne ki tarha hi tha,
sapno me kabhi ruswaai ki baatein kiya nahi karte,

aankhon me rakha hai jis chehre ko wo dil me bhi hai,
kyun us chehre ko dil me mehsus kar khush huwa nahi karte,

tumhaare paas jo dil hai wo hamaara hi to hai,
dil kisi ka apne paas rakhke aansuon se geele huwa nahi karte...
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«Reply #2 on: September 03, 2010, 03:43:20 AM »
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Milan ke baad judai kyun hoti hai
Mehfil ke baad fir tanhai kyun hoti hai

Tera milna koi sapne se kum nahi tha
Sapno mein bi fir baat rusvai ki kyun hoti hai

Rehte the hum ek saath har paal
Dil ki raahon mein fir Judai kyun hoti hai

Surat liye baithe hain nigaahon mein teri aaj bi
Fir in aankhon mein ansuon ki purvai kyun hoti hai

Dil bichhae baithe hain aaj bi teri raahon mein hum
meri sham aaj bi tere naam se surmai kyun hoti hai

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Bahaut khoobsurat likha hai Dost..Just amazing..!
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«Reply #3 on: September 03, 2010, 03:44:57 AM »
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kuch sawaalon ke koi jawaab huwa nahi karte,
mohabbat me kabhi dil juda huwa nahi karte,

kya hua jo hum aaj ek dusre ke kareeb nahi hain,
judai jismon ki hoti hai, aatma juda huwa nahi karte,

milna hamaara ek khoobsurat sapne ki tarha hi tha,
sapno me kabhi ruswaai ki baatein kiya nahi karte,

aankhon me rakha hai jis chehre ko wo dil me bhi hai,
kyun us chehre ko dil me mehsus kar khush huwa nahi karte,

tumhaare paas jo dil hai wo hamaara hi to hai,
dil kisi ka apne paas rakhke aansuon se geele huwa nahi karte...

Kapil Dost, bahaut khoob..
Wakei acha jawab hai..
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«Reply #4 on: September 03, 2010, 04:09:37 AM »
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sahi kaha kapil ...behad khubsurat likha hai neel ne....

aur utna hi khubsurat tumhara jawab hai...

neel keep writing and enjoy every feel of writing...
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«Reply #5 on: September 03, 2010, 06:22:23 AM »
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bahut bahut shukriya Rahim bhai....!!!

Kapil Dost, bahaut khoob..
Wakei acha jawab hai..
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«Reply #6 on: September 03, 2010, 06:23:12 AM »
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bahut bahut shukriya Kasak ji...!!!

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sahi kaha kapil ...behad khubsurat likha hai neel ne....

aur utna hi khubsurat tumhara jawab hai...

neel keep writing and enjoy every feel of writing...

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«Reply #7 on: September 03, 2010, 08:38:48 PM »
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Haan bula ke liye ho t likhna bi padega na janab .......... Tum jante ho ki maine yaha aah ke likhna shuru kiya tha aur yehi pe band bi ho gaya ....... i learnt a lot from here .... app saab logon ko pad pad ke main bi kuch jo ban padta hai likh deti hoon ... anywyz thnx a lot ......... dekho main kya kuch miss kar rehi thi .........

Kya khoob likha hai .......... Jst " KAMAL" .........
SUpreb!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

soch main daal diya aab iska reply kya karon yaar ....... bhut mushkil kaam dete ho karne ke liye ......

Gila bi apno se hota hai aur shkiyaat bi
Begano se to rusva hua nahi karte ....
Dosti hoti hai to aise hoti hai ki
Judai main bi dil juda hua nahi karte ...

Aapke waapas aane se jaise Yo ki jaan wapas aa gayi... aapko jaisa chhoda tha pichhli baar ab bhi waisi hi hain... aapke likhne me koi fark nahi hai.. aap tab bhi "Kamaal" likhti thi aur aaj bhi bas "Kamaal" likhti hain... aapke pyaar ki ye dard bhari daastaan dil ko chhoo gayi... bahut bahut khoob likha hai aapne...!!!

 Applause Applause Applause

Koshish ki hai humne kuch likhne ki iske jawaab me... ummeed hai aapko pasand aayegi...!!!



kuch sawaalon ke koi jawaab huwa nahi karte,
mohabbat me kabhi dil juda huwa nahi karte,

kya hua jo hum aaj ek dusre ke kareeb nahi hain,
judai jismon ki hoti hai, aatma juda huwa nahi karte,

milna hamaara ek khoobsurat sapne ki tarha hi tha,
sapno me kabhi ruswaai ki baatein kiya nahi karte,

aankhon me rakha hai jis chehre ko wo dil me bhi hai,
kyun us chehre ko dil me mehsus kar khush huwa nahi karte,

tumhaare paas jo dil hai wo hamaara hi to hai,
dil kisi ka apne paas rakhke aansuon se geele huwa nahi karte...

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«Reply #8 on: September 03, 2010, 09:01:20 PM »
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Neel Jee Aadaab!

Behad achchi koshish rahi hai aapki yeh..... Sabhi sher achche hai per ahsaas aur sawaal khoob lage.... Last do sher hume bahut achche lage.....

par secound sher bahut jyaada kamzor bana hai naa bayaani meiN aaya hai naa koi massage de paa raha hai....

Likhati rahiye..... Nikhaar aata rahenga....

And kalaskar jee and Rahim Sahab aap dono be bhi achchi sharing kii hai...... nice....... bahut khoob         

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«Reply #9 on: September 03, 2010, 09:13:12 PM »
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Shkriya Parvez ji .... i already mention thousand times muze likhna nahi aata aur yeh saach hai ...... its jst feelings for my friend usne kuch likha uska jawab tha ... nothng else ..... muze jaida technalities nahi pata haan aapki updates aise hi milti rehi to jarror nikhar ayenga ...

Thnks apne mere liye waqt nikla
Neel Jee Aadaab!

Behad achchi koshish rahi hai aapki yeh..... Sabhi sher achche hai per ahsaas aur sawaal khoob lage.... Last do sher hume bahut achche lage.....

par secound sher bahut jyaada kamzor bana hai naa bayaani meiN aaya hai naa koi massage de paa raha hai....

Likhati rahiye..... Nikhaar aata rahenga....

And kalaskar jee and Rahim Sahab aap dono be bhi achchi sharing kii hai...... nice....... bahut khoob          


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«Reply #10 on: September 03, 2010, 09:14:10 PM »
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Rahim.......... thanx dost .....

Thnx

Bahaut khoobsurat likha hai Dost..Just amazing..!
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«Reply #11 on: September 03, 2010, 09:15:23 PM »
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Kask .. kask ....... yaar tehe dil se shukriya ....

Ur too Gud yaar.......

Agar main ladka hoti na main teri deewani ho jati yaar ...(kidding)

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sahi kaha kapil ...behad khubsurat likha hai neel ne....

aur utna hi khubsurat tumhara jawab hai...

neel keep writing and enjoy every feel of writing...

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«Reply #12 on: September 03, 2010, 09:42:02 PM »
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Shkriya Parvez ji .... i already mention thousand times muze likhna nahi aata aur yeh saach hai ...... its jst feelings for my friend usne kuch likha uska jawab tha ... nothng else ..... muze jaida technalities nahi pata haan aapki updates aise hi milti rehi to jarror nikhar ayenga ...

Thnks apne mere liye waqt nikla

Neel Jee If you don't mind aapko hum batate hai ke hume bhi kuch likhana karna nahi aata tha, bus aise hi humare dost hume sikhate gaye aur humne kabhi kisi ki baat ka bura nahi mana aur sikhate gaye.... Knowlegde bantne se badhta hai..... aapko jahan jahan baat samjh meiN aayi use mind meiN rakhiye jahaan objection laga khul kar kahiye.... isse aap ki knowledge badhengi..... and aapki writting skill meiN bhi nikhaar aata jayenga and shayari ko bhi aap thik se samjhne lageNgi... Hope aapko humari kisi baat ka buraa nahi laga hoNga....

So keep writting and keep posting ....
Keep smiling....
May God bless You alway's         

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«Reply #13 on: September 03, 2010, 10:18:05 PM »
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I dont mynd anything Parwez ji .......

U r ryt & i also beleive in dis ..... so dont worry abt anything jst chill...... i m very mcuh fyn ...... i told u nikhar to aynga hi agar koi batne vala ho ...

baki ek guzarish hai app se ki har baat ko ap technicaly na le ke feel se dekhonge to aapka dekhne ke andaz badal jaynga aur ap dossre ki feel ko feel kar paonge ....

Keep smiling ............
Keep telling .........

Neel Jee If you don't mind aapko hum batate hai ke hume bhi kuch likhana karna nahi aata tha, bus aise hi humare dost hume sikhate gaye aur humne kabhi kisi ki baat ka bura nahi mana aur sikhate gaye.... Knowlegde bantne se badhta hai..... aapko jahan jahan baat samjh meiN aayi use mind meiN rakhiye jahaan objection laga khul kar kahiye.... isse aap ki knowledge badhengi..... and aapki writting skill meiN bhi nikhaar aata jayenga and shayari ko bhi aap thik se samjhne lageNgi... Hope aapko humari kisi baat ka buraa nahi laga hoNga....

So keep writting and keep posting ....
Keep smiling....
May God bless You alway's        


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«Reply #14 on: September 04, 2010, 09:27:33 PM »
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Bahut bahut shukriya Neel ji aur aapne bhi bahut khoob likha hai...!!!

Haan bula ke liye ho t likhna bi padega na janab .......... Tum jante ho ki maine yaha aah ke likhna shuru kiya tha aur yehi pe band bi ho gaya ....... i learnt a lot from here .... app saab logon ko pad pad ke main bi kuch jo ban padta hai likh deti hoon ... anywyz thnx a lot ......... dekho main kya kuch miss kar rehi thi .........

Kya khoob likha hai .......... Jst " KAMAL" .........
SUpreb!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

soch main daal diya aab iska reply kya karon yaar ....... bhut mushkil kaam dete ho karne ke liye ......

Gila bi apno se hota hai aur shkiyaat bi
Begano se to rusva hua nahi karte ....
Dosti hoti hai to aise hoti hai ki
Judai main bi dil juda hua nahi karte ...

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